The first sentence is that swimming upstream in the water is a failure. What else can be considered a high-end atmosphere? This sentence is directly reminiscent of a turtle crawling in the water. I know you mean the sun, but alas, this is the first sentence, which is very important and directly exposes the essence of soy sauce.
Wan Li's second sentence feels a bit straightforward. If the first sentence is good, it should improve the overall effect, but the first sentence is tragic, and you can see that swimming in the water is so domineering and straightforward. Obviously does not match.
The third sentence has just returned to the long river of Wan Li. Why did it suddenly flow? I don't know much about it, but I feel that mountains and rivers are a lonely and elegant artistic conception, and the world is also a lonely and miserable artistic conception. Your sentence reminds me that "a person can climb a tall building and look at the horizon" is not quite consistent with the second sentence.
In the fourth game, Jasper Sky vs Kyushu, after the high mountains and flowing water, suddenly domineering is still full of twists and turns. In short, it will feel good with some styles.
A common fault of the other four sentences is that they are too straightforward.
Your poem reminds me of a poem by the Ming emperor.
General Nan Zheng is bold and courageous, with his waist crossed by autumn water and his sword extended.
The wind blows mountains and rivers, and the lightning flashes high.
There is a unicorn in the sky. How can the ants in the cave escape?
My husband and I unbuttoned our shirts the day we came back from peace.
I feel that your level is improving to that of an emperor. Don't lose heart. The historical evaluation of the emperor's limerick is good.
My personal opinion may be all wrong, and what I write will be terrible.