Poetry is permeated with your feelings, and it is also profound, but the words are profound, but the brushwork does not fully vent feelings, which is not enough to touch the feelings of readers, and there is still a lot of room for improvement. Besides,
You fell down.
The whole mountain and river dance for you.
This sentence seems inappropriate and a little unclear.
I am the pride of your past.
This is also the case.
Frankly, don't blame.