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Zhang Chengyu’s comments:
The workmanship is meticulous and the semantics are comfortable. The words are vulgar and easy to use, the poetic meaning is shallow, and the conclusion is unsatisfactory.
02? Pearl River Tide
Qilu. Ode to Stars (New Rhyme)
The moon shines through the sky at night, shining brightly for thousands of miles.
In ancient times, Magpie Bridge met the Milky Way, and in China today, Beidou rises.
Feiyu found beautiful dreams in the past, and found new names in breaking clouds.
However, I looked out late at night and saw nothing but mist.
Comments by Old People in Chang'an
1. Today's homework is like reading from back to front, and you will feel like you are seeing the sea for the first time at this point in the poem. If you read it from front to back, you will have the feeling of "coming back from Huangshan without seeing the mountains."
2. The chin couplet can be used as a "superior pen".
3. The neck couplet is not only about quitting work, but also full of philosophical thoughts, which is a rare couplet.
4. The final couplet is well closed, but the words and sentences can be slightly considered.
5. Overall, this work is a rare masterpiece, and its skill and realm are worthy of our appreciation.
04? Eternal
Qilu/Impressions of Watching the Stars
The bamboo stream turns again and divides into the sky, and the leaves lock the flowing crystal into a cloud
< p> Arrows pierce the peaks of the sky where the brightness and extinction occur, and the chess and king's army emerge on the roadHengsha's trillions of blessings are full, and the sparks of fire burn in the three autumns of the iron barrier
Thinking about each word is full of witty words, but always introspecting is less. Dispute
05? Jiang Ziya
Qilu/I talk to the stars
Tao is ruthless but affectionate. I doubt Beidou called her name.
Back then I was longing for the stars, but last night I missed the moonlight.
The twinkling sky is filled with sadness and silence, and the dreams are full of tears.
The title of the poem is easy to arouse the heartbeat of spring, but the net of love cannot escape and bind the orioles.
06? Zhong Tianci
Qilu · Stars
The Cowherd and the Weaver Girl lamented the wasted time, but perseverance in the North Pole leads the way.
The rising sun shines in the white east, and the Milky Way lines the horizon of Halley.
The moon is full and the moon is missing, and the stars are always there. When people gather together, there is nothing I can do.
Who can save the fleeting years? Walk, cherish, and sing.
07? Between the Water and the Clouds
Qilu_Looking at the Stars
Climbing up the stairs and looking into the distance at night, the stars are as wide as the water.
The purple fluorescence is so pleasant that the Cowherd and the Weaver Girl always sigh.
All living beings always envy the gods and immortals, but ordinary people don’t know that the palace is cold.
Looking back at the eyebrows in front of the window, I looked at each other with clear eyes and a smile.
08? Gaodian Sanren
Qilu. Looking up at the stars and recalling the heroic feelings (New Rhyme)
Enjoy the spring snow rhyme in Qinyuan at night, looking up at the stars and recalling the heroic feelings.
The southern sky sows fire to punish evil, and the northern sky whips up bullies.
Overwhelm three mountains to bury the old world, and think about opening up a new screen all the way.
The wind soars to the sky, and the great love surges into the cave.
09? Haitang Xiaosheng
Qilu Asking the Stars (New Rhyme)
I only love the clear night with ten thousand eyes, and the south tower is hundreds of feet away from the eye.
When seeking love, I dreamed of the beauty of Yaochi, but when I lost, I cherished the beauty of Beidou Ming.
In ancient times, there were a thousand lines worthy of the moon, but today there is not a single word worthy of the stars.
The body remains tall and has been silent for many years. Who will be with him in the eternal night?
10? Xishui
Qilu? Stars
The black chessboard is accompanied by fine clouds, and dots of gleaming flowers adorn the Kyushu.
Three ounces of pearls fly from jade dew, and the shadows of thousands of butterflies enter the ice eyes.
Nalan Chuan's hatred reached Hehan, and Li Bai was pregnant in the temple building.
Poets often invite the bright moon to drink, but when will they leave the stars?
11? Junnuo
Qilu? The Weaver Girl hates being born in the emperor's family
The far-off silver man is locked in the dust of life, and he sees the shocked king fall into Mengjin.
The stars in the sky move to the cold palace, and the things in the world change to the spring in the courtyard.
Relying on the friendship of the people in the lower world, I drank in the body of a newborn emperor's daughter.
Is the White-headed Cowherd safe and healthy? It was promised at five thousand ten days.
12? Xia Chaohui
Qilu. Looking at the stars
The stars are thousands of miles away, but you know where you will be in the next life.
I am poor and my mind is far away, but the Western continent is close. I am in a humble house and the spring is deep and the vegetation is declining.
I have had white hair for a long time, but it is difficult to repay this night of dreaming.
The moon in front of the bed is pitiful. It is rare to have a full circle but always a loss.
13? Candlelight
Qilu, watching the stars and the moon at night (new rhyme)
Yesterday was still the old time, and today is definitely not the spring of the past.
The flowing water has no end of love, and the falling flowers have the intention to find each other.
The cold clouds have dispersed, leaving the old age behind, and the winter snow has come and brought new life.
Creation should know that heaven and earth last forever, and life is filled with grudges and grudges.
14? Princess
Qilu Stars
There are several crystals in the vast sky, and the mute sound quietly shines through the night watch.
The elegance is inferior to the bright morning sun, and the beauty is as beautiful as the moonlight at night.
With care and love, the light is turbid and dark, but without pity, the body is clear and clear.
Thousands of years of experience and practice, spring, summer, autumn and winter.
15? Yajuan
Qilu·Stars
Looking at the sky in the autumn night, the North Dipper is dimmed and the South Dipper is slanted.
The Weaver Girl spreads brocade on the Milky Way, and the green gauze dances in Chang'e's palace.
Why invite the bright moon with a glass of wine, but you have to come to my house.
Also enjoy the music playing on the street, and flowers flying in the sky and on earth.
Note: "The Beidou is in decline and the South is diagonally inclined", quoting "The Beidou is in decline and the South is diagonally inclined" in Liu Fangping's Moonlit Night of the Tang Dynasty
Comments on this Little Day
The first couplet In contrast, there are words and sentences, Beidou Langxing, but the tired eyes are blurred, and the exhaustion of the guestland is vividly expressed. Water meets the moon, sorrow faces the stars, one patch faces the sky, and this sorrow is overwhelming. The thick clouds understand the meaning, but the sudden rain ignores it. The word "dao" is very good, with double meaning, it can be a verb or a road. The last couplet is also very exciting. Why does the storm only bully the guests? Because the guest was moved by nostalgia.
The only thing about the neck couplet is that the change of object is too abrupt. The stars are bright and the moon is bright, but suddenly there are thick clouds and rain. Of course, the author may have other intentions. I will read it again.
17? Zhenghong in the Desert
Qilu·Stars seek truth
How can a man be mortal after five thousand years? The Big Dipper towers into the sky to know the truth.
Mozi soars into the sky and reaches Han Dynasty, while Chang'e rides fire to cross the river.
I often recite poems about the wind and the moon, and occasionally ask about ghosts and gods in poems and books.
Let’s take a chance on the sky, the flying dragon’s destination is the stars.
18? Smoke-locked Hongqiao
Qilu · Van Gogh of the Stars
The town of Saint-Rémy is like a flower at night, and the Big Dipper is slanting beside the Rhone River.
The soul wanders in the cold moon outside the sky, and the wheat fields send out a group of crows independently.
People say ear cutting is a mental illness, but I say Bing Xin is a dreamer.
Just ask the stars in the sky and the vast sea to know your intentions.
19? The Fragrance of Chinese
Qilu? Stars? Chen
Looking up at the sky, the night is getting longer, who can hide the play of the Cowherd and the Weaver Girl.
Thousand-year-old gods compete for constellations, and people from thousands of miles away fall asleep.
Beidou paved the jade road with affection, Qiming sent golden light in silence.
In the world of mortals, when will idols be upright and upright?
20? Every day
Qilu? Stars
Whenever the night is dim, I still think about the sky and the universe.
In ancient times, there was a saying that there were only ghosts in the center of the earth, but now flying celestial bodies suppress the coldness of immortals.
Spring, Autumn, Winter and Summer sing the golden age, the sun, moon and stars are like earth balls.
The Beidou navigation is accurate in longitude and latitude, and the sunset is shining over me in Nanshan.
[Exhibited Works]
Qilu · Feelings of the Stars (New Rhyme)
Text/Swordsman Special bluff
A young man’s feelings lie in bed Counting stars, many summer nights and many winds.
My career in the world of mortals is in my middle years, and I have a blind eye and a dim light in the world.
The Beidou is clear but has not yet fallen, and the heart of spring is already dim.
Searching deep into the universe for a confidant, traveling back light years and missing half a lifetime.