Teaching design of junior high school landscape writing 3. Teaching objectives;
1. Compare the fragments in Spring, Winter in Jinan and Summer, and find out the similarities: use affinity imperative sentences in rhetoric and writing.
2. These two methods are applied to the description of scene segments to highlight the characteristics of the scene.
Teaching process:
First, study guidance
Students, the landscape prose in Unit 4 is characterized by its beautiful and meaningful brushwork. Delicate and vivid feelings present us with colorful scenery of the four seasons. Spring and summer written by Zhu Ziqing, Lao She and Liang Heng are so unique and charming. What kind of description methods did they use to make their wonderful pen blossom? In this class, we will look for their wonderful writing methods and apply them to our composition.
Second, cooperative exploration.
1. Read three paragraphs of Spring, Winter in Jinan and Summer, observe the words in the scarlet letter and think about the benefits of using these words.
A rain is the most common, it will last for two or three days. Don't be upset. You see, like cow hair, like a flower needle, like a filament, densely woven diagonally, and there is a thin layer of smoke on the roof. The leaves are bright green, and the grass is green enough to stare at your eyes. At night, the lights turned on, and a little dim light set off a quiet and peaceful night. Going to the countryside, on the path, by the stone bridge, people are walking slowly with umbrellas; There are also farmers working in the fields, wearing hemp fiber and hats. Their houses are scattered and silent in the rain.
B The clearer the sky, the greener the algae. With these green spirits, the water can't bear to freeze. In addition, weeping willows with long branches need to be photographed in water. Look, slowly rising from the clear river, the sky, mid-air and sky are so clear and blue from top to bottom, and the whole is an ethereal blue crystal. In this crystal, there are red roofs and yellow grass hills, like small gray shadows of flowers on the carpet.
C in summer, spring blossoms and autumn fruits abound, naturally there is this neutral yellow. The harvest is there, but the hope is not exhausted. This is a peak season of connecting the past with the future and alternating life. You see, wheat has just been cut, cotton seedlings with seven or eight green leaves in the field, sorghum corn with megaphones in the air, and melon seedlings crawling on the ground all show great vitality in generate. At this time, they didn't last long in the spring breeze and light rain, but under the transpiration of the hot summer, they flourished and made a final sprint at the end of Xiang Qiu.
Clarity: Words like "look", "look" and "look" jump from the page, and the author and the reader seem to communicate face to face, which narrows the distance with the reader and increases the affinity and intimacy of the article.
2. What descriptive methods are used in the above three paragraphs? How is the expression effect?
Clear: These three paragraphs all use metaphors and personification to describe the scenery. In paragraph A, the metaphor is used to describe the spring rain, which is likened to cow hair, flower needles and filaments, highlighting the characteristics of thin, bright and long spring rain. Section B uses metaphor and personification to highlight the characteristics of Jinan's winter water, which is clear, transparent and full of tenderness. In paragraph C, metaphor and personification are used, which highlights the warm, vigorous and rapid characteristics of summer. These scenes, without exception, contain the author's love and praise.
Third, writing exercises.
Please describe a scene in rhetoric, and try to use words like "look" or "look" in your writing. The object of writing can be spring, summer, autumn and winter, or it can be the sun, the moon and the stars, and the content is unlimited.
Fourth, show evaluation.
5. The teacher reads Hydrology: The Bloom of the Heart.
The bloom of the mind
Autumn has come, followed by sad autumn wind and drizzle. Although I know that autumn wind and autumn rain make the world cold and desolate, I am still willing to open myself in obscurity.
The ticking rain, singing a quiet and safe song, seems to come from the distant sky and also from the faint canyon, pure and beautiful, quiet and intoxicated. The raindrops under the eaves are more rapid, pouring down from the water collecting pipe, as if pouring something out and slamming on the concrete floor, making a deafening sound. This rapid and rapid rain, like a magnificent drum, all the melancholy and rarity in my heart will be drowned in this loud voice and will never be found again. Pretend to be full of sadness, just like waking up. Suddenly, it was quiet and peaceful.
Everything after the rain is green, clean and clear, almost like your eyes. You see, before autumn is deep, the grass is still green, and water drops are hanging on the tip of the grass, glittering and translucent, sparkling, and dependent on each other, like naughty smiles. Willow branches stretch freely, just like graceful dancers' dresses. The lightly dyed raindrops on the Liu Yeer are crystal clear, as if a girl's tears are slipping down her cheeks. It's so lovely. Although it will fade soon, it still beats the most beautiful and brightest face and is full of charm.
Competing flowers bid farewell to their charming season, scattered into mud and crushed into dust, leaving only the fragrance as always. It's just the branches beside the flowers, which set off the leaves of the flowers and, as always, sang a beautiful ending for the final melody. Listen carefully, it's not loss, it's not sadness, it's not desolation and loneliness! If not, why are they still standing in the rain staring, perhaps waiting, perhaps saying goodbye, but all their feelings are so calm and serene! Come and go, what does it matter if there are gains and losses? Why bother to add burden to your heart?
Birds are bored. They looked at the gap and stretched their muscles. They are full of energy and shine with proud voices. When it rains, you can always hear them moaning under the branches and eaves. Call friends and have fun. There are rain stars in the sky, which are cool on the face, and the chill of autumn rain shrinks in the wind, but the birds seem to care nothing, flying, singing and playing high-spirited music with open arms, immersed in their own world and singing their own songs!
So, are you afraid of lonely autumn? Are you fidgeting and lonely? Will you be in a daze? Will you face your regrets honestly and realistically? Then, please ask the creatures in the storm! Perhaps, from them, we will find a home where our hearts can rest, and find that slow and steady calmness.
My heart will bloom quietly like elegant orchids, elegant chrysanthemums and proud plums, without wind or rain. I believe, I will believe in the future ...
Situational writing composition fragment training study guide card
I. Cooperative exploration
1. Read three paragraphs of Spring, Winter and Summer in Jinan, observe the words in bold, think about the benefits of using such words, and write down the results of your thinking on the horizontal line at the end of the article.
A rain is the most common, it will last for two or three days. Don't be upset. You see, like cow hair, like a flower needle, like a filament, densely woven diagonally, and there is a thin layer of smoke on the roof. The leaves are bright green, and the grass is green enough to stare at your eyes. I turned on the light at night, and it was a little yellow and dizzy. The lights set off a quiet and peaceful night. Going to the countryside, on the path, by the stone bridge, people are walking slowly with umbrellas; There are also farmers working in the fields, wearing hemp fiber and hats. Their houses are scattered and silent in the rain.
B The clearer the sky, the greener the algae. With these green spirits, the water can't bear the ice on its heart. In addition, weeping willows with long branches need to be photographed in water. Look, slowly rising from the clear river, the sky, mid-air and sky are so clear and blue from top to bottom, and the whole is an ethereal blue crystal. In this crystal, there are red roofs and yellow grass hills, like small gray shadows of flowers on the carpet.
C in summer, spring blossoms and autumn fruits abound, naturally there is this neutral yellow. The harvest is there, but the hope is not exhausted. This is a peak season of connecting the past with the future and alternating life. You see, wheat has just been cut, cotton seedlings with seven or eight green leaves in the field, sorghum corn with megaphones in the air, and melon seedlings crawling on the ground all show great vitality in generate. At this time, they didn't last long in the spring breeze and light rain, but under the transpiration of the hot summer, they flourished and made a final sprint at the end of Xiang Qiu.
2. What description method is used in the above three paragraphs? How is the expression effect? Said separately.
2. Writing practice
Please describe a scene in rhetoric, and try to use words like "look" or "look" in your writing. The object of writing can be spring, summer, autumn and winter, or the sun, moon and stars. The content is unlimited. Write your exercises on the line below.
3. Look at the teacher's composition "The Bloom of the Heart", pay attention to the underlined sentences and accumulate accordingly.
The bloom of the mind
Autumn has come, followed by sad autumn wind and drizzle. Although I know that autumn wind and autumn rain make the world cold and desolate, I am still willing to open myself in obscurity.
The ticking rain, singing a quiet and safe song, seems to come from the distant sky and also from the faint canyon, pure and beautiful, quiet and intoxicated. The raindrops under the eaves are more rapid, pouring down from the water collecting pipe, as if pouring something out and slamming on the concrete floor, making a deafening sound. This rapid and rapid rain, like a magnificent drum, all the melancholy and rarity in my heart will be drowned in this loud voice and will never be found again. Pretend to be full of sadness, just like waking up. Suddenly, it was quiet and peaceful.
Everything after the rain is green, clean and clear, almost like your eyes. You see, before autumn is deep, the grass is still green, and water drops are hanging on the tip of the grass, glittering and translucent, sparkling, and dependent on each other, like naughty smiles. Willow branches stretch freely, just like graceful dancers' dresses. The lightly dyed raindrops on the Liu Yeer are crystal clear, as if a girl's tears are slipping down her cheeks. It's so lovely. Although it will fade soon, it still beats the most beautiful and brightest face and is full of charm.
Competing flowers bid farewell to their charming season, scattered into mud and crushed into dust, leaving only the fragrance as always. It's just the branches beside the flowers, which set off the leaves of the flowers and, as always, sang a beautiful ending for the final melody. Listen carefully, it's not loss, it's not sadness, it's not desolation and loneliness! If not, why are they still standing in the rain staring, perhaps waiting, perhaps saying goodbye, but all their feelings are so calm and serene! Come and go, what does it matter if there are gains and losses? Why bother to add burden to your heart?
Birds are bored. They looked at the gap and stretched their muscles. They are full of energy and shine with proud voices. Listen, when it rains, you can always hear them moaning on the branches and eaves. Call friends and have fun. There are rain stars in the sky, which are cool on the face, and the chill of autumn rain shrinks in the wind, but the birds seem to care nothing, flying, singing and playing high-spirited music with open arms, immersed in their own world and singing their own songs!
So, my dear friend, are you afraid of lonely autumn? Are you fidgeting and lonely? Will you be in a daze? Will you face your regrets honestly and realistically? Then, please ask the creatures in the storm! Perhaps, from them, we will find a home where our hearts can rest, and find that slow and steady calmness.
My heart will bloom quietly like elegant orchids, elegant chrysanthemums and proud plums, without wind or rain. I believe, I will believe in the future ...
Friend, do you believe it?
Teaching Design of Landscape Composition in Junior High School Exercise 2: (Self-made)
Teaching objectives:
1, cultivate students' ability to observe the scenery carefully.
2. Let students master the writing method of observing and changing scenery at fixed points.
Teaching focus:
Clear the foothold, clear the location of the scene and the order of writing the scene.
Teaching difficulties:
Clear the center, highlight the characteristics of the scenery, write your own feelings, and do it beautifully and affectionately.
Category structure:
class exercise
According to class hours:
One class hour
Teaching methods:
Create situational inspiration and guide cooperative discussion and detailed expression.
Preparation before class:
Briefing session; exhibition
Teaching process:
First, create a scene, and the conversation enters:
1, classmates, it's the beginning of spring again. Unconsciously, we once again stepped into the embrace of spring. Although the pace of spring in the north is a little slow, it can't stop the news of spring. I think careful students must have caught the shadow of spring in dribs and drabs.
It can be seen that the students can't wait to report the breath of spring in their eyes. Let's share it together.
3. Students can report freely. Teachers and others make timely evaluation and feedback.
Transition: Since there are so many beautiful things in our hearts, should we express them? Then we will boldly "I write my heart by hand."
Second, cleverly set up cases to attract jade:
1. Teachers, like classmates, are always moved when they see beautiful things, and then they want to express these words and write articles. Next, the teacher will show his achievements and ask the students to encourage or make suggestions boldly and enthusiastically.
2. Show examples on the screen to guide students to comment collectively, so as to realize the advantages, point out the disadvantages and review the known practice methods and precautions.
3. Collective feedback from teachers and students, once again clarify the precautions for writing landscape articles: for example, the writing style is not neat enough; Lack of coherence in expression; Not vivid and concrete, improper use of punctuation marks, in order to attract students' attention and strengthen the repeated revision of the article.
4. Recall the requirements of landscape writing: Since all the students have practiced landscape writing, please recall what requirements landscape writing put forward for us. (free discussion) in a certain order
5. Analysis: Students, you have made this certain order clear in one sentence, so what are the advantages of describing it in a certain order? Write on the blackboard: the context is clear.
6. Transitional memories: In addition to writing in a certain order, we should also grasp the characteristics of the scenery to describe it. What are the characteristics of the scenery?
Blackboard:? Color? Form, smell? Sound, size? ……
7. discussion: what are you most worried about after grasping the characteristics of the scene? lively
Blackboard writing: image and concreteness
8. How can I make my expression vivid, vivid and concrete? We should spare no effort to use rhetorical devices such as metaphor and personification to write the things described vividly.
9, through the above analysis and summary, skillfully leads to the requirements of this exercise:
(1,) Scenery description should be in the order of orientation, from near to far, from far to near, from top to bottom, from bottom to top, from inside to outside, from outside to inside, or from middle to all around, orderly, with proper priorities and details. (step by step)
(2) can be written according to the type of scenery, such as mountains, water, flowers, birds, etc.; Waterfalls, rocks, peaks and caves; Pavilions, pavilions, etc. Write down the light, color and taste of the scene; It is necessary to write about its static state, its dynamic state and its environmental atmosphere. (A Guide to Understanding Ancient Poetry)
(3) Observe carefully, grasp the different characteristics of scenery in different seasons, use your imagination moderately, don't make things up, and write according to your own fantasies.
(4) Landscape writing can also write people and things in detail. If people, scenery and things are combined to write, the composition can be more touching.
(5) When writing a scene, don't forget the relationship between yourself and the scene, but consciously write your own feelings and feelings, which will make people feel immersive when reading.
(6) Appropriate and correct quotation of poems and songs describing scenery by predecessors can also add color to the composition. This requires you to read more and accumulate more at ordinary times, and don't look for it when necessary.
Third, excellent works are appreciated and accumulated.
1. Watch the video and listen to the model essay. Requirements: while listening, write down one or two sentences that you think are vivid.
2. Discuss the model essay: Where do you think the model essay is well written? Why is it good?
3. Summary: What inspiration have you got from the above analysis? What methods can you use to make the article vivid and specific? metaphor
Writing on the blackboard: personification and exaggeration
Fourth, enjoy the beautiful scenery and shine in the pen.
1, play the video, and the students will appreciate the infinite beauty and vitality of spring.
2. Conception and writing.
Requirements: Use appropriate rhetorical devices such as metaphor and personification to describe the picture. And can skillfully express emotions.
3, the teacher patrol guidance.
4. Discussion, analysis and comments.
Blackboard design:? Write a scene (self-made topic)
1, fine observation:
In a certain order? Clear context
2. Grasp the characteristics
Form? Color metaphor? lively
Smell? Voice personification? picture
Size? Exaggeration? special
Step 3 accumulate more
The design idea of teaching design 3 of landscape composition in junior high school
Facing the people, things, things and sights in the world, students should have a vision of discovery and learn to express their inner feelings and views on things. We should be able to feel the feelings and reasons associated with objective things through the appearance and imagination of things. This is my original intention of designing this composition class.
First, import
Lead the students into the natural fields, observe the characteristics of wind, trees, birds, grass and wild vegetables in the fields, and describe them in real, accurate and vivid language.
1. Teacher's guidance.
"All scenery words are love words". In nature, there are countless scenes like those we have just seen in the wild, and they are not emotional in themselves. If we only record them objectively, they can only be plain explanations, but if we let them bring our feelings, these things will become the carriers of our feelings and express our thoughts and pursuits, which are no longer purely natural things.
Can you say the most impressive poems and sentences in your memory? (Name the students to answer)
Some of these sentences reveal sadness about the passing of spring, such as "But now I think of that night and that storm, I don't know how many flowers were folded", some reveal the homesickness of travelers, such as "an old vine, a faint crow, a small bridge flowing water, a thin horse in the west wind", and some show praise for the tenacious vitality of spring grass, such as "wildfire never consumes them very much, and they are tall again in the spring breeze" This is because they are moved by people, things, things and scenery, and they are good at using these objective things to express their feelings.
2. Students think.
With "In the Field" as the topic, how to make use of what you have just seen in the text, instead of staying on the surface of the scenery, to express a feeling and an idea? Let the students express their opinions freely, and finally the teacher will sort them out. )
Imagine a beautiful picture composed of warm sunshine, soft wind and green trees, which can arouse our love for nature.
Can you tell me which lesson in the text you have learned shows your love for nature with the help of these scenery? (For example, Zhu Ziqing's Spring expresses his love for spring and yearning for life through the description of grass, wind, flowers and rain. )
Idea 2: Reading these beautiful poems, I want to get wet, and the apricot blossoms are raining. I imagine such a picture: under the bluestone bridge, there is a clear stream beside the stream. However, all this can only be seen in poems and paintings. In front of us, sewage is flowing, garbage is everywhere, and yellow sand is everywhere. Write about environmental protection and call on people to care for the environment. )
Idea 3: It is very rare for middle school students to go on an outing to see the sky, trees and grass. (Reflect the pressure that schoolwork brings to students. )
Idea 4: "Peach blossoms are still smiling in the spring breeze where people don't know where to go", "Flowers are similar year after year, and people are different year after year". Judging from the present scene, I think time flies, and we should cherish the beautiful spring when writing. )
Guidance: When writing, you must break through the shackles of propositional composition, so that you can feel like a duck in water, like a bird returning to the forest, and glow with passion. Driven by passion, we will consciously walk into the colorful social "big supermarket", visit the dazzling "big bookcase of life", browse to our heart's content, examine the vast world with our broad vision and experience the complexity. We should write boldly, don't stick to content and genre, and even write some essays and poems, because these two styles can best improve our association and imagination.
Third, homework
How do you feel about the changes of the four seasons? Please choose any season of spring, summer, autumn and winter and write down your feelings and experiences. The topic is self-made, the style is not limited, and the number of words is about 600 words.