Judging from your above two sentences, the meaning has not changed, but in the latter, ‘上’ rhymes with ‘wave’! ~ But looking at the whole poem, the river comes from thousands of mountains, and the mountains all flow east of the river. Zhongshan is like a dragon rising to the west alone, trying to break through the huge waves and ride the long wind.
‘东’ and ‘风’ rhyme, and I always feel that the word “东风” is more appropriate. Haha! ~Actually, I don’t even understand, so don’t laugh if you’re wrong