Before the lecture, walk down from the podium to the teacher and give one-on-one guidance to the students' works. Each student's homework has different problems, mainly focusing on the following points:
First of all, wordy. A long poem will make the feelings to be expressed feel "discouraged" in tone. Our expression should make readers have expectations and emotional fluctuations.
Second, there are dialect slang in the poem. Use this sparingly. Dialect slang has certain regionality and limitations, and not every reader can understand it. Things without concepts have no feelings. If readers can't visualize in their minds, they can't understand your poems.
Third, conceptualization. Words such as "worry" and "emotion" are abstract words, so try to avoid them because they are too vague to express emotions.
Fourth, deliberately antique. Antique can be used well, but it will taste melodramatic if it is not used well, so we should pay attention to the secondary problems of creation difficulty and reader difficulty.
Fifth, the imitation trace is too strong. There's nothing wrong with this, but it won't glow. I suggest reading adonis's My Loneliness is Like a Garden.
Sixth, the words are not accurate. For example, when the word "persistence" appeared, there was no intimacy, no imposition, and no inner voluntary beauty. Simulated emotions cannot be hypocritical, but must conform to human nature and common sense. Emotional grasp should be nuanced.
Seven, too much parallelism. It is not recommended to use more. If you use it, you can use it more advanced.
Eight, the use of outdated words. The structure of words should not be too popular, that is, words that are too outdated should not be used. People often use it, and you can't arouse readers' interest in reading if you use it again.
In a word, we should try our best to make every sentence have emotion, rich meaning and poetic meaning. Modern poetry has the characteristics of metaphor, defamiliarization, jumping, beauty of meaning and beauty of image. Next, we will talk about the birth of a poem according to the problems in our creation.
The second link? Lecture on the birth of poetry
First, keywords: inspiration, technology, subconscious, intuition
The slide shows a sketch of the "faucet". This painting amazed us. What I want to say is that I don't believe in inspiration. Any art takes years, even decades, and only in this way can it make continuous progress. Lei Pingyang, a poet, said: Writing is hard labor, and there is no inspiration. So don't believe in inspiration, inspiration is just an idea of those who survive. This is a subconscious, unconscious thing with its own feet. We must work hard if we want to find technology. Technical things are "icing on the cake", not "like a duck to water"
Keywords: conception, imagination, structure, tone
The slide shows Emperor Wen of Sui's Willow by the River. Ask the students to analyze what this poem has written and what they feel, and then analyze its intention. Analysis: This is the sum of all kinds of relationships. In fact, two rivers are written in the end, one is the external objective river, and the other is the internal subjective river. Almost everyone of us has seen Wicker, and everyone feels differently. If we want to know more about wicker, we must use our imagination.
Third, key words: emotion, experience, feeling, presence.
This slide shows Xu Lifeng's "In the Past". If we have a real sense of existence, you will have a ubiquitous sense of wireless loneliness and sadness. Each of us has emotional memories and an infinite affection for the past. And this part of the unwritten past is empathy.
Fourth, keywords: emotion, meaning, display, prick
The slide shows the sound of the piano. Don't write all the poems. Our writing is always about expressing emotions. These feelings must be true. For example, the lines and expressions of the old opera bones in the video are vivid, and you can't tell the difference between actors and roles. This poem uses the idiom "Play the lute to a cow", and also uses the phrase "A mountain running water meets a bosom friend". Cows can understand the sound of the piano. How rare! It's worth begging!
Verb (abbreviation of verb) Keywords: mood, context, history, truth.
The slide shows Li Guoran's "Former Ministry of Industry". Du Fu, we are all familiar with him. What can you think of before his portrait? How to write historical figures into modern poetry? Art is interlinked, so we should have artistic intuition. Read this poem carefully and write a poem on the same topic when you go back.
Keywords: emotion, lyricism, rhythm, pause
This slide shows Li Jizong as usual. The tone of this poem is in one go, and the charm is smooth. Another word can't achieve this effect. The position of the pause is different, and the meaning expressed is different. Therefore, we should read more of our own works at ordinary times, and we can also read the wrong ones.
Keywords: theme, environment, complexity, phrase
The slide show was untitled at the later stage. The poet told the whole process of writing this poem into the evening. He wanted to express a variety of emotions, so he chose many images with his own emotions. Speaking of complexity, use a simple poem "An old man fishing in the cold river-snow". Five words have five dimensions, and this tension comes from generate. There are also image group, the most familiar "crow with a dead vine and an old tree", and image group, a group of phrases, which finally form a system and express a theme.
8. Keywords: metaphor, symbol, ideas and thoughts
This slide shows Zhang Zhihao's decent love. We won't talk about this, because we talked in the group. From this poem, we see love till death do us part, from which we can think of many similar love. Like Liang Zhu.
9. Keywords: emotion, object, perspective, level
Slide show "background". I won't talk about it because of time. I'll talk about this later.
The third link? Classroom training
Listening to a piece of music "Exploring the Window", everyone will think of a distant thing in the music and then write a sentence. After each student finishes writing, he will give comments to the principal one by one and point out the improvement. We should often train this way of introducing emotions. Poetry is all around us, maybe in a piece of music or a painting. Read more theoretical works, as well as books on philosophy, psychology and aesthetics. Recommend some influential poets. Chen Xianfa, Lei Pingyang, Liang Xiaoming, Thomas Te Lanster Ram from abroad.
In the last section, students can discuss freely. For the problems encountered in our own creation, we can find a way out through mutual communication.
On Children's Literature Creation/Yang Laohei