1, homesickness in Linjiang County
It's windy in Chu Qing after the rain, and the woman leans against the porch window. Young people are old and vicissitudes. Stop in other places and wander in the Yangtze River.
It's another ceremony that hasn't come back yet, and my heart aches. Wandering, pacing, wandering. Looking north without tears.
Comments: The small words are exquisite, and the scenery is natural, and the homesickness is quite enough. The disadvantage is that the words are too simple and there is room for improvement.
2. Homesickness of Linjiang Fairy Girl
How many years of wandering, a long time in the field. Now my thoughts are unforgettable. Leaning against the railing, listening to the rain at night, sad.
I don't know which night it is, and the return period is always endless. Never met. Sorrow is still there, and wine is falling in sorrow.
Comments: the words are light, white but not vulgar, and the homesickness is on the paper, which is very good.
3, seven laws, homesickness
Things in my heart will always be homesick, and tears will flow without a trace. I used to laugh in my dreams, but it was hard to find new words when I was drunk. Meditation repeatedly complained about the bright moon, and family sacrifices hurried to worship the mound. How many tourists are stranded in the world, and the feelings of life are at that end.
Comments: Very poetic, writing the theme of homesickness. However, some viewpoints can still be scrutinized. First, two Chinese characters are completely unnecessary. Second, this word is a polyphonic word, which is suspected of ambiguity here.
4. Homesickness in Linjiang County
I once thought of the sunset scene in my hometown, and pomegranate was red in May before the court. The bird on the branch is missing. Wake up a few times and look up at the stars.
Tears welled up, and homesickness was hidden in my chest. When will the moonlight reappear? Where white clouds float, I still miss Xiaoqiaodong.
Comments: This word is Zhang Biti. Although there are many Chinese characters in the first sentence, the reason why there are many Chinese characters is that they are both flat and flat. In the seven-character sentence, except for the special sentence, all the others follow the principle of regular sentences, so this first sentence is irregular. The meaning of the word is good, but the disadvantage is that the meaning is not concentrated and slightly scattered.
5. Homesickness of Linjiang Fairy Girl
I know a lot about saying goodbye to my hometown, and I was confused all the way. The dead of night is the most embarrassing. The cicadas in summer are fading away and the drizzle is thinking again.
Lonely flying flowers and thin shadows make homesickness even more timid. Dye your temples with new cream in front of the mirror. Why do you toss and turn, and you will be troubled with your age.
Comments: Nostalgia can be seen, more self-description, lack of deeper inner portrayal. In many cases, transforming the concrete into the abstract will often add a lot of color to the work and play the role of finishing touch.