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Living in nature?
Chongqing students?
"Jiangnan can pick lotus, and the lotus leaf is He Tiantian." Do you always fantasize about riding a canoe and walking across a lotus leaf half a person's height? Let your hand gracefully touch the lotus with dew, and take a deep breath. The fragrance will intoxicate you. ?
"Moonlight in the pine forest, crystal stone in the stream." Are you always eager to walk alone in the pine forest on a quiet moonlit night? The tinkling sound of the spring is the inner melody, and the poetic time stops for you at this moment. ?
The cruel reality always wakes you up from your dreams. You are trapped in this noisy city. Where is nature? But don't be sad, let alone sad. Close your eyes and listen to the voice of your soul. The body of the city can't stop yearning for nature. As long as there is a sentimental natural heart, the city will be covered with green. ?
Early morning, walking on the road. The willows on the shore gently stroked the trembling water surface in the wind, without catkins flying. Maybe they have flown to the spring breeze. In our hurried footsteps, I don't know how many beautiful things in life have been missed. Why not look up at the horizon? The soft morning glow is the dress left by the fairy, and the golden sunshine smiles at you through the mist. The sun rolled and lay lazily on the leaves, letting the green blood shine with temptation. In an instant, the city melts into your eyes, and the tall buildings seem to be towering trees in the tropical rain forest, and the endless sound of cars in your ears becomes the melodious songs of birds. You are walking among the towering old trees, and the sunshine gently surrounds you. It turns out that living in nature only needs a moment's touch. ?
Continuous rain soaked the planned weekend, and you leaned against the window to pass the boring time. At this time, a naughty raindrop escaped from its mighty team and splashed a crystal flower on your arm. You look up at misty rain, as if you were walking silently in an alley in the south of the Yangtze River, holding an oil-paper umbrella. Walking through a pond, the rain became a line and circled on the water; A little frog sat on the lotus leaf, quietly watching the passage of this life. Affectionate running water bypasses your feet. Not far away, a red lotus is in full bloom, and the breeze is blowing. The gentleness of its bow deeply touches your heart. Suddenly I feel my heart suddenly enlightened, and this life in nature is so beautiful! Although you are still in this city, your heart has taken a deep breath in nature. It turns out that living in nature only needs a poetic heart. ?
Hide nature in your chest, and the breath of nature will be everywhere in this city. ?
Teacher comments?
This essay topic has a strong flavor of life, and candidates are required to write from their own life feelings. This article is a typical example. ?
This test paper is based on the examinee's own life experience and self-feeling. The selected materials are all from the examinee's own life experience and sentiment, and the scene is delicate and true. The author's use of various rhetorical devices makes the scenery description vivid and integrates the author's feelings and experiences into it. "Affectionate water bypasses your feet. Not far away, a red lotus is in full bloom and the breeze is blowing gently. The tenderness of its bow deeply touched your heart. " After reading this text, I also experienced the greenery of life in nature with the author. ?
The article writes two life scenes: first, walking on the road in the early morning, comparing the natural beauty seen in the eyes with the city life in real life, and interpreting the connotation of "living in nature only takes a moment to be moved"; First, it was raining on the weekend, and I watched the scenery in the rain by leaning against the window, and realized the topic connotation that "living in nature only needs a poetic heart". Two beautiful pictures, emotions and scenery blend together. These two poetic scenes strongly reveal the idea of the article-as long as there is an affectionate and natural heart, the city will be covered with a layer of green, thus withholding the topic and making the center of the article distinct. (Luo Yin)
The composition of Chongqing college entrance examination in 2008 is a masterpiece: living in nature.
Living in nature?
Chongqing candidates?
Wandering in life, we are all travelers who never stop trekking: our destination is ahead and the lush past is behind us. The best gesture is to let the dribs and drabs of life come naturally like the wind and let the past spread naturally like a cloud; Only in this way can we make the clouds bloom until spring blossoms. ?
Holding an oil-paper umbrella and a broken wall that has been ruthlessly mottled by years, I searched for his trace in the moss path. Until the misty rain in the south of the Yangtze River blurred my eyes, I seemed to see him walking leisurely among the willows, with a leisurely manner. ?
On poetry and talent, he is enough to make future generations look up; Besides, he is loyal to his country and has great ambitions. There is no reason to stop him from becoming a leader. ?
But life is not a flat pool that can't afford the slightest ripple. It is a flowing spring in nature, and it is bound to leave some waves, either at the end of the world or at the ends of the earth. ?
Wutai Poetry Case completely shattered his dream. Since then, I have been depressed and displaced. He is not sad or upset, but silently suffers injustice and injustice. ?
As soon as Mrs. Kay left, he let this conspiracy and slander come naturally like the wind, crushing his dream; It also makes the turning point of this life naturally dissipate like a cloud, even leaving no trace between poems. ?
I remember that time, Lu Yu demoted Huang Tingjian to the south. Mentors and apprentices chatted with each other and spread noodles on the roadside. Noodles are thick and astringent and difficult to swallow. Huang Tingjian put down the bowl chopsticks and sighed, but he finished eating it quickly. The clear voice said, "Jiu San Lang, do you still want to taste it carefully?" Then he smiled and left, leaving a thoughtful Huang Tingjian. ?
Therefore, in the face of the wind under the Red Cliff, all we see is the blue shirt that stands upright, standing for thousands of years with a philosophical and natural attitude. ?
I love this sentence "If you want to compare the West Lake to the West Lake, light makeup is always appropriate". He traveled around the West Lake. Even if he was frustrated politically, he did not forget to sigh a farewell song and let the joy in his heart wander naturally. I am also fascinated by his "Jiangchengzi" mourning his dead wife: ten years of life and death are endless, and I never forget it. When my wife gave up, I couldn't help feeling sad. I can't help feeling sad. I just let it out on paper, so that people after 1000 years are also sad to the softest place in the nine songs. A song "Mink Head" is also a kind of vacillating emotion: the shelf of a misbehaving brother expresses the guilt dragged down by his brother, and the true feelings are naturally revealed. ?
The world loves Su Shi's writing alone, so do I, but what fascinates me more is his attitude that the odds and ends of life come naturally like the wind and disperse naturally like the clouds. He devoted his life to explaining how natural life should be chic and heroic, and how true and sincere it is. ?
I hope I can eventually become such a person, and I will keep the clouds open until spring blossoms. ?
Teacher comments?
This article belongs to a typical cultural prose. "Living in nature" is a very vivid proposition, and cultural prose seems unsuitable for writing such a proposition with a strong flavor of life. The success of this paper can be said to be a successful demonstration of cultural prose in sketching active composition topics, which tells us that cultural prose can also be used to sketch active and experiential compositions. ?
The author presents Su Shi's life experience completely, and conveys a way of life, attitude and values through his life, that is, wait for the world and let nature take its course, so that we can keep the clouds floating until spring blooms. Expressing people's views through ancient events is a typical way of writing cultural prose. (Luo Wei)?
The full text is clear, the structure is complete, the language is fresh, natural, fluent and beautiful, which shows the author's superb ability to control the language. The most commendable thing is that the association of the article is very rich. From ancient times to the present, from others to oneself, they are skillfully organized in their own articles, which makes the articles rich in content and covers a wide range, and also shows the author's rich cultural background and superb writing ability. (Luo Yin)