Among the famous articles selected from junior high school Chinese textbooks by People's Education Press, many are quoted from poems. In "Spring", Zhu Ziqing quoted "Blowing the face without cold wind" in the poem "Jueju" by a monk from Zhinan to describe the softness of the spring breeze. In order to express the scientific workers' spirit of exploration, Hao Mingjian quoted "The road is long, Xiu Yuan and Xiu Yuan are Xi, and I will go up and down to seek" in Li Sao, a poet of Chu State.
In "Litchi Honey", Yang Shuo wrote the beauty of litchi with only "300 lychees a day, but he didn't hesitate to grow up to be a Lingnan person" (from Su Shi's "A Unique Skill in Huizhou"). Some excellent compositions are also brilliant by quoting poems.
Example 1. Today's basketball game ... our class lost the last basketball game, and this is the last chance. I don't know how to feel the tragic feeling that "the wind is rustling and the water is cold, and the strong man is gone forever."
Teacher Chen's whistle sounded, and my heart tightened: "It's time to play!" "I really appreciate Mencius' efforts from' Heaven will descend to Sri Lanka, and he must first suffer his mind, his bones and muscles, his body and skin, and his body'. From "Spring silkworms will keep spinning until they die, and candles will cry dry every night", I understand the depth of responsibility. From the story of "How much love there is for every inch of grass, I get three spring rays", I understand the contribution that children make to their parents.
From a small photo of Lu Xun, I understand the broad mind of "I recommend Xuanyuan with blood" selected from Call of Responsibility 3. Looking for the ancients in Japan and China is Tao Qian's leisure to "pick chrysanthemums under the east fence and see Nanshan leisurely"; It is the magnificence of Di Wei's "bleak autumn wind and surging waves"; It is the joy of Yi 'an's "returning to the boat at night and straying into the depths of the lotus"; Releasing Weng's "Julian Waghann Beiding Central Plains Day, Family Sacrifice Never Forgets" is a free and easy way; Looking for the past in Japan and China is the firmness of "clothes are getting wider and wider, never regret, and languish for Iraq"; "The Arctic court does not change, and the western hills steal from each other" is Du Gongbu's confidence; It is a surprise of "looking for her with thousands of Baidu, suddenly looking back".
-from "Classic Plot" 4. I found a kind of pride in "the great river does not return, the waves are exhausted, and the eternal romantic figures"; "When is the moon in spring? How much do you know about the past? " I found a way to look back; "I made an appointment not to come in the middle of the night, knocked on a chess piece and fell to my death." I found a silence; "I smile at the sky from the horizontal knife, leaving two Kunlun mountains in my liver and gallbladder." I found a kind of heroism; "Clear water produces hibiscus, and carving is natural." I found a simple. -"Pursuing Your Dreams" These paragraphs are all selected from the perfect composition of the senior high school entrance examination.
It is precisely because the author makes good use of poetic sentences that the language of the article is bright and poetic, such as the refreshing and exciting smell of tea. It also makes the author's thoughts penetrate into some classic plots and become more and more heavy.
It better reflects the candidates' literary accumulation and accomplishment, giving people a refreshing feeling. This is also the main reason why these articles can stand out from many compositions.
There are many ways to add icing on the cake at the end of a poem, or to summarize the whole text to reveal the main idea; Or show the future to boost morale; Or express your feelings to enhance the appeal of the article; Or the language is implicit, making readers cover their books and daydream. 1, quoting the end of a poem, has a strong appeal and often gives readers a strong sense of regret.
For example, according to the sea and heaven, at the end: "Didn't you see how the water of the Yellow River came out of the sky into the sea and never came back?" . You can't see the lovely hair in the bright mirror of the high room. Although it is silky black in the morning, it has turned into snow at night. "
Time flies like water, time flies like electricity. Perhaps, only history can make the "inscription on the tombstone without words" full. Perhaps, only history can best interpret Zeng Guofan's sentence of writing down his life's mood when the sky is broken and the yellow robe is about to be added: leaning on the sky shines countless flowers on the sea, the water is high, and the heart knows itself. Candidates quote Li Bai's poems and Zeng Guofan's own poems as the conclusion, which further deepens the author's point of view and leaves readers with endless reflection.
2. Use the philosophical characteristics of famous poems to summarize the full text and deepen the theme. Good poems and your good articles are icing on the cake, and people will agree with you after reading your articles.
This has played a "finishing touch" role. At the end of the junior high school Chinese textbook "Pear Blossoms in the Post Road", I wrote: "I look at these energetic Hani girls and the white pears, and I can't help but think of a poem:' Pears in the Post Road are everywhere'."
This ending not only describes the natural pear flower, but also describes the futile spirit of Lei Feng, which takes care of the theme in structure, deepens the theme in content and has rich implications. Quoting poems skillfully closes the full text, which is memorable and thought-provoking.
This is the charm of quoting poetry. If the beginning and end of the article can flexibly quote poems and echo them back and forth, the effect will be better.
For example, in 2003, the perfect composition "Youth Sorrow" was written like this. Beginning: Xin Qiji once sang such a sentence: "Teenagers don't know the taste of sorrow and fall in love with the floor;" Fall in love with the floor, say worry gives new words. "
Our cross-century teenagers have long tasted sadness. This is not "arguing irrationally", but "telling the truth", which is a heavy burden for us young students every day.
..... Conclusion: But in any case, I still want to say to all the students who "don't know what to worry about" and have tasted the taste of worry: "Teenagers should understand the taste of worry, look forward to it, never forget it and never be afraid of it." -Xin Qiji was quoted at the beginning; The ending is flexible and plays a sublimation role; Of course, when quoting poetry, it must be natural and harmonious, and never quote for the sake of quoting.
In a word, clever quotations and flexible use of ancient poems can make your composition language vivid, and also show the author's profound literary accomplishment and unusual writing skills. I hope that teachers can guide students to accumulate more famous sentences flexibly, which can not only make students' compositions shine, but also carry forward our classical culture and make ancient poetry shine today.
2. How to write a composition for children with rich associations, delicate language and full emotions? This paper analyzes whether the content is specific, whether the sentence is fluent, whether the emotion is true, whether the center is prominent, whether it is off topic, and whether the language is vivid. , point out the shortcomings of the exercise and make suggestions to encourage students. The requirements should not be too high. We should look at their exercises with children's eyes! Word tracking
A, the notebook is beautiful and neat, just like the street in a seaside town, but it is not dirty ... The straight handwriting makes people really comfortable to read ... Your calligraphy is as beautiful as printed ... I am ashamed that my calligraphy is not as good as yours. ...
B, whatever, the handwriting doesn't look like a cat's ... The handwriting isn't in the middle of the grid, of course it doesn't look pleasing to the eye ... Is it because the wind is too strong today, and your handwriting is blown like this ... I don't believe that your handwriting is not good, and you will keep scribbling ... carefully and patiently, and you will write better than me. ...
Internal capacity
A, such a rich content is almost the same as that written by a writer ... Your practice is flesh and blood, which is really a great enjoyment to read ... Your composition is very specific, which I enjoy reading ... You must love reading documents at ordinary times, so you can write so many words. ...
B, the dry content is like boiled water, and there is no taste at all. A little more kind words would be delicious ... not as good as Vivienne Liu's words (or the names of other poor students). Don't you feel a little embarrassed ... your composition is like a 90-year-old woman's mouth, dry and empty, and it leaks straight. ...
sentence
A, fluent and vivid sentences, like Lushan Waterfall, are very fluent ... The metaphor is very appropriate, which shows that you have been carefully observing ... How did you come up with such a clever anthropomorphic sentence ... How appropriate this rhetorical question is used here ... This exclamatory sentence expresses your true feelings at that time ... The ancient poems are quoted just right, and I will use the poems I have learned in my composition in the future. ...
B, the composition is bumpy, and it is very uncomfortable to read, just like walking on a bumpy road in the country, you will easily fall down if you are not careful ... The sentence seems to be cut off and incomplete ... After you read it carefully, you will find that it doesn't make sense ... Don't be afraid of trouble, good articles have been changed ... You can't always expect others to help you change it, but learn to modify every sentence yourself. ...
First, the division of labor among the parts is clear ... these parts are properly divided ... each part has a meaning and different paragraphs. ...
B, the level is chaotic, there are too many sections, and I feel breathless when I read them ... There are too few sections, and I can't bear to add more ... The middle part can be divided into several parts ... The first part and the second part should not be separated, so we should merge them ... This part can't be related to the above parts. ...
give exact information
First, highlight the key points ... The key parts are written in detail, which is good ... The events are described in detail ... The scenic spots are described in the order of sightseeing, and the key points are ...
3. How to write comments on children's compositions? Composition evaluation should judge students' self-confidence.
Evaluation is an important part of composition teaching, and commenting on students' compositions is the finishing touch. The traditional composition evaluation is mostly formulaic and modular, such as whether the center is clear, whether the key points are prominent, whether the details are appropriate, whether the levels are clear, whether the sentences are fluent and so on. Such comments can often be placed in any composition of any student, which ignores the requirements of cultivating and developing people, not only
So, how should we write comments on students' compositions?
Psychology tells us that all students have a desire to be understood? Being noticed? The psychology of being cared for. In today's quality education, it is necessary for the class teacher to write a humanized, literary and personalized final appraisal. Composition evaluation should be more literary, spiritual and emotional. In this way, it is particularly important for teachers to make full use of the power of love in composition evaluation and give students good expectations and sincere love. Diary. Only by using the wonderful environment of "sneaking into the night with the wind and moistening things silently" can we nourish students' hearts.
First, the evaluation is loose, not too high.
The new curriculum standard points out in the Teaching Suggestion that composition teaching should "provide favorable conditions and broad space for students to write independently, reduce the constraints on students' writing, and encourage free expression and creative expression." Then, can we also get rid of the shackles of rules and regulations and give students room to play freely when correcting compositions?
In traditional teaching, due to the high requirements for students' composition and the rigid comments of teachers, students have a fear of writing and feel that writing is a very difficult and bitter thing. In fact, primary school students are only beginners and beginners, and their compositions are mostly semi-finished products, which is normal. Students cannot be required by literary standards. After students work hard to finish a composition, they all hope to be affirmed and praised by the teacher. Therefore, write more encouraging words in composition evaluation, and try to avoid some cold and critical comments, such as "the sentence is not fluent, the organization is not clear, and the center is not clear", which will dampen children's writing enthusiasm.
I never hesitate to praise my composition. Even if my classmates' works reveal their true feelings, I will praise them vigorously and let him know that he can also write good articles. Let the whole class know that only by writing the true feelings into the composition can we write a good article. As long as there are some merits in students' works, they can learn from him and provide him with the opportunity to read their articles in front of the whole class. This kind of encouragement can often make students in the future.
As a teacher, if we can be generous and tolerant, get a higher score, turn blame into encouragement, and replace criticism with praise, students will be confident, positive and willing to write.
4. Ask for quotations from ancient poems or famous sayings. At the beginning of the composition, the teacher asked us to collect five quotations from ancient poems or 1, "The sword is sharpened, and the fragrance of plum blossoms comes from bitter cold." Everything can only succeed if it goes through difficulties and obstacles. Since I experienced that incident, I suddenly understood this truth. (The following is to write about that event. ) 2. "Only a mother is good in the world, and a child with a mother is like a baby." On the occasion of Mother's Day, let's have a holiday for our mother! 3. "If the young don't work hard, the old will be sad." We should cherish the present time and study hard so that we can achieve something in the future. 4. "Perseverance makes a stone open." In our life, only through unremitting efforts can we succeed. 5. "Friendship is the bright light of our life." Ever since I read Charlotte,
5. How to write a composition evaluation set for primary school students?
1. You are very good at observing life and can keenly capture meaningful moments; You are a student with great potential.
2. The language of the article is fluent, which also shows the teacher's feelings. You are the teacher's bosom friend. I hope we can learn from each other and collect a bunch of fragrant flowers in the garden of literature.
Sorry, the teacher didn't understand this paragraph. Would you like to explain it to the teacher again? Thank you.
Your handwriting is neat and beautiful. Teachers should learn from you. If the material selection of the article is novel, it will definitely complement the writing style. what do you reckon ?
5. Great! Your article reproduces the simplicity and frankness of the northeast people, which makes readers feel refreshed. The language is extremely fluent, and the use of synaesthesia is particularly clever. Your writing style is conquering and attractive. Work hard and create more glory!
6. Your article is like a slow stream, delicate and smooth. Beautiful writing, sincere and delicate feelings, very personal style. May you continue to pick the waves of life on the road of writing and make your style more perfect!
6. Teach you how to quote poems in your composition (turn) and teach you how to quote poems in your composition. In the writings of ancient poets, grass often represents the poet's feelings. It can show exuberant vitality and make people admire its strong spirit, such as: "Wildfire never completely burned them, and they are tall again in the spring breeze"; It can represent vibrant spring and make people feel the vitality of beautiful spring, such as: "In February and March in Yangchun, grass and water are the same color"; You can also express sadness and sadness. When you see lush vegetation, you will think of life and express your feelings of melancholy. For example, "Every tree in Hanyang becomes clear in the water, and Nautilus Island is a nest of herbs."
We quote poems to express our feelings in our compositions, which can add icing on the cake and add a lot of color to the articles. How to use poetry in the text? I believe students will understand after reading the following examples: Example 1: In spring, everything seems to be full of vitality.
You see, the willow branches swaying in the wind, "Jasper makeup trees are high, and thousands of green tapestries hang down." I don't know who cut off the thin leaves. The spring breeze in February is like scissors. "
Beautiful! The grass that grows happily under the spring rain, "The rain in the sky is crisp, but the grass color is far away." Cool! Flowers competing to open, "Wait for the east wind, colorful is always spring."
Wonderful! When you are enjoying this beautiful scenery, there may be some naughty Mao Mao rain like cows' hair, needles, filaments and children. "Jiangnan has a lot of grass in February, and it is drizzling in spring." Strange! There is also the gentle and cool wind, and the spring rain is also on the stage by the ancient canal.
"I want apricot flowers to get wet and my face is not cold." Cool! In spring, it is impossible to have no children. Look, those children are running happily, trying to catch the butterfly, but they can't find it. "The children rushed after Huang Die and flew into the cauliflower."
Fun! Look over there, some of them are still flying kites. "The children came back from school early, so they were busy flying kites in the east wind." Music! Ex. 2: The most beautiful part of Humble Administrator's Garden is the lotus pond.
"Lotus can be picked in the south of the Yangtze River, where is the lotus leaf?" This sentence has been chanted for the lotus for countless times. The three lotus ponds in the Humble Administrator's Garden have their own strange songs, and the spacious but not empty garden scenery is built according to the lotus pond. Large tracts of clear lotus leaves are strewn at random, red and white lotus flowers are in bud, delicate and charming, and graceful in a green ocean, like a girl.
There is no more vivid description than Zhou Bangyan's "The leaves are dry and rainy, the water surface is clear and round, and the wind and the lotus blow at one stroke". Being in the lotus pond and watching dragonflies fly around reminds me of the classic sentence in Yang Wanli's Little Pond: "Xiao He just showed his sharp corner, and dragonflies have long stood on his head."
Every step is a new landscape, a portrayal of the humble administrator's garden, surrounded by lotus flowers and willow trees on three sides. Happy, I always miss you infinitely, like white clouds miss the blue sky, like grass is infatuated with the earth, like trees take root and sprout.
Once upon a time, I was so naughty and naive that I still linger in my mind ... "In February and March, grass and water were the same color." I put on bright clothes and walked leisurely among the flowers and plants, watching the fragrance of spring and feeling the scenery of "the sky is raining and the grass is near and not far"; In summer, I wear printed vest shorts to run among the small trees, stop by the noisy pond, and watch the perfect atmosphere of "trees are overgrown and grass is lush" and "leaves are endless and lotus flowers are of different colors". In autumn, the ancient canal adds a sense of calm and atmosphere. I stepped on the golden field, watching the fiery maple leaves "stop to sit in the maple forest late, and the frost leaves are red in February flowers", listening to the touching story of fallen leaves returning to their roots and feeling the magnificence of "bleak autumn wind and rough waves"; In winter, I miss being wrapped in white, looking at the colors of heaven and earth, and feeling the magnificence of "thousands of miles frozen, Wan Li snowing". Spring is green, summer is red, autumn is golden, winter is white, and my childhood is colorful.
In the above three examples, the learned poems are properly applied to paragraphs to express the author's feelings. These poems, like beautiful pictures and close-ups, left a deep impression on readers. There is a poem that says, "How can the canal be so clear, because there is running water at the source." If you can quote the classics, you will certainly achieve wonderful articles.