Seek revision of poetry

I open the curtains occasionally, and it snows heavily. Little did I know that winter had come.

Everything wrapped in white is the same color. Heaven and earth are boundless, and the north wind is like a blade.

Want to go out, afraid of stepping on it. Enter the pure land and retreat into the mortal world.

In this case, I missed you again that day. It was a farewell.

If you have a heart, you will like it. If you don't understand, what is there to worry about?

As far as poetry itself is concerned, it is an expression of feelings. As the saying goes, "poetry expresses ambition" is a good poem as long as it is written. As far as appreciation is concerned, a poem that can make everyone understand their feelings and charm is the best. Of course, the poem you write should be a kind of lament you feel, and the feeling of sighing about things naturally emerges between the lines. However, the overall layout and wording of the text have not been carefully considered. Drawing lessons from the merger on the second floor, we made the following adjustments:

Gently open the curtains, it's snowing heavily. It's wrapped in silver and covered with everything.

Heaven and earth are boundless, and the north wind is like a thorn. I don't know, winter is back.

You may be late if you don't want to go out. Enter the pure land and retreat to Xun Mei.

This situation made me rethink. Say goodbye that day, this life and the afterlife.

If you have a heart, you will like it. If you don't understand, see you in the afterlife.