The overall effect is good, which shows that you have also worked hard in this aspect.
Let me talk about my humble opinion:
1. The words Liu, Chi, Shi, Jiu, Tian and Bai are well written, but you need to pay more attention to the strokes. change.
2. The words "ri", "xiang", "kan", "bu" and "luo" are written too tightly and too restrictively, so please relax; "furnace", "smoke", "waterfall", "chuan", "silver" and "river" (three points) (Wrong calligraphy) These words are too loose. They should be more compact.
3. The horizontal strokes of the characters Sheng, Gua, Zhi, and San are stiff. Let’s think about it more carefully!
4. The vertical hook strokes of "钅" and "Gen" in the silver character are repeated. Special attention should be paid to this kind of strokes. There must be changes in the same strokes.
5. The character "飞" is written in traditional Chinese, while other characters are written in simplified Chinese. Remember: Traditional and simple are unified!
6. It is recommended that you continue to strengthen your copybook practice.
To sum up, the above is purely my humble opinion. Please forgive me if it offends me!