? Pencils are about to be boxed and shipped away. The manufacturer is very upset. He took it aside and said to it, I have five words to tell you before you come into this world. If you can remember these words, you will become the best pencil.
? You can do a lot of great things in the future, but you should allow yourself to be led by one hand on the premise that you can't be blindly free.
? You may often feel knife-like pain, but these pains are necessary and will make you a better pencil.
? Don't be too stubborn, admit any mistakes you have made and have the courage to correct them.
No matter what kind of coat you put on, you should know that your most important part is always in it.
? Wherever you go, you must leave an indelible mark. No matter what state you are in, you must write it down. Remember that life is never meaningless. "
? Please write an article from any angle according to the material and reality. Or tell stories, or comment, or express feelings. The genre is not limited, the topic is self-made, and the number of words is not less than 500.
[Explanation of title]
The composition questions of Ningbo volume in 2006 are very distinctive.
First, a variety of questions are skillfully combined in one material.
This topic is a material composition topic at first glance. In fact, it contains several questions (types), which is a combination of various questions. The topic of the existing topic composition, such as the fifth angle; Propositional composition with established views, such as the first four corners; Of course, it is also an authentic material composition question.
Second, the angle is different, and the choice space is larger.
Although there is little room for students to play freely in terms of conception, material selection and conception (the third point is detailed), there are at least five angles to show the materials. If candidates can carefully analyze the overall situation, they can find the sixth or even seventh angle, such as "don't think too much about children." From this point of view, the choice of candidates is still very large.
Third, increase the difficulty of the exam and prevent the structure.
After roaming around the country for six or seven years, the topic composition has gradually exposed obvious shortcomings, and accommodation is the biggest obstacle that plagues the topic composition further. Topic composition inadvertently provides a bigger market for the host. To prevent it to the maximum extent, we must raise the threshold of "market access", and it is naturally a better choice to appropriately increase the difficulty of topic examination. Ningbo Volume provides more than five angles of conception: the first two can be summarized as "freedom needs restraint" and "success is bound to experience setbacks" respectively, which tests students' critical thinking ability; Third, the investigation of students' emotional attitude and value orientation can be summarized as "correcting when you know your mistakes" and "the key to the beauty of human nature is internal rather than external"; The fifth angle leaves a little more room for candidates to play freely. You can use a sentence-"Life will never be meaningless" as the topic. These five angles are not common expressions of single words or phrases in recent years, and the specific contents of the angles need to be understood and summarized by candidates. For example, in the fifth angle, it seems that there is a lot of room for students to play, but the keyword "forever" must be chewed carefully in the process of reviewing the questions, and it cannot be understood as "life will not be meaningless" or "life is full of meaning". The correct understanding is that when encountering difficulties at present, don't be negative, face up to setbacks, be optimistic about expectations and be proactive.
Fourth, it embodies the spirit of the new curriculum standard and has a strong flavor of the times.
The new curriculum standard points out: "Cultivate the habit of observing things around you and consciously enrich your knowledge", "observe life from multiple angles, discover the richness of life, capture the characteristics of things and strive for creative expression." This essay is a practitioner of the new curriculum standard concept and has a strong guiding role; Articles such as "Snail Tracking Me" pay attention to people and things around us, find the richness of life, get full marks, and play an exemplary role.
At present, it seems that one question and fifty cents are rare in China. On the one hand, it reduces the complexity of multiple questions in one volume, and at the same time, it also reduces the difficulty of selecting topics for students in the examination room, which makes a useful exploration for the composition proposition of the senior high school entrance examination in the future and will certainly play a leading role in the trend of the times. (Zhejiang/Zhang Xinle)
[Excellent Comments]
I am still strong, despite many blows.
A candidate in Ningbo
In the afternoon of June, the wind was very strong, and the small trees outside the window were blown stagger by the wind without direction. I clearly felt its pain, because the pain I suffered a few weeks ago was revealed in a confused storm: I lost in the math contest, I was insane in the exam that walked my students to high school, I sat in the classroom waiting for the final verdict of the senior high school entrance examination, but I ignored the foundation because of years of competition and could not make up for it. For a long time, I have been thinking, will life go on in this meaningless way? Now, looking at those young trees whose fate can't be decided in the wind and rain, I am more puzzled.
In a trance, I thought of a familiar name, that is Su Shi, a great poet in the Song Dynasty. When his career was frustrated, he was separated from his family and could only cherish the moon, he still did not forget to send his good wishes of "I hope people will stay away for a long time." What a broad-minded mind! I know that the hardships that followed made Dongpo taste the bitterness of "lonely sandbar cold" and made him shed tears. In the end, he chose to stick to his ideals and travel all over the country, leaving behind the heroic spirit of "being separated by a river" and the spirit of "flying in smoke", as well as the spirit that he always remembers his mission and never gives up no matter what the situation is. Persistent Dongpo, how many amazing words you have left for Chinese culture!
I also think of Yi An, who is thinner than a yellow flower-my favorite poetess. Your bumpy life has always made people cry; War broke out in your later years, your husband died, your calligraphy and painting property was swept away, and you suddenly fell into the abyss of poverty. In the face of so many setbacks, Yi An did not escape. Maybe she said "the hardest time to rest", "sentimental" and "things don't stop, tears flow first", but you survived, so tenacious. Occasionally, you are also a graceful Jiangnan woman, waving cicada-like sleeves and holding a wisp of fragrance after dusk. Strong Yi 'an, your persistent thinking and indomitable spirit have left many eternal marks on China graceful poets!
The gentle sunshine brought me back to reality, and I looked up at the window. Although many branches of the little tree were broken, it still stood upright, singing its own song of life, leaving traces for life. At this point, I no longer sigh, and I don't want to escape. I just want to face everything firmly and never waver anyway. There is a poem in Banqiao: "There is no wind in the southeast and northwest." Yes, I will always remember that "any two east, west, north and south winds"!
[Comments by famous teachers]
As a perfect composition, this article has the following highlights:
First, cut into nature.
The author first describes the small trees in the storm, which leads to associations and questions: "Will life go on in this meaningless way?" This topic is closely related to the content of the article and meets the requirements of the composition topic. This kind of writing is similar to things, people and characters, which makes the article full of rational interest. From the small tree in the wind and rain to the tried and tested self, I can't help asking questions, and naturally think of Su Shi and Li Qingzhao who share my fate. Through the pursuit of their life trajectory, it is not difficult to find the final answer to the question-"face everything", "stop sighing", "stop vacillating", "sing the song of life" and "leave traces for life". The cut-in angle is natural and the context of the full text is clear.
Second, touching with "love".
The most rare and touching thing about this article is that the true feelings are condensed in the text, which is more like reasoning and lyric. The author's "admiration" and "admiration" for the ancients are vividly reflected on the paper, which well embodies the characteristics of "all articles are affectionate".
Third, accumulate wealth.
Accumulation includes life accumulation and reading accumulation. Only when there is a certain accumulation in peacetime can we write high-quality articles in the examination room.
Number of articles. It can be seen from this article that candidates' preference for classical literature embodies the concept that "life is language". Ancient poems and famous sentences are handy, accurate and appropriate; The ingenious use of fashion elements such as Lonely Shazhou Cold (pop song) has to make people marvel at the small author's great handwriting. This is especially worth learning from.
Wrong composition
Baomeijianhuawo
A candidate in Ningbo
Double-edged straight knife
In the middle of winter, the north wind roared and the snow fell heavily.
A blacksmith is casting swords in the furnace, beating them one by one. The blacksmith's son asked, "Dad, doesn't the sword hurt?" The blacksmith picked up a piece of cloth and wiped the sweat dripping from his face: "Only in this way can dad finish what the hero asked him to do and save the people." The youngest son looked at the blacksmith and then at the red sword, which seemed very confused. The heavy blow rang in my ear again.
The next day, the hero came and took the sword, ending the suffering of the sword. It's time to show your sword. Everyone in the village believes that this sword will help the hero get rid of the bully. In the snow, the sword emits dazzling cold light, which is so different.
A month later, the hero came back with Shao Ba's head. The villagers were so happy that they regarded their swords as gods.
Without that painful blow, the sword is still a pool of molten iron. But now-
Chinese plum
The cold wind came with snow, and there were few pedestrians in the street. People hid in the house around the stove.
A faint fragrance wafted with the wind. Wang Anshi walked out of the door, trying to find the source of the fragrance. The cold wind is rustling, but a warm blood is flowing in Wang Anshi's heart. A casual glance touched Wang Anshi. In the corner, a few sporadic plum blossoms are proudly blooming, as if they were the only ones between heaven and earth, regardless of the biting cold.
The fragrance touched the poet's heart, and a song "Yongmei" is the best witness.
In this world of ice and snow, I'm afraid only Meihua knows it. Without fighting with frost and snow, how can there be this refreshing fragrance, and there would be no "Yongmei" known to all women and children.
I
In today's society, competition is becoming increasingly fierce. So a man without knowledge is like an empty bag without soul.
The pressure of study sometimes makes me want to escape and give up, but I know that there is no forging, no ice and snow, no sword, no plum blossom. Then there is no successful me without suffering.
I am in a deserted desert. In order to survive, I must unswervingly look for oases. How can we save our lives without going through this painful ordeal? Confused, I decided the direction.
Suffering will be the catalyst of my life. It is sweet after suffering, just like it will clear up after a cloudy day. I firmly believe that I will draw a colorful life.
Misunderstanding warning
The exercise thinking of candidates is commendable. Based on the well-known phrase "the sword front is sharpened, and the plum blossom fragrance comes from bitter cold", this paper skillfully applies it to the exercises in the examination room, so that the images such as "sword and hero" and "plum blossom and Wang Anshi" add luster to the situation they create, and juxtapose them with "I", so that readers can realize the powerful spiritual core produced by this juxtaposition: in suffering, it should be said that
However, after reading the article carefully, we will find that there are many problems that need to be vigilant. The most prominent of these problems is that the internal connection between paragraphs is not close.
First, the subtitle appears at the beginning of the article, which makes the writing seem too abrupt. It's like seeing the stairs when a house enters the door, which makes people feel very abrupt. If an introduction is added before the subtitle, on the one hand, it can reduce the impact of the subtitle on the eyeball, on the other hand, it can hold up the whole article in a sense, which will of course make the article more rigorous on the basis of rich connotation.
Secondly, the internal relationship between paragraphs is not close, so it is necessary to connect three relatively independent fragments into a book with necessary interlanguage. In a short article of a few hundred words, we should pay special attention to tenon joint when using subtitles, so that tenon joint sentences can implicitly connect with the context, make the article smooth, and reflect the author's clear thinking vein to some extent. The sentence "But now-"written by the examinee at the end of the subtitle "Sword" is obviously unnaturally associated with the following.
Thirdly, the article failed to find the connection between the title and the fragment, so that the structure of the full text became quite loose. When writing, it is an indispensable condition for the full text to form an inseparable whole by finding the internal relationship between the main title and the subtitle and expressing it in an appropriate way. Otherwise, it will become a "freak" with many questions in one article, and then be put on death row by the marking teacher. This article, entitled "Sword, Plum Blossom and Me", only pays attention to the textual connection between the title and subtitle, but ignores the meaningful connection between them, which is rather reluctant and inaccurate.
Fourth, the rhythm between the three subheadings is not harmonious. The use of subheadings can show learners' language talent. Therefore, we must pay attention to the literary talent of subtitles, especially the harmony between subtitles. If possible, it is best to use phrases with similar words and structures as subheadings, which can not only summarize the content or show the center, but also reflect the author's superb sentence refining skills. Of course, in order to make the article more infectious, language polishing and emotional transcendence also need to be strengthened.
Kegai District, Wenzhou City, Zhejiang Province
[original sound playback]
Write a composition as required. (60 points)
Don't dust off your heart/in the world of youth/without melancholy.
Don't learn to be indifferent/forget to give others/give yourself/have a laugh.
Don't curl up in the pile of books/it's birds and flowers outside/the sunshine belongs to you.
Youth is so precious/needs you/appreciates, creates and shows yourself.
Life is so beautiful/kind, family, sincere friendship/haunting you.
The world is so vast/waiting for you/walking, looking for and exploring mysteries.
Open your heart quickly.
To harvest-
Surprise/touching/beauty of life
Please write an article on the topic of "opening your heart". You can tell stories and experiences, talk about experiences and feelings, make comments, expand your imagination and express your feelings. ...
Requirements: ① Style selection (except poetry); ② No less than 600 words; (3) There shall be no real place names, school names or names in the text.
[Explanation of title]
This is a composition exam with China flavor.
1. The language of enlightenment is substantial, and the Chinese flavor is substantial, showing a great degree of discrimination. It is true because it guides Kao's writing ideas from the following angles: open your heart, let the melancholy go away and talk about youth; Open your heart, let indifference go away and talk about yourself; Open your heart, let your schoolbag go away and get close to nature; Open your heart, let the closure disappear, and show yourself ... self, nature and society have fertile ground to show yourself at every stage. Revelation language is full of Chinese flavor. It uses poetic language to show candidates writing space and broaden their horizons. In this regard, candidates with different language levels must have different understandings. Candidates who usually pay attention to Chinese taste can naturally read the meaning of personality from the introduction, thus determining extraordinary ideas for their articles. Therefore, the examination questions can reflect a greater degree of discrimination.
2. The extension of the proposition itself is very rich in Chinese flavor, which makes candidates have something to say, feelings to express and arguments to discuss. "Opening your heart" means coming out of the enclosure. The proponent gives the abstract meaning of "opening your heart" to dynamically open the image of "doors and windows" and make the sky in your heart bright and beautiful at the moment of "opening". This is undoubtedly telling candidates that there are not only "I" in "I", but also the sky, sunshine and people in "I". When expressing true feelings, the more watertight it is, the more it can reflect the inner "openness"; When sorting out your thoughts and comments, try to make your inner "meaning" open as much as possible ... Of course, the topic of "opening your heart" itself is literary and poetic, because it is a propositional composition, which makes your article more literary and poetic, and naturally it will be more closely related to the topic to earn higher scores.
[Excellent Comments]
open one's heart (to)
Wenzhou examinee
In fact, sometimes, it's not that love doesn't reach your inner world, but that your heart doesn't open.
Love is not always passionate. Fatherly love, as tough as mountains and rivers, maternal love, selfless and sometimes ignored, pure and affectionate. They are always flooding around your knees and in your heart. At every moment before you open your heart, they are so stubbornly sticking to every ferry in your life.
Heart, in fact, has a door, which blocks tears, laughter or other things mercilessly. Love is often locked in the door mercilessly. Only those who have the key to open the door of the soul can experience all kinds of wonderful feelings.
Open your heart and let love in. You will feel that your father's frowning brows are full of concern, your mother's nagging voice is full of warm expectation, your teacher's gentle criticism is full of sincere hope, and your friend's frolicking voice is full of endless care. Therefore, scolding is no longer horrible and harsh.
Open your heart and let love in. In the Rubik's Cube of love, the evil wind and showers turn into showers to moisten the seedlings. Under the scorching sun, boiling water washes away the hot sweat upgraded by love. Love spreads in an open heart, and the heart is open in the cultivation of love.
Open your heart and let love in. Lop Nur reveals secrets in the exploration of love, Moon Lake overflows under the watering of love, Tibetan antelopes multiply under the call of love, and Antarctica opens its mind in the adventure of love!
Open your heart and let love in. The economy is prosperous because of the macro-control of love, the politics is clear because of the eight honors and eight disgraces of love, the people are peaceful because of the "one country, two systems" of love, and the motherland is unified because of love!
If your love slips away inadvertently, don't be too sad. Because, as long as the heart door is open, love will break into my heart at any time!
Friends, please keep your keys carefully, stick to the door of love, open your hearts at any time, let love become the source of living water, gurgle into your beautiful heart lake, let the clear waves of love overflow, overflow …
[Comments by famous teachers]
This is a lyric prose with a unique perspective and beautiful literary quality.
1. Open your heart and let the light of love bloom beautifully. Love is an ancient topic, but candidates skillfully associate it with "opening their hearts", and the light of love shines in the thinking of candidates' souls. Therefore, the gorgeous arrangement of "Open Your Heart" shows us the emotion of "fraternity" and naturally and truly shows the examinee's beautiful emotional attitude and values.
2. Colorful materials have opened a wide horizon. Candidates choose "love" as the incision of the article, so that the open mind is full of natural feelings, human love and the great cause of reunification ... Today, when the harmonious development between man and nature is advocated, the article has the characteristics of the times, and interested candidates even don't forget to write "eight honors and eight disgraces".
3. Gorgeous sentence patterns are strewn at random, creating endless poetry and painting. There are short sentences such as "open your heart and let love come in", and long sentences such as "the evil wind and heavy rain in the love cube turn into showers to moisten seedlings, and boil in the hot sun to wash away the hot sweat upgraded by love", which are scattered in length, harmonious in sound and rhyme, lively in rhythm and refined in language. The language characteristics of adults have not weakened the innocence and interest of the article, and it is really a rare masterpiece in the examination room. (Zhejiang/Ke Xiaoyang)
Zhejiang Jinhua Juan
Original title playback
Step into the threshold of youth, pursue lofty ideals, enter a beautiful home, enjoy the sunshine of love, touch science and fashion … How wonderful life is! Please write an article on the topic "Life is wonderful because of it".
Requirements: Fill in appropriate words (such as friendship, honesty, singing, etc.). ) on the horizontal line of the title. In addition to poetry and scripts, the style should be optional, not less than 600 words. No real place name, school name or person's name may appear in the text, and no reading materials in the test paper may be copied.
Title annotation
Jinhua City, Zhejiang Province, in 2006, the senior high school entrance examination composition was a semi-propositional composition. Examination questions cut into students' lives, and there are no obstacles in examining them. Coupled with the right sensational language, it can quickly awaken the writing passion of candidates, freely choose the other half, and show students' personality and talent. If you want to shine in your composition, you need to pay attention to:
First, carefully examine the questions and innovate the theme. The novel, profound and unique theme is undoubtedly an indispensable condition for getting high marks. You can think carefully and strive to expand and explore the connotation of "wonderful": beautiful, beneficial and proud.
Second, the topic is refined and the materials are skillful. Supplementary questions should fully mobilize the accumulation of life; Consider the specialty of self-writing: good at narration, description and discussion; The content is "familiar" but we should try to avoid "vulgarity", give up those popular words and strive for the diversity of material selection; If you want to be "new", you must avoid "risks", keep your mouth small and be smart.
Third, the flexible use of style and the innovation of form. In recent years, both propositional and semi-propositional compositions have tried their best to provide a stage for students to show their individuality and expertise. Even propositional composition and semi-propositional composition give students freedom of choice in material selection, conception and style. In this semi-composition, candidates can freely choose various styles by virtue of their own accumulation and expertise. Not only that, they can also adopt innovative styles such as diary, camera and question and answer, and strive for the perfect unity of composition content and form.
[Excellent Comments]
Life is wonderful because of windows.
Jinhua Yi candidates
I often like to lean against the window and see the outside world. There is always an inexplicable joy for the window: there is a power lurking in the complicated and changeable world, which makes my heart ready to move.
I went back to my hometown during the summer vacation, and I kept thinking about my window in my mind. Fantasies about windows kept coming to my mind. Two months later, I went home. As soon as I entered the room, my father smiled and said to me, "It's a paradise outside the window. Go and have a look. " I can't wait to go to the window. Everything is so familiar. Suddenly, a piece of new green jumped into my eyes. When I looked carefully, it turned out to be a small park full of spring. In the center of the park is an antique pavilion with blue tiles and cornices. Surrounded by a green sea dotted with pale yellow lawns, a clear stream divides the lawns and a unique small wooden bridge integrates them. Several peach trees are scattered around the park, adding an elegant and quiet atmosphere, which makes people "intoxicated and don't know where to go." How beautiful! "Dad, is this what you call heaven?" "yes. This is a small park built by the government to beautify the environment. Neighbors will go after dinner. " "Do they like parks?" "Of course I like it. It is said that this park gives people a refreshing feeling and can relax the tension at work. Look, here they come. " I looked out of the window. Some people are talking and laughing, some people are walking, some people are reading books ... This park is full of warmth and beauty.
Dad said to me again, "If you look at the window at night, there will be a different surprise than during the day." "How can there be such a big change? I've only been gone for two months? " I'm a little confused. "This shows that the construction process is getting faster and faster.
The moon climbed quietly into the night sky, and my father and I came to the window again, ah! What a beautiful scenery! On the road from east to west, the red taillights behind the car are particularly dazzling in the night. From a distance, clusters, clusters like beating burning flames, more like a rushing river, quickly flow across the bridge and rush to the distance, giving people a feeling of "suspecting that the Milky Way has fallen for nine days". "This is ..." "This is the river on the road." Dad nodded knowingly at me. Yes! This is a river running on the road, and it is a river rushing forward in the tide of reform. It embodies the pace of Fuzhou's high-speed construction and carries the beautiful dreams and hopes of several generations.
The world outside the window is changing, and so is the face of the motherland. It is like a running river, pregnant with strength and hope. Don't stand still for today's glory, just keep running for a better tomorrow!
Comments by famous teachers
Through a small window, write the same content from different angles and different time and space, and see the big from the small. This is the characteristic of this article.
First, reflect the happiness of life by writing about the beautiful scenery and leisurely tourists in the park during the day. Writing about the beautiful scenery of the park mainly captures the characteristics of spring in the park, such as "antique pavilions, blue tile cornices, antique" and "clear streams and several peach trees scattered around the park", which is picturesque and also describes that people in the park are happy and comfortable. Beautiful scenery, with the activities of characters, the picture becomes smart.
Second, reflect the prosperity of society by writing about the lights and traffic outside the window at night. "Car red taillights" are particularly dazzling at night. From a distance, clusters, clusters, like beating burning flames, are more like running rivers, flowing quickly across the bridge and heading for the distance, giving people a feeling of "suspecting that the Milky Way has fallen for nine days". This is just a window, but through this window, we can clearly see the great changes in social life.
Thirdly, Zhang Xianzhi died in the end, and the discussion after narration strengthened the theme of the article and deepened the main idea of the article.