Very good...
Not only do you have talent, but it is also inseparable from your hard work. I hope you will reach the next level! Actually you wrote it very well. Talent is important, but writing is ‘written’ after all and needs to be accumulated bit by bit. My dream is to be a writer. Although I have no writing talent, I hope to succeed in the future, so I am working hard now. Although it is not well written, it is still a good fortune. In fact, you are much luckier than me, because I think you can write better than me.
So you can't lose heart! Your writing is much better than mine....support you!!!