Please evaluate this kind of calligraphy art.

The composition is a bit crowded, and the end of each stroke is a bit messy, such as the hook of the rough word, the edge of the German double is a bit big (stealing the camera), the hook of the word and the last stroke of the object word are all messy. Is the pen bad? Or is this the habit of writing? The whole word is very powerful and I have been practicing for a long time. But the style is not very high.