The setting sun is far away, the weather is cold and the house is poor. Chai Men hears dogs barking and returns on a snowy night.
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This poem, with an extremely concise pen, depicts a picture of a cold mountain staying, a tourist staying at dusk and a snowman as the material. Poetry is written in chronological order. The first sentence is about the feeling of tourists traveling on the mountain road at dusk, the second sentence is about what they saw at the boarding house, and the last two sentences are about what they heard at the boarding house after nightfall. Each poem constitutes an independent picture and is interrelated. There are pictures in the poem, but the feelings are seen outside.
At the beginning of the poem, the words "the setting sun is far away" are used to outline a picture of the twilight and the long mountain road. There is no clear description of the characters in the poem, but it makes readers feel that their people are ready to go, and their feelings are vividly on the paper. Here, the word "far" points to a vivid picture and reveals a poetic scene. It gives people hints and imagination. From this word, the reader will naturally want to see someone marching on the mountain road at dusk, and infer his lonely and tired travel situation and his desire to stay. Next, the second sentence of the poem asks the reader to follow the pedestrian's line of sight, along this mountain road, and invest in the home for the night. The cold weather and poor house are the portrayal of this family. And the word "poor" should be the impression formed from seeing the hut from a distance to knocking at the door. Writing "sunset" before the previous sentence "Cangshan is far away" and writing "cold weather" before this sentence "Baijia is poor" are all ways to increase the level and weight of the poem. The long mountain road has made people feel that the road is far away, and it is even farther to see the sunset; The humble hut has made people feel poor, and it is even poorer in winter. Looking at the context, the word "cold weather" in this sentence also has its connecting link. Inheritance is to further render the color of sunset road; Revelation is the foreshadowing of a snowstorm at night.
These first two poems, which add up to only ten words, have already written the scenes of hiking and house. The last two poems, "Chai Men smells dogs barking, and returns to people in the snowy night", were written after he stayed in Shanjia. In terms of words, "Chai Men" is connected with "White House", "snow" is connected with "cold" and "night" is connected with "sunset". In this way, from the perspective of the whole poem, although the second half of the poem opens up another poetic realm, it is closely connected with the first half, so as not to make readers feel out of touch. But here, the cause has made a leap. It seems that since the "dog barks" at night, most travelers who are tired of hiking have already gone to bed; There should be something to describe from dusk to night, from cold invasion to snowstorm, from entering the hut to going to bed, but the pen skips this paragraph and omits some plots, making the poem particularly refined and more compact. The poet deliberated between various choices. If this effort is not made, perhaps the second half of the poem should further describe the depression of people living in houses, write about the desolation of mountain houses and the silence of the environment, or write about the coming of snow at night. Otherwise, you can also write about your own travel and your thoughts after staying overnight. But the poet put these things aside and didn't write. Unexpectedly, he saw a noisy dog barking in the silence. This shows the change of scale, giving people the feeling that a strange peak suddenly appeared on the flat ground.
As far as writing is concerned, the first half of a poem is written according to what you see and hear, and the second half is written according to what you hear and hear. Because, since the night has come and people have gone to bed, it is impossible to write what they have seen and heard, but only what they have heard and heard. The sentence "Chai Men" should be written in the dark and heard on the couch in the hospital; The word "snowstorm" should not be seen, but heard, because I heard all kinds of voices and knew that someone had come back in the snowstorm. I only wrote "Smell the dog barking" here, probably because it was the first sound to break the still night, and it was also the first sound I heard, but what I actually heard was not only the dog barking, but also the sound of Melissa Zhou, knocking at the door, the sound of Chai Men's switch, the sound of family members' response, and so on. These sounds are intertwined. Although the person who spent the night was not in the hospital and had never seen it, it was enough to conceive the picture of returning from the snowstorm from this noisy sound.
When the poem was written here, its meaning was not extended and it came to an abrupt end. It didn't take long to explain the feelings of people who listened to these voices and conceived this picture. However, the feeling of desolation in the mountains revealed from it is self-evident that it triggers the feelings of travelers in the quiet night.