From a vague memory to the lush years, there are many moments left in the imprint of life, which let us have a long aftertaste. At that moment, maybe I got rid of my troubles, maybe I got an unexpected surprise, maybe I realized the warmth of my family, maybe I shocked the great power of nature, "At that moment, I shed tears", "At that moment, I grew up", "At that moment, I was really great", "At that moment, my heart was broken", "At that moment, my world was in full bloom" and so on. Requirements:
1. Capture the details of life and write down your inner changes at that moment. 2. Except poetry, the style is not limited. 3. No less than 600 words.
4. There must be no real place names, school names or names in the text. 5. Writing should be correct, standardized and beautiful. Exam guide:
1, with "I" as the center, you must write your own personal experience and experience, which is suitable for writing narratives or essays.
2. "That moment" is the difficulty of this article. "That moment" is time-limited, that is, time is short and instant. You can write about what happened in a day or even longer, but you must write it out. The narrative before "that moment" serves the emotional and psychological changes that happened at that moment.
"That moment" is a detail, a close-up, a painting, a moving scene, the condensation of "truth, goodness and beauty" and the shock brought by "falsehood, ugliness and ugliness". Focus on small things, focus on writing a detail, a plot, and then write it thoroughly. Pay attention to capture the details of those flashes and write the real experiences and feelings. Only in this way can we "make a difference."
The article should grasp the specific situation of emotional changes and the specific stage of story development (climax), or describe the scene, or do a good job of rendering the atmosphere and describe the unique heartbeat. Try to avoid singing lullabies to the marking teacher. Preparing for the exam late at night, the elderly grandmother quietly served a cup of coffee; My mother who was ill in hospital accompanied me, and "I" found that my mother gave birth to white hair early; When I failed in the exam, I went home depressed. My mother didn't blame me. A comforting long story ... the marking teacher can know the ending after reading the beginning. How can I have a good impression? The "moment" you describe must be without me, with me, in order to resonate with readers. A student wrote Lobster Fishing. The theme is not novel, but the "heart flutter" after fishing is very unique-after an old lobster caught was put into the washbasin, dozens of crayfish emerged from the abdomen and played carefree. As soon as there was any movement, crayfish suddenly got into the belly of the old lobster, and the old lobster raised its claws warily and swore to defend its children ... "So" I "picked up the washbasin and poured dozens of lives into it. This kind of "heart flutter" is far away from what others say, injecting unique humanistic connotation, and the perspective is novel and unexpected, which really makes readers "heart beat".
For example, "I will always remember that moment."
Inscriptions refer to ancient words carved on objects to warn themselves or state their achievements. From this point of view, what seems to be "remembered" must have the significance of vigilance and admiration, and it has the power to impress people, not some personal grievances that make them feel bitter. "Jiang" means to emphasize that "that moment" has passed and candidates should dig.
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Show the meaning of that moment to the future; "Forever" emphasizes the lasting shock to people's hearts at that moment.
Another example: "At that moment, my world is in full bloom" and "My world" generally refers to the emotional field and the spiritual world. If my world is understood as the "world" displayed by my hobby, it is acceptable as long as it can show its beauty. "Spring blossoms" is the limit of conception. This phrase has many metaphorical meanings, such as moving, warmth, happiness, self-confidence, pride, sense of accomplishment, happiness and brightness? It's all in there. "Spring Blossoms" also includes the display of details. If your article is only depressed, depressed and self-abased, it doesn't touch on "spring blossoms", or it lacks details despite changes in your heart, it doesn't meet the requirements of the topic.
Another example: "At that moment, I cried."
"Tears" is an inevitable requirement for the essence of things. It is necessary to explain clearly this thing that makes "I" feel tears obviously, and to organically combine narrative with lyric discussion later. In addition, the article should control the occasion of tears, and it is best to flow naturally with the climax of emotions at the end of the article. The choice of materials should be as young as possible. For example, a classmate returned the 10 yuan he found to himself, or helped him sweep the floor. I was so excited that I burst into tears. This kind of article may really make you cry, but it is unlikely to make readers cry. The materials should be selected as far as possible in the "sensitive" areas of human emotion Wang Yang-affection, friendship, teacher-student relationship, etc., and the materials should be selected as far as possible in the key points of life turning point.
3. True feelings are a condition for moving the article, but with true feelings, you may not be really moved. There is also a question of how to express it. When writing, you should try your best to express your feelings through scene description and event narration, and try your best to use artistic techniques such as detail description and rendering to make people unforgettable. Otherwise, your emotional expression is not only touching, but also hypocritical.
Students, many waves in life will move us, which is the external expression of true feelings, from the experience of life, from the perception of life. Without goodwill, you can't feel unforgettable friendship; Without gratitude, you can't feel touching affection; Without loyalty, you can't understand love until death do us part? It is difficult for a cold and numb soul to let the waves of life inhabit the depths of the soul, so it is difficult to get a profound and rich emotional experience. But once we experience life with a delicate and sensitive heart, you will find that mountains and rivers have feelings and plants know what they mean?
Appreciation of excellent works:
At that moment, my heart beat.
When I was a child, I always went to school by a sandy road. There used to be a sand mine nearby, probably because it hasn't moved for a long time. There are many reeds growing on the beach, so we often stay there to play. You can catch a bug, but I really can't remember its name. But after some frolicking, I suddenly had some respect for it. .......
It is another sunny day. In the afternoon, I went to school with a full stomach and passed the sand. The breeze blew and the reed leaves moved, and I felt very comfortable. I really feel a little hot. Anyway, the class was still early, so I took a nap there. Suddenly, several bugs appeared in front of me. I caught one easily with skillful movements. First of all, I cut off a thigh and broke the inner wing to make it fly, which is neither feasible nor difficult. Then I put it on the ground, and I squatted there and looked carefully. The little guy is really fierce, dragging the residual body and walking hard, walking slowly. It is really interesting to watch it move and curl up. I'm getting farther and farther away. I want to run, but I can't. I blocked its direction with my hand, he turned around, and I turned around, leaving it with no way out. But I found it very clever and learned to play dead, but how could it escape my eyes?
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Is it easy? Then kick it into the sand. It's not bad, but it should be enough to suffocate it. I didn't expect this guy to really "drag" out. It is delicious. I like it! I was about to have a big fight with it. I found it was getting late, so I dug a deep pit, put it in, buried it and let it die. I don't care anyway. The next morning, I also left early, passing by the sand, and suddenly remembered the bugs buried yesterday. I don't know what kind of death it has become today. Turn over the dirt and take a closer look. Suddenly, a young heart thumped: it is still moving, slightly, although it can't stop. I regret it. Under my ignorant frolicking, I profaned a life, a tenacious life that is indomitable and unwilling to die easily. It taught me to fear life. Brief comments:
There are interesting stories about childhood with unique materials; Humorous language and vivid and concrete description have accumulated enough motivation for the following. Feeling and thinking after the heartbeat: "Under my ignorant frolicking, I desecrated a life, a tenacious life that is indomitable and unwilling to die easily." It taught me to fear life. " Make this article thoughtful.
At that moment, my heart beat.
Quiet night. The misty rain outside the window evokes endless thoughts. I closed my eyes, and a familiar fragrance rippled in the slightly wet air. Oh, is the gardenia in bloom again? In a flash, I recalled that moment that made me heartache. .......
This is the season when gardenias bloom, and the air is filled with rich fragrance. In the evening, after finishing my homework, I rubbed my sour eyes. I'm so tired. Let's go downstairs!
The night in early summer is still a little cold. I was walking aimlessly when suddenly two familiar figures appeared in front of me. It's mom and dad! The two of them? ..... I'll follow.
Mom and dad are holding hands, just like a couple in love. I secretly laughed, but I didn't expect mom and dad to have an affair!
"ah!" Suddenly, my mother sneezed.
When dad was nervous, he took off his coat and quickly approved it for his mother. "Oh, it's so cold!" My father tightened my mother's clothes and carefully put the light hair on her forehead behind her head. "It's okay, it's okay. By the way, it's so cold that the child will catch cold! " Mom is a little anxious.
"When children grow up, they should know how warm and cold they are, and take care of themselves!" Dad said softly, as if he were blaming a child.
My nose is sour, yes, I have grown up, but have I ever cared about my mother like my father? They continued to walk and suddenly stopped in front of a gardenia tree. Gardenias were blooming one after another, like elves in full bloom at night.
My father stood on tiptoe, took off the branches, combed my mother's fine hair, and smiled and gently inserted gardenia into her hair. Pure white blooms in her black hair, and her mother bows her head slightly, like a girl of 18 years old. ......
At that moment, my heart was broken. Suddenly, I finally understood the warmth of "holding your hand and growing old with your son" and that parents have their own world for their children. I know how to cherish happiness and give love. In the season of gardenia fragrance, I relive the feeling of heartache, and I am also thinking deeply: when I grow up, can I hold my mother with my left hand and hold my father with my right hand, so that gardenia can grow invincible in life under gardenia? Brief comments:
This is a natural "heartache"! The detailed description of dressing, shunfa, "blame" and flower arrangement makes the trickle converge into a surging tide, which suddenly impacts the emotional gate and plays the touching melody of middle-aged couples' love; Gardenia flower not only serves as the background, but also gives metaphorical meaning, which adds a strong poetic flavor to the article. The author ends with Love Passing by, which is ingenious and vividly expresses the far-reaching influence of a "heartache" moment.