Author/Xu Xinrong
People's Education Edition Volume 7 (1) Unit 3 Writing Feel Nature
Guest Instructor: Zhou Yong.
Hangzhou Yucai Middle School is an excellent teacher and writer in Hangzhou. He has published a collection of essays, Love in Hangzhou, Novels, Deep in the White Clouds, Teaching Aids, 108 Writing Skills Training Tips, Writing Interactive Upgrade Demonstration, etc. The novel "Three People and One Drama" won the Silver Award for Best Novel in the Third Chinese Literature Creation Expo at Home and Abroad. Now he is a writer in China and a contract writer for a novel magazine.
Overview and guide
The texts selected in this unit are all articles describing the four seasons, with prose and poetry as the context.
The author of "Spring" praises spring with novel metaphors and fresh and fluent language, imagining spring, spring grass, spring flowers, spring breeze and spring rain, as well as people in spring, delicate sensory description, unique observation of scenery and choice of typical scenery.
Winter in Jinan is full of vicissitudes and dynamics, like telling a story. The description of the scenery focuses on the characteristics of the scenery, and "sunny" can be regarded as the general feature of Jinan in winter. The author first grasps the characteristics of Jinan as a whole, then reveals the geographical characteristics of Jinan, with warm and comfortable mountains and green water, and writes the unique charm of Jinan in winter.
Summer Sense captures the characteristics of "nervousness, enthusiasm and haste" in summer. "Enthusiasm" means that the wheat waves roll and the hot air floats, while "nervous" farmers are busy threshing wheat and fertilizing autumn seedlings. "Shortness" refers to the fields of seedlings, wheat, corn and sorghum, which are flourishing and are the last sprint of Xiang Qiu. The description of the scenery pays attention to the details of the scenery, with vivid writing, distinctive personality, novel angle and unique opinions.
Autumn is a poem with narrative brushwork, and its language is fresh and beautiful. Autumn "the sound of logging wafts out of the valley", "playing on fishing boats" and "dreams in the eyes of shepherdess" autumn. Look at the scene from another angle, from the scene to the characters, the context is clear. The beauty of rhythm and harmony in poetic language can be seen.
"Four Ancient Poems" describes the spring and autumn scenery, and the imagination is broad or beautiful, showing the characteristics of different styles of poetry. Or autumn, "the trip to the sun and the moon, if it is out of its territory; Xinghan is brilliant, if it is unexpected. " It's still spring. "Flowers are getting more attractive, but shallow grass has no horseshoe."
A good text is a model of writing. Learning this unit is to imitate these classic literary works to try the pleasure of writing. How can I write a good article about scenery?
First, we should observe calmly and understand carefully. Spring is colorful, full of flowers, and every grass and tree smells of spring. Only by careful observation can we have a unique aesthetic experience, describe it in place and express it vividly. "Like a herring, put away the shadow of sapium sebiferum leaves." This is a typical autumn scenery. The leaves picked up by casting a net are the most beautiful leaves in autumn.
Second, we should grasp the characteristics of the scenery to write. A place has its own characteristics, and a season has its own customs. In Liang Heng's works, summer is "tense, warm and hurried", while in Cao Cao's works, autumn is "bleak, broad and romantic". It's also autumn scenery. In He Qifang's works, autumn is "beautiful, exquisite and affectionate". In other words, landscape is a scene with unique personal experience, which is fresh and representative.
Third, we should pay attention to the organization of the article and make it clear. "Winter in Jinan" is always written first and then divided, with mountains first and water later. (Writing skills) Write about the mountain after the snow, from the top to the mountainside. From city to city, from hillside to small village, from small village to roof, from whole to part. It seems casual, but it is actually crafted.
Fourth, learn to use language and write with emotion. Paying attention to the expressive art of language is a major feature of Spring. "'Blowing your face without chilling willow branches', yes, like a mother's hand stroking you. The wind brought the smell of newly turned soil, mixed with the smell of grass, and the fragrance of various flowers, all brewing in the slightly humid air. " Even if "Spring Breeze" is written here, it arouses many senses to describe it, and the rhetorical art cited is both, showing the vivid beauty, situational beauty and graceful beauty of language.
Pick up a piece of autumn of the soul.
Xu Xinrong, Class 6, Grade 1, Yucai Middle School, Hangzhou
On the way home in a hurry, a faint fragrance came to my face on the familiar path. Looking up, Binjiang Park is full of golden trees. Ah, autumn has come inadvertently!
Is the fast-paced life making me ignore the arrival of autumn, or is her light footsteps making me hard to detect? Come to think of it, I haven't enjoyed the scenery for weeks. If it weren't for this Gui Xiang, I might have passed by this autumn, so enjoy it.
Looking up at the sunset glow, it seems that the sunset glow is more nostalgic for the flame of summer, and the clouds glow half the sky, which is hot and flamboyant. A cool breeze blew, and three or two osmanthus flowers fell on my face. This elf has four delicate petals! Looking up, between sparse, the moon has been on the treetops, like a sail sailing in the blue sky and blue sea, implicit and quiet. After a while, the avalanche sunset sank into the west, the sapphire sky was bright by moonlight, and the lights in the whirling park were dim. Through the shadow of flowers, it seems that the goddess Chang 'e is dancing in Guanghan Pass, and the lovely jade rabbit is also walking beside the osmanthus tree.
Crickets chirp like the most beautiful melody between heaven and earth. The canoe rippled in the river, causing ripples in my heart. There is a saying that flowers bloom and fall, the moon is full and the moon is short, and it goes on and on. Autumn scenery in nature made me linger, and I almost missed it in my busy schedule. Perhaps, the beautiful scenery can be enjoyed again, but if you miss a moment in your life, it will never happen again.
I can't help thinking of the upcoming Mid-Autumn Festival. The ancients said that "the moon to the Mid-Autumn Festival is particularly bright", which is the time for family reunion. My grandparents I miss most have never visited them since the beginning of school. Thought of here, I suddenly impatient, don't want to enjoy the beautiful autumn night, also don't want to linger in the refreshing osmanthus fragrance, trotted home.
I think the flowering period of osmanthus fragrans is very short, and it will soon be colorful and turn into mud to protect the flowers; It suddenly occurred to me that although there are many caterpillars in buttonwood, it is sunny in winter and cool in summer; It occurred to me that although the moon is round or short, it can travel the Wan Li Road. It suddenly occurred to me that crickets only have a few months to live, but they are willing to sing all the time; In my opinion, the setting sun is not a regret, but a sunrise on the other side of the earth; It suddenly occurred to me that there is only one life and we should be happy and carefree. However, the rapid development of modern society makes us busy and hard-working, ignoring the natural beauty and family love around us. Although autumn is short, it is wonderful. We still have time to pick up a spiritual autumn, full of natural beauty, let go of our impatient heart, follow the spiritual autumn, and have a happy and natural sky of our own in the endless sky of life.
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One of the highlights of this paper is clever choice of words, grasping the characteristics of scenery and concise use of ink. For example, "The sunset seems to be more attached to the flame of summer, and the clouds steaming in Xia Wei reflect half the sky, blazing and gorgeous". The author uses "flame" to describe the color of sunset, and "Cloud Steaming Xia Wei" highlights its dynamic beauty. Writing the sky with "sapphire blue" shows the accuracy of the wording; Dance Confusion highlights the beauty of flowers and trees in the park. Secondly, it is natural to write an imaginary scene, "as if seeing the goddess Chang 'e dancing in the Guanghan Palace and the lovely jade face strolling beside the osmanthus tree".
The context of the article is also very clear, from writing real scenes to associative imagination, such as interpreting the autumn of life, with high intentions. They also pay attention to parallelism and elaboration, and a considerable number of Liang Heng's essays pursue a great realm. Good, strong enough.