Genre: Eye-catching (Left Feather Style)
Requirements:
Organizer: Haitang Society Organizing Committee
The last poem: Xishan Kaiyuan
Copy that: yellow faint rain drizzly (little childe)
Comments: Dao is particularly scary, Gu Shooting (dust fate), Xishan Kaiyuan
Venue: Jiasha, Xishui, Qing Xue and Pan Wei.
Counting votes: order cocoa.
Submission instructions:
I. Closing at noon 1:00 on Wednesday, March 30, 2022.
Second, in the evening10-no homework at 7 am
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Charming eyes, flowers like the sea/Gu 2
For example, Ruyan Liu, a cherry blossom. Sparrows are noisy. Peach blossoms are ten miles long, and the spring wave begins, which is pitiful.
Because of the east wind, the old man was confused and exploded with a small fire. A cup of the past, a taste, lock the eyebrows.
Part I: The first sentence is plain, the second rhymes and the last sentence is out of line.
Next movie: What does the phrase "old reason" often mean? It doesn't make sense! The whole next block needs to be pushed down and rewritten.
Generally speaking, there is no smell of words.
Add: The sentence patterns are too chaotic, and many sentences should not be reversed for the sake of simplicity, such as the first sentence in the previous article and the first sentence in the next article.
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Yanmel Spring Flower Sea/Zhang Chengyu 2
Flowers fall and waves bloom like incense. Liu An vs Mei Ting. If the ship is not loaded with goods, it will become lonely because of the sails.
Among thousands of beautiful scenery, the butterfly dance is hard to stop. At this point, the beauty is one or two, and the old love is sporadic.
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Charming eyes. Let's sigh that the spring flowers are blooming/Chang 'an Old Man 13 (Vice President)
Light cold outside the curtain inhibits early spring, and oblique rain is more worrying. Without plum blossoms, it is difficult to find peach shadows and no flower marks.
Xichun always sighs that spring has come and laughs at it. Don't be too polite, tender as water, I still hate it.
Although the whole work is limited in space, it is very resistant to quality. The author deliberately chose a chilly time in spring, and the opening "suppression" not only wrote the cold and cheerless environment outside the curtain, but also revealed an unforgettable melancholy. Later, the reason for the gloom was "no flower marks", and the connection was natural. In the next film, ingenious sentence borrowing caused twists and turns. The author first regrets and sighs about spring, then he is relieved, but he is depressed at the thought of "farewell ceremony". Although there is no innovation in conception, the author's technique is skillful, which adds a lot of color to the work.
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Eye-catching Spring Flower Sea (Left Body New Rhyme)/Net Lotus 9
The fireworks on the branches set off the spring sail. Shake the drunken beauty. Wicker winding, Bichi waves wrinkling, Shui Yang strings.
The beautiful garden is as warm as spring in the east wind at dusk in spring, and the flowers are like flowers. Flowers fade easily, Ying Ying is sad, and his eyebrows are pointed.
The author chose good words, such as "wrinkles on branches, willows, waves in Bichi …" and so on. Spring is beautiful and comfortable.
The problem is that the following sentence is "Flowers bloom in purple". This sentence basically sets the whole article as a flower in late spring and leads to melancholy. As a result, the beginning and the end are neglected. There is a conflict between the upper and lower expressions about the theme of the homework, so you should think about it again.
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Flattery eyes? Flower Sea in Spring/Song Wuhun 18 (Shi Kui)
Thousands of miles east wind caresses countless English. Fat * * * have a graceful demeanour. The garden is delicate and charming, fragrant and ethereal.
When I think of it, it is mostly the shadow of a beautiful woman, and I have been reading until dawn. Flowers bloom and fall, people come and go, like a dream.
Even if this work is mediocre, there must be something extraordinary. The words are neat and the situation on the scene is very strict. Although there are no twists and turns, it is "silky". The word "dawn" alone is abrupt and groundless. And after the next film, the next three sentences will be revived and will not pave the way.
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Eye-catching Chunhua/Gui 8
This stream exudes the fragrance of wild smoke. The clouds are moving. A flower, half shaking the waning moon, landed in the palace.
Attract bees, attract butterflies, dew in the morning, little pink. Closed valley, dusty mind, wasted glory.
It seems to have no deep meaning, but it is more charming.
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Eye-catching/Peach Blossom Forest Spring Tour/Mountain Flowing Water 7
In spring, fairies are charming in all aspects. The beauty of misty rain dream soul pin, rich in the charm of imperial concubine, is incomparable to bud.
Light red kisses the east wind first, leading the way with cutting edge. Thousands of elegant, fragrant and intoxicating cheongsam.
Let me talk about my understanding of this epigraph first. When writing this word, I first analyzed its structure. The first half is scenery, and the second half is scenery lyric. So simply writing about scenery without cutting into the feelings you want to express may not be the general way to write this epigraph.
For the songs in 2007, I think the scenery in the first half of the song is unique, comparing the flower buds with the stones. But the second half is romantic and too popular, not the language of poetry, but also the scenery, and the theme to be expressed is not clear. It is suggested to add the emotion to be expressed in the second half. Because this is my first time to write this epigraph, I don't know if it's right, it's for reference only.
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Editor of this issue: Qin Xin Jian Dan