Help me change my poem.

Children's poetry should be lively, interesting, first person and personified. The first paragraph should be revised as follows:

I come from the dark clouds.

Go to earth with joy

People don't have much fun

Busy collecting clothes

Longing for me

There are times of tenderness.

Those arid lands

Watch me suck hard

Those dry crops

Watch me dance happily.

I fell into the water.

There are beautiful ripples on the water.

I landed on the mountain.

The mountains are greener.

I fell on the smiling face of the farmer's uncle

I am immersed in the joy of harvest.