First of all, the poem should not be too straightforward, and secondly, it should pay attention to the rules that must be observed. In short, it is antithesis and leveling ...
If the artistic conception is enough, it is ok to owe a little on the reconciliation. It is suggested to make the following changes:
Make the hair droop, the flowers are not red, and the eyebrows are low and the eyes are silent.
you ride a bamboo horse, and she plays with tiles, only waiting for the afterlife and being friends.
The first sentence and the second sentence are barely antithetical. Both "this feeling is continuous" and "blushing" are too straightforward. It is more graceful to replace "flowers are not red", which is more like a woman falling in love with a married man or a married woman falling in love with other men. The third sentence means that the other party is married (personal imagination), and the fourth sentence means that the two of us have to wait for the next life and be friends for the time being (hehe, of course, it can also be understood as an extramarital affair, depending on the two people's understanding of "friends")