Judging from the picture, the strokes are well practiced, but the grasp of the frame structure of the entire font still needs to be strengthened.
Among them, the words "志", "西", "waste", "raise", "set" and "silkworm" are well structured, but there are also shortcomings. For example, the structure of the word "mo" is too loose, and the word "vulgar" is too loose. The center of gravity of the character is unstable, and the proportions of the left and right parts of the character "Qi" are not well arranged. etc.
From the whole article, you attach great importance to the practice of strokes. This is of course a good thing, but the overall structure of the characters is the most important thing. Practicing strokes before mastering the overall structure of the characters is actually a misunderstanding among many calligraphy practitioners.
After you have mastered individual fonts well, you should also strengthen the overall arrangement of calligraphy throughout the text.