In the first two games, the two sides drew 1-1. At the beginning of the third game, Class 4 (1) took the lead. I saw them make full efforts like little tigers, holding the rope with both hands, leaning back and kicking their legs hard. The students in Class 4 (2) were unprepared, and the rope was dragged inch by inch. "Come on, Class 4 (2)! Four (2) classes come on! " Shouts broke out on the playground. Suddenly, I don't know where I came from. Class 4 (2) students, some gritted their teeth, some tightened their faces, some held their breath, all stared round and exhausted their strength. I saw the big rope moving in the direction of Class 4 (2) bit by bit. Suddenly, the rope stopped moving and the game came to a deadlock. At this time, there was a sound of refueling on the playground. The encouraged students waved small red flags and shouted rhythmically, "Four (2)! One, two, four (2)! One, two! " After about seven or eight seconds of stalemate between the two sides, Qi Xin and Xie Bi, students of Class 4 (2), produced a great force and suddenly pulled the rope, and the red sign suddenly crossed the river boundary. "Class two won! Class two won! " The students sang and danced, and they were very happy.
2. The scene of the composition review in class describes "Come on, come on!" The playground was filled with cheers. It is Class Four (1) and Class Four (2) who are having a tug-of-war nervously.
In the first two games, the two sides drew 1-1. At the beginning of the third game, Class 4 (1) took the lead. I saw them make full efforts like little tigers, holding the rope with both hands, leaning back and kicking their legs hard. The students in Class 4 (2) were unprepared, and the rope was dragged inch by inch.
"Come on, Class 4 (2)! Four (2) classes come on! " Shouts broke out on the playground. Suddenly, I don't know where I came from. Class 4 (2) students, some gritted their teeth, some tightened their faces, some held their breath, all stared round and exhausted their strength.
I saw the big rope moving in the direction of Class 4 (2) bit by bit. Suddenly, the rope stopped moving and the game came to a deadlock. At this time, there was a sound of refueling on the playground.
The encouraged students waved small red flags and shouted rhythmically, "Four (2)! One, two, four (2)! One, two! " After about seven or eight seconds of stalemate between the two sides, Qi Xin and Xie Bi, students of Class 4 (2), produced a great force and suddenly pulled the rope, and the red sign suddenly crossed the river boundary. "Class two won! Class two won! " The students sang and danced, and they were very happy.
Ask the teacher to comment on the composition described in this scene. Hello! Thank you for your trust.
September 1 arrived as scheduled in the expectation of the students. The new school year has begun again, and XX primary school presents a peaceful atmosphere. At 9: 30 am, XX Primary School held a grand opening ceremony and flag-raising ceremony for the first semester of 2008-2009 with the theme of "Feel the Beijing Olympic Games and Carry Forward the National Spirit". The freshmen and new teachers of grade X in XX Primary School attended the opening ceremony. (It is redundant, deleted)
The opening ceremony (conference) kicked off under the auspices of the brigade counselor. The whole venue was solemn and solemn, and (the words used were too big to meet the scene description, deleted) was orderly. Facing the national flag raised in Ran Ran, the students stood upright (with a solemn team salute), and their love for the motherland and yearning for the new semester can be seen from their concern for the national flag. The national flag flutters in the wind, and the six children also strut!
At the meeting, President X summed up last year's harvest and praised a number of advanced deeds. He earnestly hopes that every X villain can firmly grasp every day of the new semester, write touching poems with his diligence and persistence, and paint the most magnificent rainbow in life with our successful brush! After that, President X, as the leader of XX Primary School, led all the teachers to solemnly swear under the national flag. Make your own promises. The captain also led all the students to take an oath, hoping to have new experiences and discoveries in the new semester.
When President X awarded prizes to ten classes that won the "Star Class" in the last issue, those smiling faces revealed pride, joy and excitement. Commending these excellent role models on the first day of school is to let students have updated prospects and goals in the new semester, which can make the learning flowers of our school bloom more and more brilliantly.
The opening ceremony marked the beginning of a new journey for X Primary School. I believe that every X villain has new goals and new gains in the new year, because everyone firmly believes that Liuzi is wonderful because of us, and we are more wonderful because of X!
Comments: The sentences are fluent and distinct, which can show a certain literary talent. However, the overall feeling is not like a composition describing the scene of the new semester, but more like a speech and a record of the opening ceremony, and the above-mentioned conference theme "Feel the Beijing Olympics and carry forward the national spirit" has not been fully reflected in the text. For example, as a composition, the description is relatively empty. We should increase the description of the mental outlook of teachers and students, rather than focusing on the content of the leaders' speeches.
Please forgive me for saying something inappropriate! Chinese teacher Chen
4. This afternoon, comment on the scene description exercise in Unit 8 of the first volume of Grade Five.
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It's not the sound of reading from school
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Another wave of cheers.
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It turns out that this time, the playground is
Tug of war will be held on June 1 day.
"Come on, come on!
"There was cheers on the playground, and the students in Grade 3 and Grade 4 were playing tug-of-war nervously.
At the beginning of the game,
Third-grade students start first.
I saw them working as hard as little tigers.
Grab the rope with both hands,
body
The child leans back,
Kick your legs hard on the ground.
The students in our class are unprepared,
The rope suddenly crossed the midpoint,
Slowly transfer to the third grade.
Move it. This time, the cheering students couldn't help it, and the shouts became louder and louder.
"Fourth grade come on! Fourth grade, come on!
"They are a.
Stamp your feet and wave your fists as if you were part of a team.
Suddenly, the students in our class came out of nowhere, only to see them bite their teeth, stare sullenly and pull the rope with all their strength.
Pull this way. Watch the rope move bit by bit to the midpoint. Suddenly the rope stopped moving, and the students in our class did not show weakness. The game entered.
Sustained phase. At this time, shouts rang out again on the playground. The students who took the lead in encouraging waved small red flags and shouted rhythmically:
"One, two,
Come on! One, two, come on!
"Other cheering classmates followed and cried.
The two sides were deadlocked for about seven or eight seconds. Qi Xin, a classmate in our class, joined forces and suddenly pulled the rope.
In the past,
The red sign suddenly crossed the boundary of the river.
As the referee's whistle sounded,
The fourth grader dropped the rope,
All jumped up.
"Oh, we won! We won!
"Cheering classmates also came running, and everyone hugged, shouted and jumped, so happy.
Just forget it．
5. How to guide students to design and reflect on the teaching of scene description? The life picture formed by the specific activities of a specific person around a specific event at a specific time and place is a scene.
Scene is the place to show the character, the link to promote the development of events and the center to show the meaning of activities. The word "scene" is unfamiliar to primary school students.
There are many such pictures of life. In children's writing, it is important to guide the "combination of point and surface" and write a good scene. The spectacular scene of breaking ice.
"At this time, other swans seem to be stunned by this move. They just stood there and looked at the' Icebreaker'.
I only heard the sound of' cha cha cha-',and the ice cracked a small crack, and then another one ... The ice finally collapsed and a small ice hole appeared. The tenacious' ice-breaker' continues to flap along the edge of the ice cave, and the water surface is slowly expanding.
Several swans came to help, and soon the whole flock of swans, about one hundred, took part in breaking the ice. They are doing so well in Qi Xin, so happy! The water surface continues to expand.
From time to time, shouts of' Krupp-Krupp-Krupp' came from the lake, just like the exciting labor song:' Brothers, come on! Qi Xin, come on!' This scene describes the feat of the old swan as a "point", and all swans come to participate in the ice-breaking work as a "face". The passionate description of the labor scene compares the cheerful cries of swans to labor songs, which are cheerful, warm and infectious. After learning this lesson, I instructed the children to recall, "Have you ever seen Qi Xin, Qi Xin working together to complete a task in life? Name one.
6. Find a quick description of the activity scene in composition evaluation. First of all, pay attention to the activities of the characters. Scene description is a description of character activities in a specific environment, mainly a "dynamic" description centered on character activities.
Therefore, the focus of scene description is not on the surrounding environment, but on the activities of the characters, showing the relationship between the characters and showing their mental outlook. Take the text "The Five Heroes of Langya Mountain" as an example. After completing the cover task, the five heroes moved in the direction of lotus petals and chessboard tuo on three cliffs, leading the enemy to a dead end, and then jumped off the cliffs one after another and sacrificed heroically.
The focus of the author's description is obviously not cliffs and deep valleys, but the heroic actions and unyielding voices of the five strong men, which fully embodies their fearless revolutionary spirit. Second, we should prioritize and sort out clues. Regardless of the size of the scene, there are often many people and many things.
Therefore, it is necessary to sort out the clue, have a master and a follower, have a detailed description, and have a hierarchical and orderly description. For example, at the end of the article "Flying over the Luding Bridge", the battle scene of "The Red Fourth Regiment launched a general attack" was written: First, the head of the regiment and the political commissar personally commanded; Then, inspired by the trumpeter's horn, "so the weapons fired together", and the loud noise shook the valley; So, how did the Second Commando Twelve company of heroes rush to the other side? Finally, how "Three Soldiers Company" paved the way for progress.
Although the incident was complicated, the author mainly wrote about the soldiers rushing to the front line, and most of the rest were briefly mentioned. The description of the scene should not be demanding and fragmented.
Third, to write about the atmosphere of a specific occasion, any scene is unfolded in a specific atmosphere, and there is no scene without a specific atmosphere. Scene description requires describing the activities of characters in a certain environment, so as to show a specific occasion and a happy or sad atmosphere.
Writing the atmosphere of a scene is actually writing about the activities and feelings of people in the scene. Fourth, we should combine points and surfaces. A scene consists of many people and things, and the narrative can be combined with points and surfaces.
Describe the whole scene first, and then write a few representative people or things. This can not only give people a complete impression, but also have a concrete feeling.
When describing the scene, we should try our best to combine point with surface. If you use pen and ink on average, you can only.
7. Comments on the composition of the scene description, 2. The description of the scene and atmosphere adds a lot of color to the article; ... a brief description of the wonderful place; The simple introduction of the combination of point and surface naturally transitions to the next paragraph; Situation description causes suspense; Make full use of language, action and psychological description to make things concrete and visual. Briefly describe the cause and effect and pave the way. Dialogue or some psychological description can be added to this part. It is more appropriate to change … to …, which is a natural link between the preceding and the following. The detailed description highlights the quality of the characters and is touching. Narrative setting, comparison between people, comparison between hearts. The personified language makes the article more vivid. The shape description is very interesting. It highlights the loveliness of. The introduction is infectious. It adopts the method of enumerating figures and giving examples, which is very vivid. Transition is natural, and every paragraph is explained clearly. This part refers to the examples in the article. The language is too flat and can be modified appropriately to make it more vivid. It vividly shows the beauty of literary works by using rhetorical devices such as metaphor and personification. This part can also be written. My humble opinion. Performing ... using metaphors accurately. Coupled with the association of ancient poetry, it is full of charm ... and ... form a sharp contrast, which is impressive. The metaphor ... is skillfully used and described in detail. Childish language is very interesting. The role behavior is increased to make the picture vivid. This article fully and properly exaggerates ... and describes the main points of the article delicately and vividly ... With lofty ideas, it will be great ... practical, containing simple and profound philosophy, which makes people feel refreshed and passionate when reading ... The close-up is unique and interesting. The full text is full of childlike innocence, which makes people feel more cordial to read. This article is full of * * *, and the little author's love ... can be understood between the lines. It's very interesting, which is in the same strain as the previous metaphor … Finally, the author expressed his feelings for … in a few words, which is touching. The language of the article is fresh and lively, and the description can grasp the main characteristics of things. Short and pithy, it is worth reading. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life and friendly to read. The beginning of the article is novel, which has the effect of pulling one hair and moving the whole body, so that readers can produce characters as soon as they meet. Form a complete image. The article can be described in fresh and interesting language … the lines are full of childlike interest and endless laughter in childhood, which is a masterpiece. Proper details and the combination of reality and fiction are two characteristics of this article, and the content of … is more vivid. Make full use of the combination of static and dynamic writing, supplemented by metaphor, personification and other methods, through vivid language. It makes readers feel as if they are in a dream. The praise of the characters at the end is sincere and touching. Paying attention to specific things and developing appropriate imagination is the success of this paper. The article is full of emotion, lyrical and picturesque, and is good at using metaphors to make the article vivid and concrete, which makes people unbearable.
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8. How to do a good job in composition evaluation? How can students run to the front of the class to comment? Can we ignore the role of Jiang Jiangang as a pre-guide? One is to guide students to obtain writing materials, that is, to solve "what to write"; Second, guide students to get the method of writing, that is, "how to write".
In instructing students how to write, I always think that most of our teachers are kind enough to do bad things, so I'm sorry. The teacher's "heart" is good, and trying to "help" students will end in "bad": fresh students with different personalities, different views on things and different inner feelings will write the same article under the guidance of the teacher! As a front-line teacher, my conscience says that the culprit is the "guidance" that teachers eat tasteless and abandon unfortunately.
Teachers take pains to "guide" in all aspects. First, they feel that they have not fulfilled their responsibilities because of their sense of teaching responsibility. Second, there is a misunderstanding: "How can students write without my guidance?" Teachers, don't forget that when students learn their mother tongue, they have a potential (by no means superficial) understanding and grasp of the performance law of their mother tongue before they can read; Have you noticed that so many illiterate people speak Chinese fluently? When I went back to my hometown, an old farmer who didn't know a few words challenged me to talk about the financial crisis. I was a Chinese teacher, but I was refuted by the old farmer and was completely defeated.
The other day, a friend brought her daughter's composition. I read an article saying: Your daughter writes so well.
I bit the word "composition" very hard. My friend smelled it and said, yes, all her articles start with slogans and end with slogans. That's what the teacher taught her.
Teachers' guidance is mostly in this state. Many times, students' writing is not about how to write their own feelings and opinions, not about how to tell their own stories well, but about how to finish their homework according to the teacher's outline. This "guidance" directly leads to vivid and different students writing the same composition.
Without guidance, will there be a situation that students can't write? A: It will appear on some students. What shall we do? A: Pay attention to the comments.
Writing teaching must attach importance to "commenting after writing". "Comment" not only refers to talking about and commenting on students' compositions; More importantly, when correcting, we find the wonderful points of students' composition expression, which leads to a training point, from individual to whole; Or find a common defect expressed by students, lead to a training point, and practice advantages from the shortcomings.
This kind of training, from students to students, students have a sense of psychological identity, welcome. This kind of training is "learning before teaching" and "learning as teaching".
There is a metaphor that teaching should be that students run in front and teachers follow. When students fall in potholes, they should come forward to help them and tell them what to pay attention to. Instead, the teacher runs in front according to his own ideas and lets the students run behind.
The composition teaching with "guidance" as the core is the teaching in which the teacher runs ahead and the students follow the pace of the teacher. Composition teaching with "commenting" as the core is a teaching in which students run freely in their own way in front and teachers pay attention, listen, care, support and help behind. If you want to evaluate classes well, you must read and study students' compositions.
Attention is "research", not "correction". Correction is the first step. After marking, you have to "ponder" the students' compositions, which is research.
In my opinion, studying students' compositions is the most powerful basis for composition teaching. Without the study of students' compositions, you will not know the existing and true composition level of students, and where the recent development area of students' compositions is, where they can be taught and where they can be taught.
A teacher attaches importance to the evaluation of the class and is good at it. He knows the students' composition like the back of his hand, and the students' composition in the class will never be bad! The seriousness of the problem lies in the indifference of many teachers to correcting students' compositions. More than ten years ago, I went to school as an intern, and my teacher gave me a glorious task: Xiao Guan, help me correct my composition.
More than ten years later, interns and interns came. I'm so happy. Someone helped us write our composition. Some teachers want to "comment on writing" online and ask students to write essays. Anyway, it is also a white batch. Students are too lazy to read the comments after reading the scores.
I "preach" in many places, instructing directors and principals not to take the teacher's "composition guidance" class but to take the teacher's "composition evaluation" class. As soon as you listen to the teacher's evaluation, you will know whether the teacher has carefully reviewed the students' compositions and understood the recent development fields of students' compositions.
As soon as you listen to the teacher's comments, you will know whether the teacher has systematic composition knowledge. A person who has no systematic composition knowledge can only say "good", "good" and "very creative" in the process of "commenting". Here, I want to declare loudly that Chinese teachers must have systematic writing knowledge.
Curriculum standards say that students should not be taught systematic composition knowledge. What is behind this statement? Every Chinese teacher is a person with "systematic composition knowledge", and the curriculum standard is to make a mistake and teach students "systematic composition knowledge", so I made such a kind reminder.
Isn't it unnecessary to be a Chinese teacher? Once, a teacher got up the courage to ask, Teacher Guan, what do you mean by systematic writing knowledge? This confirms my fears. Chinese teachers do not attach importance to "class evaluation", another big reason is that they have never "evaluated classes".
In an increasingly utilitarian society, without administrative promotion and interest-driven, the basic work that is firmly buried at the bottom is increasingly submerged. In some places, I know a construction manager who studies composition teaching. It is said that he has also developed something.
Call and say, "Teacher Guan, we'd like to invite you to class." My answer always disappoints them: "I don't have classes."
One of them is very rude. "You can't go to class, so what do you study?" It seems that I am a big liar, and he was cheated for a modest period of time.
So, how to give lectures and comments? The first step is to read the students' composition honestly and seriously, and extract excellent sentences from the students' composition while reading; Second.
9. The sixth grade Chinese "Secrets of Nature" focuses on key words and pays attention to scene description. First, the beginning is wonderful, and the topic leads to nature.
Teacher Chea Chang showed a photo of a sea eagle and a turtle at the beginning of the class, and described the story between the two animals in vivid language. At the end of the story, she asked: What would you do if you met a sea eagle and wanted to eat a turtle? Students begin to think that there are two different views. A student said that he would help the tortoise on the grounds that the tortoise is a small life after all. Another student said that he couldn't help because it was in line with the laws of nature. In the face of the students' answers, Mr. Zhang did not express his opinions, but introduced the lesson directly, which just happened to see how tourists did it. This kind of introduction makes children full of curiosity and can't wait to see how the people in the article did it and what the result was. Which of the two students did just now was right? It has aroused students' learning enthusiasm and stimulated their interest in learning this lesson. It laid a good foundation for learning this lesson.
Second, grasp the words and sentences and improve your feelings in reading.
This class is still full of Chinese flavor, and it is a down-to-earth Chinese class. The teacher grasped the words and sentences and did well. Here, I also want to say that teacher Zhang's questioning design is also very effective, using several big questions to guide the teaching of the whole class. Then the solution to these big problems is to return to reading and implement it in the reading of specific sentences and words.
For example, Mr. Chea Chang first showed us this passage: The facts soon made us understand that we had done a stupid thing. The teacher grasps the two key words of stupidity and stupidity in the sentence and guides the students to imagine what it will be. Students read the text with this question, and then sum up the matter by themselves. In fact, the center of the article has been presented. In this way, the classroom structure is clear, and the word "stupid" is always grasped when teaching the content of paragraph 1-5 of the text. In the teaching of paragraph 6- 1 1, we always grasp the word "mess" to teach, so that no matter what part of the content students learn, people are the soul of everything. However, when people think they are smart, everything may go the other way.
Third, expand sublimation and fully prepare materials.
At the end of the class, Teacher Zhang showed the children pictures and taught stories about silkworms, deer and wolves, Sichuan monkeys, cats and seabirds. After listening to these stories, the children really felt how stupid people's smart behavior was. These vivid stories and wonderful pictures shocked the hearts of students and made them feel that they would never do these stupid things again. At this time, Mr. Zhang showed the tourism information, let the students put what they have learned into action, and deepened the theme of the article.
Teacher Zhang's class highlights are very prominent. There are ups and downs in the classroom, and both students' learning and teachers' teaching are devoted. Teachers teach naturally, can evaluate students in time, encourage language, enrich * * *, and interact well. In solid reading, combining speaking and writing can not only improve students' comprehensive quality, but also return to reading aloud, which is hierarchical, insightful and emotional. Reading teaching has achieved situational blending, which is commendable.