1, the college entrance examination perfect score composition "In order to forget" fragment:
"If you forget that the ice disappears in spring, then remember that it is the peach blossom that burns its glory; If you forget that it is a colorful peach blossom petal in summer, remember that it is a lotus flower that reflects the sun in different colors; If you forget that it is a lotus without rain in autumn, remember that it is the Jin Ju of Ao Shuang branch; If you forget that it is a remnant chrysanthemum thinner than the west wind in winter, remember that it is proud of the independence of snow and carries a faint fragrance notice. "
Let the students think and discuss, and make it clear that the fragmentation of ancient poetry improves the expressive force of the composition.
2. "Alone on a Tall Building" clip:
"Is the yellow sand all over the sky, the north wind blowing geese riding a donkey singer? Is it a sea fishing with neon as the line and rainbow as the hook? Are you a tourist who travels all over the mountains and waters, singing and dancing? In that era of fireworks in March, people expected you to sing praises, please the emperor, and exchange for high officials and generous salaries; And you, on the other hand, want to go to a tall building alone. In the morning, take off your boots and grind ink, and put white deer between the green cliffs in the wild. " (Li Bai)
Let the students think and discuss, and make it clear that the composition language has a strong sense of crossing history.
-Beautify the written language with history and poetry.
Second, the inside story into a sentence
(A) the quotation of ancient poetry
(2) The deeds and details of historical and literary figures are put into sentences.
(3) Integrating the qualities, thoughts and personalities of relevant characters into sentences.
1. Compare the expressive effects of A and B sentences.
One, "I like ..."
B, "Beauty is the lush grass floating in the wind at the head of Nautilus Island, and beauty is the little red that turns into spring mud to protect flowers."
Students think and discuss, and make it clear that sentence A is more direct, sentence B is more poetic, and the expression effect of sentence B is better than that of sentence A.
2. Discuss in groups of four and express "beauty" with a poem.
3. Compare the expression effects of sentences A and B. ..
A, "Xiang Yu defeated Wujiang, which made the hero feel embarrassed."
B, "Fate is the last cry of Xiang Yu's hero when he committed suicide in Wujiang River".
Students think and discuss, change and beautify the language by grasping the details, and make the B sentence more expressive.
Exercise: Please grasp the details to change and beautify the sentence "Qu Yuan Miluo threw himself into the river and the hero cried".
Example: "Fate is a string of heavy inquiries left by Qu Yuan on the bank of the Miluo River".
4. Read the clip.
"Beauty is Su Dong's detachment and open-mindedness, which means that there is no shortage of life, and the running water in front of the door can still flow westward"; Beauty is the serenity and serenity of the moonlight in Wang Wei's pine forest and the crystal stone in the stream. Beauty is Gong Zizhen's persistence in "falling red is not a heartless thing, but turning it into spring mud to protect flowers". "
"Xin Qiji's drunken eyes blurred the sword, Fan Zhongyan's tears blurred his face and white hair, Lu You's dream echoed with the clank of iron fighters, Su Shi's fahua publicized the spirit of young people, and Li Baiyun's touch-up embellished the surging river."
Students think and discuss, and make clear that the quality, thought and personality of the relevant characters are in the sentence.
Third, the inside story is divided into sections.
1, watch the clip: "Tao Yuanming's' Ask He Junneng, keep your heart away from yourself' reflects a calm life choice; Fan Zhongyan's "worrying about the world first, and enjoying the world later" shows the politician's deep sense of responsibility; Du Fu's "There are thousands of spacious buildings in Qian Qian, and all the poor people in the world are happy, and the wind and rain are like calm mountains! "Express the feelings of Purdue sentient beings; Mao Zedong asked the boundless earth, who is in charge of ups and downs is also the Hong Zhong sound made by a generation of great men in the face of vicissitudes of China. "
2. method.
(1) Use n famous sentences or n celebrities+artistic conception.
(2) Discuss with a celebrity or celebrities.