When the autumn leaves fell one after another, I stood in front of the window, as if I had returned to the autumn a few years ago.
The autumn sun, autumn wind, and autumn leaves are flying all over the ground. "It's just autumn, why are the leaves falling so fast?" I murmured while standing in front of the milk tea shop. She grabbed the end of my hair with a smirk on her face behind her: "Haha, let me catch it after all!" I recovered from the fright, put on an exaggerated expression, and rushed towards her with my teeth and claws, only to find that Pedestrians on the road looked at me in surprise, then stuck out their tongues and ducked into the milk tea shop. I ordered a cup of wheat-flavored milk tea and sat face to face with her. Still thinking about what happened a few days ago, the teacher asked me and her to nominate one of us to participate in the city singing competition. Honestly, I'd love to go, and she would be no exception, but there's only one main character. She is my good friend, should I give it to her?
The smoke from the two cups of milk tea in front of me was hazy, and I had so many thoughts, as if I had lost my way in the smoke and didn’t know where to go. When I looked up, she was looking at me. I was afraid that she would see through my mind, so I hurriedly picked up the cup and took a sip of milk tea. It was tasteless!
She seemed to understand what I was thinking, so she half-joked: "What, you fell into the sea of ??thoughts again and can't find your way back?" I smiled bitterly and said nothing. Turning to look out the window.
Outside the window, the autumn afternoon sun shone brightly. The coming gusts of autumn wind swirled the withered yellow leaves off the branches. The fallen leaves, regardless of you and me, happily circle and dance, enjoying themselves alone. Accompanied by the autumn sun, their shadows are light and peaceful, real and quiet. They are all protagonists on the big stage of heaven and earth, interpreting the beauty of life with their own unique dance. After experiencing the tenderness of spring and the publicity of summer, they have learned how to be measured and restrained. They are no longer reluctant or chasing after them, but lower their gaze a little lower, and a little lower, showing another charming scenery... I My heart moved inadvertently, yes, why do I have to be so demanding that I become the protagonist of the packaging? Why not put aside the worldly view and be a truly unique self? Thinking about it this way, my state of mind is rarely relieved, relaxed and peaceful.
"I have decided that I will give you the leading role!" She opened her mouth in surprise and stared at me intently, as if she didn't believe it. "Really, I really decided to give it to you." Before she could say anything, I picked up the milk tea and drank it in one gulp. "I want my taste, sweet milk tea!" I said with a funny smile.
The leaves outside the window danced more vigorously. In the haze, I seemed to have become a leaf, accompanying the autumn sun and autumn wind, dancing to my heart's content on the stage of heaven and earth, playing my own leading role.
The protagonist of that story is me, and it is still me.
Key Points for Scoring
The author focuses on his viewpoints, starts from a small point, intercepts a section of life, and writes realistically, carefully and deeply. The language is fresh and clear, the scenery and the psychology of the characters are described delicately and vividly, and the emotions change from the scenery to the heart. The idea is profound and unique. In reality, "I" gives up the protagonist, but more perfectly interprets the protagonist in "I"'s heart. The article is like "milk tea", with lingering fragrance and long meaning.
(Comment: Feng Lina)
Examination Hall Excellent Work 2
The protagonist of that story is me
A candidate from Henan
< p> In the summer of July, as the purple wisteria flowers bloom, each plump purple flower is crumbling, the fine sunshine fills the entire courtyard, the breeze blows, and a sea of ??purple flowers dances in the wind. This is a beautiful early summer time , if that thing hadn't happened, how wonderful everything would have been.With a "pop" sound, I raised my head, glared at the man angrily, and ran out without looking back. Tears covered the entire face without warning, and a wry smile appeared at the corner of the mouth. After so many years, except for that slap, there is no memory related to you in my mind. How could you treat me like this? I looked up to the sky and smiled, as the rain fell in a steady stream, and it turned out to be bitter in my mouth.
I have been living in my grandma’s house since I was six years old. The word mother is so familiar yet unfamiliar to me. Whenever I see other children lying in their mother’s arms and acting coquettishly, I can’t help but I clenched my fists, and the bursts of sadness in my heart seemed to swallow me up. You didn't take me home until it was time to go to middle school. Looking at you with a smile on your face, you can't say "Mom" out of your mouth. You smiled and said: "It doesn't matter, you will get used to it gradually." But I lowered my head and said two words: "Hypocritical!" For a moment, the smile froze on my face.
The table is filled with a sumptuous dinner, and every dish is carefully prepared by you, but I have no appetite at all. You kept adding vegetables to my bowl, but when I said "Auntie, I'm full," my hands froze in the air. I walked into the room without looking back and laughed loudly: "That's what you owe me." of.
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One rainy day, I was extremely bored. After school, I walked back in boredom. I opened the door with a bang and saw you reading my diary. Suddenly, fire filled my heart and I walked quickly. He walked up to you, took away the diary, and asked loudly: "Why do you peek at my diary? "You said: "I just want to know you better and care for you better. ""care? I sneered, "If you cared about me, you wouldn't divorce my father, and you wouldn't let me live in my grandma's house for five years. You are not qualified to be my mother!" "Pah! That slap was so loud! I raised my head stubbornly and looked at you. I saw that your face was pale, your lips were biting tightly, and your hands were shaking uncontrollably. I raised my head and spat out those two words again. :"hypocritical! "Rush out of the house.
When you went out to look for me, the hateful car knocked you to the ground, and you didn't have time to say a word. The heavy rain soaked the world and my time.< /p>
Every time I tell this story to the little girl next door with someone else as the protagonist, I always burst into tears uncontrollably, "Sister, what happened to that girl later?" "The little girl next door is always asking about the ending of the story. Every time I shake my head gently, she doesn't know that the protagonist of that story is me who is heartbroken.
Purple Wisteria Flowers Sui The wind dances, and I can't help but burst into tears again.
Points of score
The story touches people's hearts, but it is told quietly like flowing water, and the ending is quietly pushed to the end. The most touching thing. The delicate psychological, spiritual, and detailed descriptions in the article make the article full and moving. The wisteria flowers and falling rain create an atmosphere and blend the scenes, making people marvel at the author's mastery of blank space.
(Comment: Sun Hua)
Four Excellent Works in the Examination Room
The protagonist of that story is me)
A candidate from Henan
< p> Home is a stage where countless family dramas are staged; family members are the characters in the drama, and I am the highlight on the stage, the protagonist of the storyGrandma’s nagging.
"Granddaughter, you're still up at 9 o'clock. Do you have to go to the county to take the exam tomorrow? Oh, by the way, look at my memory. I just bought you toothpaste, toothbrush, apple, banana... Also, have you packed the quilt? How many beds will you bring? Is it enough to bring two beds? What if things change? No, I have to bring another bed. What do you mean..." Oh, my God, grandma, my good grandma, my granddaughter is going to take an exam, not moving!
Dad's thoughts
"Daughter, there is an exam tomorrow, are you nervous? "The father on the other end of the phone couldn't wait to ask. "Dad, don't worry, I've taken so many mock exams. I'm almost numb. Why should I be nervous?" Dad murmured in a low voice: "Then. good! That's good! "Suddenly I felt that my father seemed to be a different person today, mother-in-law and mother-in-law. For any exam, you must first write your name and exam number before taking the questions; you must read the question clearly and understand the meaning; you must write carefully and your head and face must be clean; do not do it in advance Hand in the paper, don't do it after school... Dad, dad, are you still so worried about your daughter?
Aunt's kindness
"Niece, come on, come on," Before I saw him, I heard his voice first. When my aunt saw me, without saying a word, she put a Guanyin Bodhisattva chain with red thread around my neck, which made me, a monk who is two feet tall, confused. I looked at it in confusion. Aunt, "Niece, my aunt specially asked for this for you. I heard it's very effective. With this, you won't be afraid of not getting into a key high school." "My eyebrows raised and raised from time to time as I spoke. My aunt!
Sister's advice
After a bumpy journey, we finally arrived at the exam location. The kind-hearted sister took the trouble to go upstairs. Downstairs, I was very busy moving my things up. The arduous task was completed, and my sister was going home. After thinking about it, she turned back: "Sister, take the exam well and try your best. Your family won't blame you if you don't do well in the exam. "I'm so touched, good sister, you know me best.
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My home is a big stage that is different and full of warmth. I am that I want to play the leading role in the family drama. Dear relatives, let us play the script that belongs to our family and continue to write our never-ending touching family story.
Points for scoring
This article is sincere and reveals true feelings in the ordinary. The article uses four close-up shots to vividly express the meticulous care of relatives, and the detailed description is particularly vivid and captures the characteristics of each person. In terms of writing concept, the key points at the beginning and end are very good, the four subtitles echo each other, and the structure is integrated into one.
(Comment: Sun Hua)
Exam 6
>Stars·Landscape·Group of people
A single flower cannot make a spring, a single tree cannot make a forest, and a single moon cannot make a glow. Whenever I look up at the stars, I unconsciously admire the stars. Starlight gathers together, but it coats the earth with a layer of silver. The river shines in the starlight, and the earth is brilliant because of the starlight. However, people say that the moonlight is pleasant, but who can’t see the deserted feeling when the single moon is in the sky? , that coldness.
The moon alone cannot shine, but the stars illuminate the universe.
Just as a flower cannot make spring, a single tree cannot make a forest, and one person cannot succeed. I fell in love with the stars because they cooperated.
It is known as "Guilin's landscape is the best in the world". When you come to Guilin, the pleasant scenery of mountains and rivers is enough to make those who are flying kites and ruthless people calm down, and those who are engaged in moral affairs forget to return. The mountains are accompanied by the gentleness of the water, and the water surrounds the majesty of the mountains. The mountains become taller and taller, and the water becomes gentler. Looking back at Mount Tai, there was only solemnity, too heavy and too strong, but I saw that the West Lake was empty and the color of the West Lake was light and thick, showing all grace and grace, without a trace of heroism, but less coquettish.
Mountains and rivers are more closely related to each other, but mountains and rivers alone are slightly more pleasant. Just like us people, if you want to go far, go with everyone. I fell in love with the landscape because they cooperated.
Look at the earth, when the wind and snow come, we warm each other; when sin comes, we show our sharp swords; when the holy fire is humiliated, we straighten our backs. China has gone through countless ups and downs. What has it relied on? It is supported by the arms of generations of passionate children. In the winter of wind and snow, that group of people worked hard without any regrets; in the spring of the Holy Fire, that group of people sacrificed their lives without any regrets; in the shocking summer, it was the same group of people who stood up as the backbone of China.
The 5.12 earthquake is the focus of the world. Our 1.3 billion brothers and sisters are united and united to provide earthquake relief. Because of cooperation, we have love, because of cooperation, we have enthusiasm, confidence, and hope, and because of cooperation, we create the miracle of life.
When everyone works together, their strength is as strong as gold, just like ants moving rice. One of them can't move it, two bodies are dangling, and three of them can easily get into the hole. I fell in love with the cutest group of people because they collaborated.
The beauty of the world requires you and me to discover it, the harmony of the world requires everyone to build it, and the happiness of the world requires everyone to make progress. Cooperation is the cornerstone of success.
Key points for scoring
The topic is novel and unique, and contains poetic flavor. From stars to mountains and rivers to groups of people, the context is clear and the material selection is novel. It is much better than the splicing of a large number of "5.12" earthquake materials. The language is clear, tense, and deep, not ordinary and commonplace.
(Comment: Huang Zhiping)