Take the first paragraph as an example: directly explain the arrival of Tomb-Sweeping Day, and then describe the environment. Comparing rain with tears, it looks more like a way to write a composition. Tears line, knot acacia. This kind of sentence is stiff and unnatural. Perhaps it is neither fish nor fowl to want the most classical charm.
The problem in the second paragraph is that the metaphor is straightforward, and it is difficult to integrate objects and images into emotions, such as sentence-making exercises for primary school students. Lack of organic combination and deepening of images, let alone metaphor and rhythm.
The third paragraph is purely a slogan.
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Attach a poem on Qingming theme:
day of mourning
Author: love
We really can't say anything on April's face.
Tears shine like flowers.
On the grass, dandelion is a child flying a kite.
The cloud just lifted him away.
The children are hanging on the clouds.
There is a bomb hanging on the plane.
Children and bombs are things you can't lose your temper.
Things we really can't talk about.
Qingming Festival
Everyone is used to this kind of game.
No crying
But crying