● Hu Shuangfeng, Senior Three Language Group of Wuyi Middle School in Hebei Province
The replay of the gold problem (the second quality inspection exam for senior three in Wuyi Middle School, Hebei Province)
A little monkey saw his companion sitting on the treetop in the sun. He asked, "Can I bask in the sun as carefree as you?" The companion said of course. Then, the little monkey lies on the ground and basks in the sun.
After a while, several deer came running and stepped on the monkey. ...
After the little monkey was trampled to death by a wild deer, he realized that he could only enjoy himself if he stood tall. So it crawled hard and climbed to the top of the tree to bask in the sun. However, because of sitting for too long, its legs became numb. Before long, it was squeezed by another monkey and fell under the tree. ...
Requirements: distinctive genre, neat handwriting and standard punctuation, not less than 800 words, except poetry.
Examination guidance
I may be at a loss when I read the materials for the first time, but I just feel that this is really a poor and funny little monkey-why is it so difficult to bask in the sun? However, there seems to be no way to start the analysis. At this time, it is even more necessary to read carefully word by word and carefully sort out the content of the material.
This material * * * an object-"little monkey" is not difficult to get. But what was said around it? According to the students' answers, there are differences, which directly lead to whether the question is correct or not. If you want to make a correct judgment, you need to grasp "'Can I bask in the sun as carefree as you?'" "It proves that this is what the little monkey wants to do. Being trampled and squeezed is a sign of its failure, so it can be concluded that this article is based on the fact that the little monkey failed to bask in the sun.
Next, we can use the method of "Lu Xun from Fruit" to find out the reason why the little monkey was unlucky twice. The first time I was trampled by a deer, it was because it was lying on the ground. Then why did it start to lie on the ground? From the following articles "Understand a truth, you can enjoy standing high" and "Climb hard", we can see that it is because it doesn't want to pay more, but just does it casually. If it tries to climb the tree from the beginning, it can't be stepped on. The second time, "I was pushed down by another monkey under a tree" was because its leg was numb; His legs are numb because he has been sitting for too long. The reason for sitting for too long, we can imagine the little monkey basking in the sun leisurely in the tree, too lazy to move.
The two reasons can be summarized as "lying" and "sitting". In this material, these two words represent the meaning of "no effort, no progress", so we can have the following ideas: ① life needs constant climbing, ② heights need more efforts, ③ never slacken off, ④ sense of hardship, etc.
The reason for students' digression is that they can't fully grasp the materials, and they can't find the context and key words of things, which leads to only grasping one word or getting rid of the subjective processing of materials, mainly in the following aspects:
Don't blindly follow others, take the road that suits you and find your own position; Know how to be flexible and pay attention to methods. Some students think that the little monkey "saw his companion sitting on the treetop in the sun", but he doesn't know himself. He shouldn't bask in the sun like other monkeys. If he doesn't bask in the sun, he won't get hurt. In fact, if we remove this sentence, it will still not affect the meaning of the material. Or, don't look at other monkeys sitting in the tree, sitting alone in the tree is not suitable for you, which ignores the problem of "lying on the ground" for the first time and why you "sit for a long time".
There are other digressions: eat pits and get wisdom; Dare to face setbacks; Look at the big picture
In short, it is not difficult to examine the composition in this exam, but it is a great exercise for thinking. () I hope that students can improve their reading ability and critical thinking ability through analysis and summary training.
Learning suggestion
Having a good writing attitude is a shortcut to improve your score.
Accumulate words, use dictionaries gracefully, and increase expressiveness. If the word "light" is replaced by "candlelight", there will be many images.
Think from multiple angles, connect with social hotspots, and make the content more profound.
Strengthening the training of quoting ancient poems can add artistic beauty to articles.
Exhibition of outstanding works 1
How comfortable is it?
beam
Pushing away the heavy fog of history, I saw a laurel falling in the autumn wind, kissing silence, picking up melancholy eyes and dreams from ancient myths and unfolding. The beginning is novel and unique, using anthropomorphic rhetoric and elegant dictionaries, such as "Yi" and "Ya" in Dream, Starting from Here. Lead to the following situation
Fantasy three kingdoms, on heroes cooking wine
The chaotic situation, one tripod and three pillars, suddenly became clear. On the origin, Wei is undoubtedly pure and noble. His position can't be shaken by anyone, whether it's Cao Shi's emperor or his millions of elite soldiers. Wu is not to be outdone, and Zhong Mohe's "big army government and big chaebol" atmosphere is undisguised. Sichuan, where talents gather, is indeed inferior. No matter how clever Ren Zhuge is, how brave Zilong is, and how powerful Taoyuan is, he still can't get rid of the local flavor of grassroots. However, it is these grassroots who have completed the counterattack of the three-point world. It is precisely because of their constant struggle that they have occupied a place in the land of competition.
They know they won't feel comfortable for a while, and they will sigh at night. They will cross Luzhou in May and go deep into the barren land. The south must set the central plains in the north! Comfortable enjoyment can only be achieved. Only by unremitting struggle can there be real victory.
Walking in the prosperous Tang Dynasty and singing in the Qing Dynasty.
Strolling through the prosperous Tang Dynasty, the ancient rhyme teenagers, Qingqu and farewell songs echoed. Dedicated to Hanlin, he "died at the sight of the grass, not in the golden cage"; When Yelang was exiled, his poems of "clear water produces hibiscus, and sculpture is natural" were handy and brilliant. South to Dongting, east to wuyue, home to Anlu. His roaming never stops. Comfortable enjoyment, if you can't embroider, it will be half of the Tang Dynasty. Only by unremitting struggle can Taibai's legend be held steady in history and spread through the ages!
Looking back at the late Qing Dynasty, I feel ashamed and disappointed.
When American artillery, British ferries and Japanese ships poured in, our rulers were still immersed in the dream of "going to China" and foolishly refused to open their eyes. Comfortable, too comfortable, the sound of guns is out of my ears. I also like tight borders; Comfort is too easy. Yuanmingyuan is just a garden. If you lose it, build it later. Ease, no, any more ease, and our country will be lost. I can't feel at ease, but it's too late.
If you fall behind, you will be beaten, rest on your laurels, and do not strive for progress. No matter how high the starting point is, there will be times when you fall.
History is advancing, and today there are many heroes.
Wang Shuo's sublime subversion of traditional literature, the new literature breaking the shackles and Haruki Murakami's gentle singing and dancing can't compete with Mo Yan's dispute over Red Sorghum. The times are advancing, youth is surging, and there is not much comfort. Bo has no regrets all his life!
Our life should be like a peony, with bright branches or dusty, blooming and struggling all our lives!
Exhibition of Excellent Works II
Please climb up forever.
(Clear theme)
Han yueming
What can keep us from being depressed after breaking our wings and be reborn after accumulating strength? What can make us not give up after falling to the bottom, accumulate strength and soar again? It is the passion surging in the chest and the unremitting pursuit of eternal progress! (The sentence pattern is neat and magnificent)
Life is like climbing a peak. At first, everyone started at the foot of the mountain. Life has passed, but some people are still wandering at the foot of the mountain, and some people still live halfway up the mountain. Some people have been climbing. It is these people who can appreciate the scenery along the way and realize the magnificence of "other mountains are dwarfed under the sky". . (figurative argument)
In fact, the climb of life is not a competition with others. Sometimes we feel that we have worked hard and will stop, but when we stop, others are still running forward. In this way, we were ruthlessly left behind. Therefore, our life should be a life of struggle and unremitting pursuit. (figurative argument)
Throughout the ages, at home and abroad, many people have struggled for their ideals all their lives, inspiring generation after generation. (transition)
Struggle for home and country all my life.
There is such a group of people who, when they were young, had the ambition of "Why don't men take Wu Gou and gather fifty states in Guanshan". In their prime of life, they fought bravely to kill the enemy with the lofty sentiments of "putting an end to the matter of ruling the world and gaining fame before and after", and in their twilight years, they devoted themselves to their country with the wish of "Men are as dead as iron, trying their best to mend the rift". (When you are young-when you are young-when you are old, struggle all your life)
So we will always remember Jia Xuan, who patted the railing everywhere, Lu You, who never forgets the family sacrifice, and Fan Zhongyan, who always worries about the world first. ...
Fight for the light all your life.
This is Helen Keller. Even if fate doomed her to live in a claustrophobic world without light, sound and words, she would not be imprisoned in the darkness, but would try to find light, create warmth and pass on love. She can struggle because she has a soft touch. In this way, she went through difficulties and obstacles, got a Harvard diploma and set up a foundation. Until her old age, she was still running around doing charity. (Life is endless, struggle is endless)
Her struggling life has not only added different brilliance to her own life, but also brought love and light to others.
(The sentences and paragraphs of "Struggle for my country all my life" and "Struggle for the light all my life" are very neat, reflecting the theme of lifelong struggle)
Why not pursue it persistently? ! Pan Shiyi can change from poverty to real estate tycoon, Li Qi can change from obscurity to overnight fame, and Shao Yifu has devoted his life to education.
Why not? ! You are still young, your dreams are in your hands, and the future road is at your feet.
("Why not pursue it persistently? ! ""Why can't you? ! "There is momentum and a call)
Then go! Rush to the highest peak! (refer to the title)
Excellent works exhibition 3
Piano, Life and Running
(Title: Novel and Beautiful)
Hu jiacheng
With a flick of your fingertips, the keys are struck and the rhythm flows in the air. Playing Bayer's piano music No.66, the stubborn and unrestrained soul breaks through the barriers of time and points to the sky. Every touching rhythm tells people: Run, God's darling, there is no rest and enjoyment in this world, only progress and struggle. The first paragraph, echoing the topic, points out the theme of "there is no rest and enjoyment in this world, only progress and struggle", which is correct, clear and to the point! )
The piano music turned into a picture: the little monkey was trampled mercilessly at the foot of the mountain, and sadly squeezed into the abyss on the mountain and smashed to pieces ... With regret and sadness, you know that Yi Le will only die, no matter where he lives and where he is, running will always be the unchanging melody in this world. (the second paragraph, combined with the materials, fully tells the marking teacher that the main idea is to get from the materials, not to start a new stove. )
Piano music changes slowly, like flowing through a flat river, gurgling with clear springs, which is smart and natural, making people feel relaxed and happy.
Gan Weixiang, a security guard of Peking University, is just an ordinary security guard, but he is unwilling to be mediocre, but he is ambitious and yearns for the temple he sticks to. So he studied hard after work, not afraid of the distant flowers of ideals and the stars of hope. He just keeps fighting, fighting, life never stops, and hope is ahead.
Gan Weixiang tells us that life is low, but the soul is lofty, life is endless, and struggle is endless. If he is only content with an unknown little security guard, his life can only be self-abased and desolate, and he will become a lonely soul buried in the yellow sand of history. (Gump was at the lower end of life, but he worked hard and finally climbed to a higher place. As the little monkey in the material understands, only by climbing to a higher place can we enjoy the sunshine. )
The piano music gradually became loud and passionate, like a sword. The sword pulls out of the sky, pointing to the sky and blooming.
Deng Yaping plays an important role in table tennis. She won gold and silver medals and made great contributions to the country. Such a brilliant life has long been beyond everyone's reach, but she doesn't want to. After retiring from the national team, she began to learn English, from a bachelor's degree in Tsinghua University to a doctor's degree in Cambridge University, and then to the president of People's Search.com, and her footsteps kept going. Deng Yaping's example strongly shows that even if you have made great achievements, you should continue to climb. )
Being in a high position, even if life is colorful and infinitely beautiful, it should be icing on the cake. If we don't stop struggling, the pavilion will stand out with peerless charm and become an immortal force in the world.
Shakespeare once said, "A man's life is too short, but if he wastes it, it will be too long." If the water of life doesn't flow, you can only see the dullness of life, siltation and hostility make the water dead and dirty. But if the water of life keeps flowing, there will always be cold springs flowing from the source, setting off the magnificent sky and clean snow-capped mountains. It is beautiful for the soul to live poetically. (Shakespeare quoted an argument, which was both quoted and analyzed, thorough and profound. )
The piano music goes on, every note becomes the secret of life, and life goes on and on ... (The ending echoes the title and the beginning, and the piano runs through it, making the article compact. Coupled with fluent language and natural transition. The full text is like flowing water, which is really a masterpiece. )
(flaw: "Qin" can only be used as a clue in the text, which has nothing to do with the theme, but the flaw cannot be concealed. )