Revision opinions:
The veil lingers on the moonlit night.
Lingering, lingering, this sentence means that the moonlight is hazy and surrounded by mist. If the moon is covered with gauze, it can be said that it is wrapped in gauze, but it is meaningless to cover the moonlight with gauze, so it is changed into a veil, and the moonlight is covered with gauze.
Koi fish plays with lotus flowers and koi fish sleeps with flowers.
Things like koi fish generally don't move much, and it's much quieter at night than during the day. Koi fish usually doesn't move much at night. The whole poem conveys a quiet atmosphere. It is better to sleep than to play.
A drop of dew in plain flowers, and the golden wind blows the dew.
There is a drop of dew between the flowers, but the expression is too straightforward, so there are more adjectives.
The breeze falls into the dark sky, worrying about the green waves.
This sentence is too straightforward. After a poem describes the scenery, it usually expresses some emotional feelings. The so-called borrowing scenery to express emotion, so it is changed to worrying about green waves, expressing a touch of sadness on this quiet moonlit night, which is more touching.
In addition, there is fog and dew on the moonlit night, which should have been autumn, and the lotus is near September. Pay attention to the overall situation when writing poems in the future. Later, it was changed to the words of Li Jing, a master of the Southern Tang Dynasty: Xiang Xiang sells residual green leaves, and the west wind worries about green waves. "