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Self-writing: "Summer Evening" is full of flowers in the basin, and the new leaves on the branches are like green. The cool breeze sends warblers to sing, and there are many idle people in the court.
Not so good. The first two sentences are bland, without new ideas, images and artistic conception. The last two sentences didn't turn much. But I think the sentence "Cool breeze sends cool warblers to sing" is better.
Generally speaking, it did not exceed junior high school water, at least it did not exceed my junior high school level.
My level is limited, just talk about feelings. Please forgive me and correct me if there is anything wrong.