Morning dew bathes the castle peak, and the fog scatters and pulls the curtain. The trees are still evergreen and the grass is wet. Please comment on this poem, thank you.

It can be seen that the author wants to describe the scene of a tourist visiting the mountain in the early morning by line drawing. The expression of artistic conception can make people understand, but the third sentence is a bit out of artistic conception. Moreover, the first two sentences use anthropomorphic techniques, while the last sentence of Xiaocao does not use this technique, which is biased. Say the second sentence, who is the curtain raiser? As for rhyme, modern poetry pursues artistic conception, and rhyme is secondary. In order to eradicate the author's original poem, let me modify it:

Morning dew bathes the castle peak, and the cool wind rolls the fog yarn. Sitting and watching the yarn fly away, grass tears spilled on my skirt.

Please ask the landlord to comment, haha ~ ~ ~