I finished writing this poem in one and a half classes. In the remaining half class, I chose a poem from students' weekend writing exercises (Autumn Wind Breaking the Cottage and Selling Charcoal Weng), used my imagination and added some details to rewrite it into a short story. ) made a detailed comment, first praised some children who wrote well, then listed the advantages and disadvantages of this small exercise, and then asked the children to find out the shortcomings or deficiencies pointed out by the teacher in comparison with their own small exercises, and talked about how to make up and modify them! The purpose of this comment is to make children understand that rewriting is not to translate these two poems word for word, but to give full play to their imagination, add some details and write a complete story! This little story must have added its own unique thinking, a unique story!
Through my explanation and students' revision of their own stories, children's imagination seems to be suddenly opened, more content is integrated into the story, and the language is instantly enriched! So I strike while the iron is hot and let them talk about how to rewrite the short story "Stone Trencher" and what aspects should be started! Children's brains are wide open, and some say that they can start with "throwing stones into the village at dusk and arresting people by officials at night", and describe the social environment with the background at that time; Some say that "why officials are angry and women cry" can be described in detail, and action description, language description, psychological description, expression description and appearance description can be added to "poor officials" and "old women" to highlight the characteristics and images of characters; Some say that the dialogue between the old man and the old woman can be rewritten to find out the reason why the old man "climbed over the wall"; Others said that the ending "In the dead of night, like crying and choking" was rewritten to show the horror of the old woman being taken away at that time; You can also rewrite the ending sentence "Tomorrow is morning, be alone with the old man", highlighting the poet Du Fu's complex psychology at that time and the tragic situation of the old man's family! Finally, I talked about "all talk and no practice", and then I went on to express your thoughts in words, rewriting "Stone Trencher" into a short story, looking forward to your masterpiece! The children accepted the task happily. It seems that everyone has a lot to write and is about to start writing!
After such guidance, I didn't expect this short story to be rewritten much better than the last one, and even I was deeply attracted by its story!
In real life, there is no smoke without fire; However, in the pen of a talented painter, he doesn't write about the wind, but only about the rough waves, and the wind sees himself. Du Fu used this technique here. After he wrote down two aspects of contradiction and their causal relationship in two poems, "What makes an official cry? Why do women cry? ",he no longer wrote" official cry "and devoted himself to" women cry ".It is not difficult to imagine the situation of" official cry ". The sentence "Say a word before listening to a woman" is a connecting link. That "listening" is the poet's "listening" and that "delivering a speech" is the old woman's "bitter cry" in response to the county magistrate's "angry cry". In the face of such fierce county officials, it is impossible to take the initiative to talk to them about family affairs. Every answer of the old woman is naturally aimed at the intimidation of the county official, so the content of intimidation is implied from the answer.
In artistic expression, this poem has many characteristics worthy of attention, but the most prominent one is: refined. Lu Shiyong praised the poem, "What is it? It is very simple", which means this. In just one hundred and twenty words, it has written a typical environment, characters and plots, and reflected the contradictions and conflicts in life with amazing breadth and depth, thus reflecting the ideological tendency of sympathizing with the people, which is really commendable.
The reason why the author can reach such a high artistic level is inseparable from his spiritual level of "worrying about Li Yuan in poor years and sighing in the intestines", but his profound artistic accomplishment and superb artistic skills undoubtedly played an important role.
"Poetry should be written word by word and read word by word." For a poem written in every word, we must scrutinize every word. If you swallow dates, you can't talk about artistic appreciation. Poetry should be written in images, and so should poetry reading. Although poetry is vivid, it is not as visible as visual arts such as movies. So when reading poetry, we must imagine the life picture described by the author according to our own life experience and historical knowledge. The image of a poem has its certainty. Generally speaking, spreading the wings of imagination according to the range determined by the image of a poem will deepen the understanding of the original poem. (scheduled for March 2020 19)
Postscript: Postscript: Life is still ahead, dreams are still far away, and the road is still at your feet! ! !