The author compares the character "dear" to "colored cloth" in one sentence, and says in two or three sentences that "colored cloth" has faded and become blurred. In four or five sentences, the author expresses his will by holding something (her), saying that his thought is to find the beauty of "the red flower at that time".
Six to ten sentences compare "dear" to "heroin", treat yourself as an addict, and say that you are addicted to "heroin" and cannot extricate yourself.
The author compares "dear" to "white clouds"; 12- 15 sentence: The author expresses the meaning by things, complaining that "Baiyun" is disobedient and does not take root, sprout, blossom and bear fruit under his own blue sky.
The author compares "dear" to "sailing boat" and complains that "sailing boat" is disobedient and wanders in the ocean of life without the author's "belief guidance", no route and no lighthouse.
20-23 sentences The author cries out loudly, asking "dear" not to leave himself, otherwise it will be further "poisoned" and "poisoned by one poison".
The left bank is arranged in branches, which has the most basic external form of poetry; However, its language, rhythm, emotion, image, association and artistic conception do not conform to the norms of poetry and lack the quality that poetry should have.
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Poetry pays attention to the beauty of language and requires concise, accurate and vivid language. For example, "your smile is as bright as the sun, and the whole world is brighter because of you;" A style when epiphyllum blooms makes every space full of fragrance. " (The author is unknown)
The words on the left bank are inaccurate. The first sentence compares "dear" to "colorful cloth", which is inappropriate, not only has no aesthetic feeling, but also is not as valuable as others comparing "woman" to "clothes". Six sentences compare "dear" to "heroin", which makes women in the world lose their minds and can't turn their hearts; What is even more deplorable is that the author regards himself as an "addict"!
The sentences on the left bank are fragmented. For example, the author complains that "Baiyun" does not take root, sprout and bear fruit under his own blue sky. In fact, it is just a sentence, but the author divides it into four lines, with the "shape" of poetry, but without the "soul" of poetry. Can a sentence be divided into several lines to become a poem?
The left bank is a loose "confederate country". The author often uses "scattered sentences" to break sentences at will. In the end, he couldn't even remember punctuation, so he had to let himself drift and let the reader fall into the fog. Q: Can China's punctuation be abolished in poetry creation?
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Poetry pays attention to the beauty of rhythm, and requires rhyming sentences, harmonious rhythm and fluent language sense. For example, "your voice is as clear as a mountain spring, and every note has the wings of a dove;" That kind of melodious flying in the wind blows away every sadness in people's hearts. " (The author is unknown)
The left bank is in a chaotic logic. For example, the author compares "dear" to "colorful cloth" that has become "fuzzy" in one or three sentences, and says in four or five sentences that his thoughts are to find the beauty of "timely red flowers" (meaning that he doesn't like "dear" and is suspected of "empathizing with others"); Six to ten sentences compare "dear" to "heroin" that he never forgets, and the author of twenty to twenty-three sentences even implores "dear" not to leave himself, otherwise he will be "poisoned by a poison"-isn't this contradictory? Another example is that the author complains that "Baiyun" has not taken root, sprouted and blossomed under his own blue sky. Excuse me: How do floating "white clouds" take root, sprout and bear fruit under the blue sky?
Because the sentences in Left Bank are fragmentary and loose, the structure is a "confederate country", and the sentences don't rhyme, the rhythm can't be harmonious, the sense of language can't be fluent, and it lacks the inherent rhythmic beauty of poetry.
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Poetry pays attention to emotional beauty, and requires words from the heart to express true feelings. For example, "if I love you ... I must be a kapok beside you, standing with you in the image of a tree." Roots, close to the ground; Leaves, touching in the clouds. Whenever a gust of wind blows, we greet each other ... we share cold waves, storms and thunderbolts, and we enjoy fog, flowing haze and rainbow; Seemingly separated forever, but dependent for life. This is great love, this is loyalty: love-not only your stalwart body, but also the position you insist on and the land under your feet. " (To the Oak Tree by Shu Ting)
One to three sentences in Left Bank compare Dear to a colorful cloth that has become "fuzzy", and four or five sentences tell the author that his thought is to find the beauty of "timely red flowers" (rather than the current "fuzzy"). What kind of true feelings has the author expressed? In seven to ten sentences, the author expresses her ambition by saying that she is obsessed with heroin. What kind of voice did the author express?
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Poetry pays attention to the beauty of images and requires images to be typical, vivid and aesthetic. For example, "if I love you-I will never show off on your high branches like climbing Campbell;" If I love you-I will never learn from spoony birds and repeat monotonous songs for the shade; It is not only like a clear spring, but also brings years of coolness and comfort; It is not just like a dangerous peak, it increases your height and sets off your dignity. " (To the Oak Tree by Shu Ting)
The contrast between "dear" and "heroin" in the six sentences of Left Bank is disgusting and makes women all over the world lose their minds. In seven to ten sentences, the author described his obsession and intoxication with "heroin" and portrayed himself as an "addict" unabashedly. It's really confusing. Honor and disgrace are reversed. Eleven to twelve sentences compare "dear" to "white clouds" and compare yourself to "blue sky"; The author compares "dear" to "sailing boat", regards himself as "God" and asks "sailing boat" to accept his "faith guidance", which is madness! The author implores "dear" not to leave himself, or he will be "poisoned", which is a threat and a threat!
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Poetry pays attention to the beauty of association, requires association to be natural, and is not far-fetched. For example, "the foot of my bed is shining so brightly, is it already frosted?" "(Similar associations. Li Bai's Silent Night Thinking is another example: "The desert is lonely and straight, and the long river sets the yen." (reverse association. Go to the Frontier by Wang Wei (1)
The association on the left bank is unnatural and illogical. For example, from Dear, six sentences are associated with heroin, and from Baiyun, eleven to fifteen sentences are associated with "rooting, sprouting, flowering and bearing fruit".
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Poetry pays attention to the beauty of artistic conception, requires the integration of subjective feelings (meaning) and objective situations (conditions), and forms an artistic realm that is different from real life, credible and has both form and spirit. (2) For example, "You are from a snowy mountain, and spring tides are your style; You run to the East China Sea, and the stormy waves are your spirit. You feed children of all ethnic groups with sweet milk; You roll up mountains and seas with strong arms. We praise the Yangtze River, you are an endless source; We are connected to the Yangtze River, and you have the feelings of a mother. " "You came from ancient times, and the waves washed away the dust; You run to the future, and the sound of the waves echoes in the sky; You use pure spring water to irrigate the land where flowers are blooming. You have promoted the arrival of a new era with great power. We praise the Yangtze River, you are an endless source; We are connected to the Yangtze River, and you have the feelings of a mother. " (Hu Hongwei's Song of the Yangtze River)
The left bank also has meaning and realm. In one to five sentences, the author's "meaning" is to find the beauty of "red flowers are just in time", and the "realm" in the poem is that "colored cloth" becomes "blurred" and "blurred"; In six to ten sentences, the author's "meaning" is "heroin makes me addicted and poisoned", and the "realm" in the poem is that "dear" is like a piece of heroin; Eleven to fifteen sentences, the author means "Baiyun has not taken root, sprouted, blossomed and borne fruit under my blue sky", and the "quietness" in the poem is "dear" as beautiful as Baiyun; 16 to 19, the author's "meaning" is that "sailing boat" has not accepted its own "faith guidance", and the "realm" in the poem is that "sailing boat" wanders in the ocean of life without routes and lighthouses; Twenty to twenty-three sentences, the author's "meaning" is that if the sailboat leaves the left bank, the author is "poisoned", and the "boundary" in the poem is that the sailboat leaves the left bank. Can such "meaning" and "realm" constitute an artistic realm that is different from real life, credible and has both form and spirit? Can it give readers a sense of beauty?
To sum up, Left Bank is a "fake poem" that is not written according to the poetic norms, commonly known as fake poem. Reading this poem, we not only failed to taste the inherent beauty of language, rhythm, emotion, image, association and artistic conception, but deeply felt that as a "literary aristocrat", her noble "chastity" had been deeply "stained" by the author!