In Hohhot, there is a shining famous school-Shuanghe Experimental Primary School. The first-class school in this city has modern teaching facilities and even students' school supplies, all of which are high-tech. For example, a desk is a computer with many functions. Students don't need a pen to write and do their homework. They say to the desk that if I want to write, the desktop will become an LCD screen and a small stick like a pen. You just need to write what you want to write on the LCD screen, and it will be displayed on the screen. If you want to print a composition or something, just press the multifunction key and say, I want to print the material. The desk became a printer. You just put the paper away and you can print it. You don't think God is magical?
This school is 100 meters high. Students take the elevator in class or after class. The teachers here are all intelligent robots, all of whom are very powerful. No matter which country you come from, you are proficient in everything. In this school, students are judged not by grades, but by encouraging comments. Therefore, students studying in this school are very relaxed, that is, everyone can become a genius, writer and artist.
This school will still be an electronics factory in the future! Students can learn a lot of skills in this electronics factory that they can't learn outside. Everyone can do what they want, such as electronic works of art, biological specimens ... In this electronic factory, you can use your smart brain to create more colorful works. In this school, all subjects in the school are completely open. Students can choose the language they want to learn, they can also use a multi-function learning computer to find all kinds of learning materials, and even have the opportunity to visit the moon!
How beautiful the school will be 50 years later! If I were a child, I would definitely go to this school to study.
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
The author of this article boldly envisions the future school for us, especially the multifunctional description of the desk is very vivid. Moreover, the high-tech technology of the electronics factory makes us yearn for it very much, hoping that the dream of the little author will come true!
School environmental protection proposal Dear school leaders,
I have lived in this beautiful school for six years, only 70 days. I am about to bid farewell to my alma mater, the spacious and bright classroom, the playground where you chase after me, the back garden where flowers bloom, and the lovely classmates that day. Perhaps, in these dozens of days, familiar faces, cordial greetings and beautiful flowers will fade away in my memory, and all good things will be covered with a thin veil.
Although the campus is full of flowers and birds, there are still some unsatisfactory places: in some hidden corners of the campus, it is not difficult for us to hand out some pieces of paper. Whenever I see this, I can't help but think of some students who use shredded paper as fairy flowers ... Besides, there are many wastes on campus. Some students make mistakes and tear off the whole paper without using an eraser, knead it into a ball and throw it away. When the repairman fished out some rubbish, red scarf and wrapping paper in the toilet, the students all smiled casually. Is it a contribution to the school to waste at will and not talk about civilization? In this regard, I want to make this beautiful flower of the school more colorful and eye-catching, and put forward the following suggestions to the school leaders:
1. On campus, leaders praised and encouraged "Top Ten Outstanding Environmental Defenders" on the radio. Let the students take an active part in this activity and do their best to clean the school.
2. Spend a class every Monday, and educate every student on garbage classification with animated videos or oral communication time to enhance students' awareness and attention to environmental protection.
3. Let the students who perform particularly well in the school every year educate those students who have no higher understanding of environmental protection and set an example for them.
4. The school can also realize the method of "picking up garbage, winning prizes and scoring points" to motivate students, so that those students who have not been rated as excellent environmental defenders will not be discouraged and make persistent efforts!
I hope the school leaders can see this little suggestion I handed in during their busy schedules, and I also hope that my little suggestion can add a color to the school.
Class six (*) Tang
20 1 1-4- 19
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
This is a letter to the school leaders, in which the author makes suggestions and suggestions for the development of the school with sincere language and sincere mentality. The author can make the language convincing and intriguing from the realistic problems.
The school story ended before it reached its climax.
It's always as beautiful as summer flowers at first,
The ending is always as beautiful as the autumn moon.
All the endings have been written,
All the tears came out,
Just,
But suddenly I forgot how it started,
In summer, when the summer solstice never comes.
No matter how much I pursue it,
In the bow of memory,
There is always a tide that can't calm down.
Sunset is always as beautiful as sunrise,
Youth always sighs with age.
I have to admit,
Youth is a kind of beautiful sadness.
Turn the yellowed title page over one page,
Fate has bound it badly.
I watched it again and again with tears in my eyes.
Walking in the fleeting time,
I know,
People who know each other, know each other and know each other are not necessarily together.
That hair, dancing lightly with the wind;
That tear condenses into no regrets.
One day we will no longer be sad, because we have completed the scheduled gathering like butterflies.
Think of tears as meteors, people as warmth, paleness as crystals, and reality as dreams. Even if you are a little clever, you should turn a blind eye to the imperfect things.
Night, so quiet, so quiet that you can hear your heartbeat, the blood in the atrium slowly flows back to the ventricle, and so on.
Yes, perhaps the sadness of youth is more than the light, so young people always weave fleeting dreams in nameless sadness, always shed a touch of unspeakable sadness in the lonely dusk, and always sigh the passage of time in the faint dusk. Who knows, in this season, wind and rain make us grow, and failure makes us forge ahead. Because we are young, we can carry the bronze mirror of history, hold the bright torch, and go to the place where the sun rises with the dream of youth, let the wind and sand take away our troubles, let our nostalgia be engraved in time, let the sea water dilute our hearts, let the stars remember our long-cherished wishes and forget the sadness on the other side of our youth. ...
In this fleeting time, we marionettes manipulated by the goddess of time are not afraid of the fetters of that line.
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
This is a narrative prose, and the author sincerely narrates his youth with complicated feelings. The language is unpretentious, the narrative is clear and eloquent. Arousing readers' interest in reading, the transition is natural, and Zhang Xianzhi's feelings are in the scene, and the scene blends.
The school in my heart, the campus in my heart, is a city without walls, which makes us ecstatic.
Nowadays, there are more or less things guarding the school, maybe railings, maybe walls, maybe buildings. Every morning, the school gate opens on time and students flock to it. After a while, the door slammed again, like a whale swallowing plankton suddenly closed its mouth. Next thing you know, we're isolated. We "read only sage books and don't listen to things outside the window." The hope of the motherland in the future has become a narcissistic flower in the corner of Bing Xin's works. Cities without walls lead to all directions, and all corners of the country also lead here. This is where information meets. So, we cheered and flew to the distance in the information. In my campus, there must be forests, which make us grow. Some people say that we are flowers in the greenhouse and can't stand the wind and rain. But did the flowers stay in the greenhouse voluntarily? Not really! How can a small flowerpot, a handful of soil lacking nutrients and a little synthetic nutrient solution meet all the needs of flowers? ! Without a strong body, how can flowers stand the sun and rain? In the forest, our feet step on the black soil, our thoughts absorb the rain in the sky, and our hands reach out to the scorching sun. So, we grew up and stood proudly in adversity.
The campus in my heart should have the sea, which makes people open-minded.
Haizi once said, "Facing the sea, bloom is warm in spring." The sea, I don't know how many vicissitudes it has experienced and how many ups and downs it has tasted, but it still flows and flows. The sand at the bottom of the sea is as fine as water dripping from your fingertips. If trouble is a rock, then the sea will embrace it with a broad mind. Standing by the sea, looking at the distance, I suddenly lit a fire in my heart and burned all the unhappiness. The sea contains countless knowledge, which always impacts your heart. Therefore, we travel and create in the ocean of books.
There must be everything on campus in my heart, and everything will give my imagination wings.
There should be a heaven and earth in my campus, and heaven and earth will set us free.
The campus in my heart is so natural, as if it were outside the city. When you walk into the campus, you walk into the world.
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
The beginning of the composition is concise, full of passion, the language is lively, the lines between the lines reveal fresh life breath and children's interest, and the end is imaginative and rhythmic, which makes people want to read and love to read.
There is a kind of beauty called maternal love, which is a radical source and nourishes my dry heart. Motherly love is a huge haven, sheltering from the wind and rain. Ah, there is a kind of beauty called maternal love.
A mother's love is like water, and a father loves a mountain. Yes, it is because of that beautiful maternal love that I can grow from a tender bud into a lush tree; It is because of that wonderful maternal love that I can get rid of childishness and mature. Ah, that beautiful maternal love grew with me.
When you were a child, you were young and beautiful, and you couldn't stand my little mischief. I'm naughty as a toddler. I always stumble through potholes and mud. This is because you have broken your heart for me and have to follow me everywhere. Sometimes even you laugh at me, because I'm such a bitch. Every time I see you in such a mess, you not only get angry, but also throw me aside and laugh with me all the time. Ah! Even if you are so embarrassed, I still feel that there is a kind of beauty called maternal love.
Gradually, under your careful care, I grew up. I also have my own opinion, I got rid of childishness and became mature ... and this time, I changed. ......
Because of my willfulness, I have given you a lot of trouble. You are always worried about me day and night, which is very burdensome. As for me, I also think your chatter is boring. Your careful care in the past has now turned into nagging. Before long, wrinkles have climbed up your face, and a few silver wires have gradually appeared behind that ear. ......
Now, you are old, years have already taken away your youth, and those hands full of vicissitudes are still holding up the sky for me and letting me soar.
Silver silk has witnessed your hard work, wrinkles show your old age, but your hand has never let go, and you have been holding my tender little hand tightly. Although you are not young, I am more sure of my childhood view: there is a kind of beauty called maternal love.
Ah, there is a kind of beauty called maternal love.
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
This essay vividly shows the great love of mother in affectionate language, and is full of affection with concrete examples. Sincere feelings and rich connotations. "Silver silk has witnessed your hard work, wrinkles show your old age, but your hand has never been loose, and you have been holding my tender little hand tightly. Although you are not young, I am more sure of my childhood view: there is a kind of beauty called maternal love. " It is also a hymn to mother's love.
School beautician School beautician-Master Shen
In our beautiful campus, there is an "invisible man". This "invisible man" wears several hats and works hard. He is neither in the classroom nor in the playground. He seems to be with us, but he seems to be out of it. He is our school worker, Miss Shen.
Master Shen gets up early every day all year round and works tirelessly. But after a long time, his hair turned slightly white, stuck together and looked messy. The weather-beaten face is dark and shiny, and crystal beads of sweat are always piled up on his forehead. A pair of eyes that should be bright are now hidden in their eyes. It seems that there are many secrets, but it is full of kindness and love. Master Shen always wears only an original old man's shirt and a pair of brown trousers, which records his 18 years of hard work and sweat and is a witness of his efforts.
Sweep the floor, mop the floor and make flowers and plants. So much work is what Master Shen has to do in 365 days.
I remember one time, I was late for rehearsal. Passing the patio building, I saw Master Shen dragging the stairs with difficulty, and the veins stood out from his arm to his back. His seemingly thin arms can pull the ground powerfully.
Suddenly, Master Shen bent down and picked it up with his nails. I took a closer look and found that it was a classmate who threw chewing gum. Suddenly, a clear voice sounded in my ear. It turned out that Master Shen's nails had been cut off, but he ignored his own pain and continued to buckle them up. After a while, the bubble gum finally fell off, and Master Shen's nervous face relaxed. At this time, an off-duty teacher came down and stepped on the ground that Master Shen had just dragged. Before the teacher apologized to Master Shen, Master Shen smiled and waved his hand and said; "Never mind, I'll put it off." Say that finish, and quickly picked up the mop and dragged it up.
In this way, Master Shen entrusts 18 to take 408 stairs every day, which is very simple for an ordinary young man, but it is astronomical for an old man who is nearly 60 years old!
Master Shen, they all say that you are an "invisible man", but in my heart, you will always be a kind grandfather!
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
This is an article describing "beauticians in schools". After reading your article, the teacher seems to see a rough figure mopping the floor with a big mop in his hand. The author's admiration for the school staff is beyond words. The full-text language is fluent, natural and vivid, which is a good exercise.
Gratitude for the splendor of school flowers is inseparable from the gardener's watering. Every little achievement I have made on the road of growth is inseparable from the hard cultivation of school teachers.
Set sail
I am a newcomer, and everything is so strange. I stood timidly at the door of the classroom with my schoolbag in my arms and looked inside carefully. No matter how my parents persuade me, I dare not move a step in the classroom. My parents were anxious and dragged me into the classroom. "I don't want it, I don't want it!" I cried.
This is, a warm hand gently wiped away tears for me. When I opened my eyes, a sweet smile appeared in front of me. I smiled through tears and was led into the classroom by her.
She is my first teacher, Miss Zhang. Her appearance made me know the interest of knowledge for the first time. The most basic knowledge she taught became the sail of my learning boat and took me to the boundless ocean of knowledge.
Raise a sail
She has a sharp voice, short hair and neat work. This is one of the teachers, Miss Zhou.
In the third grade, we went to school in Yifu Building. On the first day of school, when I saw this teacher, I couldn't help liking her.
Her love permeates all aspects of me and takes care of me in my studies.
Whenever I pick up a book and ask her a question, no matter how annoyed and busy she is, she will put down her work and explain it to me happily. She respects me and never blames me.
She raised a high sail for me. In the ocean of knowledge, my boat can sail as fast as possible.
riding the winds and breaking the waves
Teacher Wu's severity is unimaginable. I have always been held in the palm of my hand. When I first got to the sixth grade, I really didn't adapt.
His dissatisfaction with me prompted me to study harder. In Chinese class, he can blurt out many famous sentences, and many celebrities only know it at this time.
I often complain that he is very tricky to me, because I never know the questions he asks, but now I think about it, I understand that it is these small setbacks that make me dare to face the wind and rain without fear.
My teacher, not only the above three, but every teacher in the school is my mentor. They are tireless in teaching and educating people, and always pay more than they get. There are so many excellent students because of them.
In the future, no matter where I live, I will never forget her-Huang Xiao!
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
In the form of subheadings, the author of this paper selects typical angles from three aspects: sailing and braving the wind and waves, and highlights his gratitude to his alma mater. The article is fluent in sentences, sentences and meanings, beautiful in words and vivid in narration, which shows that the young author has good language expression ability.
How to build a safe campus with the help of campus express? Listen to a few short stories and you will understand.
First, traffic safety.
The white rabbit often looks around on the way to school. Today, it almost had an accident.
As usual, the little white rabbit looked around. It's about to cross the road. It ran across the road in desperation. Suddenly, a car passed in front of it. He backed away quickly, and his heart almost jumped out of his chest. It still has a lingering fear in class.
Second, food hygiene.
At half past ten, the students are eating nutritious meals. The teacher asked, "Mingming, do you have any questions?" Clearly replied: "teacher, this bottle of milk tastes wrong." Will it deteriorate? "
The teacher said, "Students, if you find that the package is damaged or tastes wrong, please don't use it.". You should report to the teacher in time and exchange. "
Suddenly, Qiang Qiang has a stomachache. After the teacher asked, he said seriously, "You should pay attention to food hygiene. Don't buy three-no-food and food on the stall. Now is the high incidence of diseases, and we can't pick wild fruits, wild vegetables and wild mushrooms of unknown origin. The possibility of food poisoning is very high. "
Third, recess safety.
"Teacher, Zhang Ming and Wang Yi are fighting!" The monitor rushed to the office to inform the teacher.
"You really don't let the teacher worry!" When the teacher finished speaking, he hurried to the classroom. Zhang Ming drew a picture of Wang Yizheng and completely messed up the table with one punch and one foot.
After the teacher advised the fight and asked the reason, he said earnestly, "Students should help each other more, and don't fight for a trivial matter, which is easy to cause danger and hurt people's feelings." If you can't solve anything, just ask the teacher.
During the break, some students were fighting and the teacher caught you red-handed.
"You can't fight between classes, especially in the classroom. Very easy to fall, very dangerous. " Teachers educate students.
During the break, everyone walked down the stairs in pairs. The teacher said, "You finally don't have to be a negative textbook." During the break, the road team should line up and don't rush to avoid trampling.
You and I will join hands to build a safe campus.
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
This is a "campus news" that reports the problem of "how to build a safe campus". The article comes straight to the point and leads to the following, which causes readers to think. The narrative is coherent and tortuous, with distinct levels, and the theme of "You and I work together to build a safe campus" is deepened.
Since learning "new norms" and "new standards" in campus news, students' mental outlook and campus outlook have changed greatly.
In schools, there are more and more civilized expressions, but there are fewer and fewer swearing words and dialects. Outside school, students abide by laws and regulations. When crossing the road, they take the crosswalk instead of the hurdle. Put an end to the phenomenon of sneaking into internet cafes and understand that the network is a double-edged sword. In our age of advanced science and technology, it brings us infinite convenience, but it may also bring us harm.
However, some social Internet cafes, due to lax management system, have polluted the young hearts of a batch of minors and become the chief culprit that harms young people.
Campus is a learning environment. What we need is a beautiful campus. The beauty of campus includes the beauty of campus construction and the beauty of students' words and deeds. How happy and comfortable we are to study in a clean environment.
Before this, it was often because some students scribbled and littered everywhere, polluting the original clean walkways and walls of the campus. Now, students know that they should take care of everything in the school and don't destroy pollution at will.
Life is only once, and youth is only once. Taking drugs will do great harm to your health. As teenagers, we should cherish life, pay attention to safety, exercise, pay attention to hygiene and stay away from drugs. We should repay our parents with good health and serve our motherland.
Students actively participate in various social practices and beneficial activities. "Young Eagle Holiday Team" contains songs and laughter when we are close to nature; "Small topic research" embodies the wisdom and cleverness of peers; "Science and Technology Museum" has our eyes eager for knowledge; On the bustling streets, there are more "civilized persuaders".
I believe that in the near future, the students who walk out of this campus must be good students with excellent academic performance, honesty and trustworthiness, self-esteem and self-confidence.
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
This is an emotional exercise. The author carefully showed the "Campus Express" that "the students' mental outlook and campus outlook have undergone great changes" and expressed the theme of "honesty and trustworthiness, self-esteem and self-confidence, and constant self-improvement". The title is novel and unique, full of emotion.
There are no tall buildings and beautiful gardens in our school. However, there are such charming scenery.
In spring, Miss Chun came quietly. Green pine trees spit out new leaves like needles, light green and light green. Under the breeze, it shook the branches, as if nodding and smiling at people, and the flowers around the cedar bloomed. The most attractive is the Chinese rose, some are full of flowers and bones, some are full as if they are about to burst, and some have a pink smiling face. When you come to it, there will be a fragrant smell. The bee girl is busy collecting honey, sometimes dancing in the jungle of flowers and trees; Keep humming, as if to say to people, "there is a lot of honey to eat this year." A row of drainage fir trees in front of the classroom have woken up, stretched themselves and started to work. With the help of Miss Chun, new green leaves are exposed.
The new leaves are flourishing day by day, ushered in the summer, and the cedar is already flourishing, which looks like a big umbrella from a distance. In hot weather, cedar is like an electric umbrella. The students sat under the tree to enjoy the cool. Some are playing, others are jumping rubber bands. Both sides of cedar are boxwood, just like a green belt wrapped around cedar.
In autumn, the leaves began to fall off gradually, but it ushered in the harvest season. Persimmons are hung on the persimmon tree in front of the classroom, just like small red lanterns, which bend the branches. How comfortable the students are eating this sweet and delicious persimmon!
Grandpa Qiu left quietly, and Grandpa Han came again. After a heavy snow, when you walk into the campus, you will be confused by the scenery in front of you: the playground is white, the flowers and trees are white, and the house is white. How beautiful! The heavy snow covered the whole campus with white clothes. The students came to school to have a snowball fight and played, and we forgot everything. At this time, the head is covered with snow.
Campus has brought us joy, I love our school, I love the beautiful scenery there, I love selfless dedication!
Teacher zw.Liuxue86.com commented:
This is a composition about scenery. The little author painted a beautiful picture of the school for readers through lively language. Rhetorical devices such as "Bee Girl is busy picking honey, sometimes dancing in the flowers and trees jungle" and "Cedar is flourishing and looks like a big umbrella from a distance" make the beauty of the school leap from paper, with smooth writing and reasonable structural arrangement.