I try my best to make spring come in time, just like I did to Mr. Xiao and his Looking for Spring. I just want to turn a temporary commotion into a permanent calm. When the words "spring" and "seeking" were spread out in front of me, I was stunned for a long time. Indeed, spring needs to be found, because of her fleeting feeling: when we are still lamenting the cold in winter, we have accidentally reached the heat in summer. "Spring is not just a season", April story, April inspiration, we are full of too much imagination, for spring, for Mr. Xiao, for China people ... spring, small, Chinese, when I rub these words, I deeply understand the temperature of the words, the texture of the language, the depth of the language.
It was many years ago that I first attended Mr. Xiao's class. It seems that there is no need to think hard, and the situation is just like yesterday. The impression at that time was: this man is so delicate and elegant!
I seldom define a person because it is difficult to define an individual; More importantly, in my opinion, a hasty definition is tantamount to rudeness and disrespect. All I can do is try to find more evidence to prove the reliability and rationality of my initial impression. After reading Dong Pei, I started. ...
First, reading Xiao is precisely the "second".
It is a great challenge to interpret Mr. Dong Pei Jr. with what attitude. Read his blog "Our Language" and reveal his love and persistence. Reading his lessons, I read his wisdom and agility; Look at his "camera comments", which are warm and sincere ... but these may be dispelled by the sense of distance between time and space.
April 24, 20 17, Zhongshan, Guangdong, a new composition teaching activity for senior three in China.
For the first time, I was a little embarrassed and uneasy to face Mr. Dong Pei Jr. directly. Strangely, such caution soon disappeared in our chat.
"Don't worry" and "Take your time", which he often tells me.
"Look at the lesson plan. If you find it useful, record it. " He said the same thing to me.
"You have a rest." He kept reminding me.
He always likes to see the world from a 45-degree angle, and his eyes are full of warmth and kindness. When he sees the delicate birds on the kapok tree, he will shout "so cute" without disturbing them.
Teacher Xiao likes to sing beautiful things with words. I believe that singing beautiful things can arouse people's ideals. This may be Mr. Xiao's attitude towards life. I guess: this gesture will definitely cause repercussions in his Chinese class. ...
Although this is my first face-to-face communication with Mr. Xiao, it has strengthened my previous evaluation of its delicacy and elegance. "Good, choose also." This is gaze and choice; "Elegant, talented." This is thinking and inspiration. I can clearly feel that Mr. Xiao is teaching me with his actions-Chinese is about life.
Second, reading Xiao Wen is really like Er Zhi.
Teacher Huang Houjiang advocates Chinese teachers to bring live seeds into the classroom. This is not only an idea, but also a kind of mind, which needs more efforts. Small exquisiteness just echoes Mr. Huang's proposition. Little Dong Pei seldom uses courseware in class. Among these things, the icon of "Xiao Wen" is very different. This word points to diversity and has rich connotations, but I want to believe that this is exactly what Mr. Xiao has-different understanding, different design, different expectations ... this is exactly what Mr. Xiao has in Chinese class.
"Looking for spring" began in this way.
Please let me-let us begin to patiently restore the inside and outside of Mr. Xiao's composition class.
first part
"I'm going to change." In a short time, Mr. Xiao appeared in front of him in spring. He was as happy as a child in spring and set off.
"Let's start with' fallen leaves'." Teacher Xiao saw the fallen leaves all over the ground in the spring rain in Zhongshan, and captured the circular structure of "flowers bloom-wither".
Spring clothes, falling leaves. This is the first seed in the class. So:
Teacher: Students, don't be nervous. We were just talking. On my way to the teacher, I saw the fallen leaves knocked down by the spring rain. When the teacher looked at the fallen leaves, she remembered a lot. Please guess what the teacher thinks.
For a time, the children spoke freely.
I think that the seemingly simple question contains the ingenuity of Mr. Xiao, which makes children open their hearts to the teacher's heart in conjecture, narrows the distance between teachers and students, and more importantly, awakens the emotional experience of teachers and students through the perception of the dominant language in spring. In such emotional stimulation and equality, Mr. Xiao presented his poetic expression of spring.
the second part
Teacher: A fallen leaf reminds us of spring. Thinking of spring, I wrote two poems:
Spring is not just a season;
In spring, there is more than one kind in full bloom.
-Dong Pei Jr.
Please read these two poems. Do you like this poem? Tell me.
The best expression of spring is poetry. The unique rhythm and concise images of poetry conform to many characteristics of spring, such as brightness, affection and sadness, especially the words "season" and "blooming", which concentrate the categories, and at the same time, the study of timeliness has turned to the understanding of spring posture (more of life posture). These two poems have also become the second seed. Its function is to aggregate the children's fragmentary perception of spring in the last section, and on this basis, open the classroom again, set the tone for the children's subsequent expression, and push the thinking level forward a big step.
the third part
Teacher: In spring, there is more than one kind of flower. Meaning has different postures and colors. In the picture below, the teacher thinks that every picture can see spring. Please talk about it. What can you feel from these pictures?
In this link, my first concern is the issuance of teachers' instructions. Teacher Xiao used the word "see" instead of "find" or "contain". I think this is not just a teacher's language habit, but intentional. "Look" not only conforms to the characteristics of reading pictures, but also can mobilize and even get through the channels of students' sensory understanding, which has the effect of light and shadow. Another exquisite example.
Thirdly, as far as the strategy of picture presentation is concerned, Mr. Xiao first presented four pictures: lotus leaves and dewdrops rolling, grass drilling out of the ground, waterfalls flowing and horses running. After the students expressed their opinions, they presented the dance of Guanyin with a thousand hands, the little girl reading, the 5. 12 Wenchuan earthquake and a child walking on the road of extension.
In order to save classroom teaching time, these pictures could have been presented at the same time. Why did Mr. Xiao present it successively? ! This is worth thinking about. It is not difficult for us to find that: in terms of types, the former group focuses on nature, while the latter group focuses on life. Understanding life from nature and moving from life to philosophy are the extension of students' thinking and the expansion of their horizons, which also coincides with the connotations of those two poems. So, Mr. Xiao asked the students to recite two poems.
The picture naturally became the third seed. As far as the classroom effect is concerned, the children have changed from the former group to the latter group's "thinking-discovery-expression", and their thinking has spiraled up.
part four
Teacher: According to the writer, spring may be like this. (Show teacher Zhu Ziqing's clip of "Spring" and ask the students to read it together.)
Spring is not limited to flowers and green grass. There are also many footprints about spring in our articles. Please look at the topics of the following two units. Did you find spring in the text?
In fact, following the classroom thinking, after showing the fragments of spring, we could have intercepted some fragments with "the meaning of spring" and "the taste of spring" in the unit content, such as Mr. Fujino and Haiyan, and then asked the students to talk about their understanding of "spring in full bloom". It seems that this can also achieve the purpose of seeking spring, but Mr. Xiao did not do so. Instead, it presents the contents of the first unit and the second unit, including the theme of unit writing, and brings students into a broader thinking space. First, students should reproduce the specific content of relevant articles; Second, they should choose fragments with spring connotation; Third, they should express them reasonably and effectively. This kind of teaching thinking is particularly ingenious and open, which puts students in the integration of unit content and the concrete appreciation of writers' verbal wisdom, taking water as the next link. This is also the "living place" for "living seeds".
At this point, in the dialogue with the teacher, students have completed the search for multi-dimensional spring from the dimensions of life experience, thinking divergence and corpus experience. The seeds of classroom and thinking have sprouted and only need to be expressed.
The fifth part
Teacher: Now let's write an article on the topic "I have discovered spring" and talk about your thoughts.
The students' ideas are listed as follows:
Health 1: from one's own breakthrough to one's own country, society and nation, one can usher in one's own spring.
Student 2: Facing the difficulties in study and life, we can make our own breakthrough and have our own spring if we dare to face them and overcome them.
S3: We are always taught "Don't talk to strangers". In fact, a smile from a stranger and a kind gesture will warm us, which is also a kind of spring.
……
Teacher: Students have moved from physical springs to diversified springs. Please recall that the topic of your mid-term exam composition is ... (Student A: Happiness always exists), so (1) please recall how you conceived it at that time. What did you write? (2) What will you write if you are pregnant again?
(Students think and communicate. )
Teacher: (Summary) In the process of creation, we should pay attention to "transformation", that is, transforming the great into the small, transforming the virtual into the real, and transforming the wide into the narrow.
If the first four links are at the level of oral expression, then this link becomes the explicit result of thinking, organizing the impulse, excitement and joy of "seeking spring" with written language, paying attention to the evaluation of children's thinking and speech, and eliminating the "lightness" of oral expression, so as to sit on the "weight" of written expression and let the classroom land. Perhaps we will have such doubts: Is it necessary to recall and reconstruct the mid-term composition? My idea is: (1) awaken students' recent composition memory, and "happiness" is a vague spring. Students can prove the validity and rationality of previous thinking and expression in "reflection-reconstruction"; (2) From the perspective of classroom structure, we are always used to keeping the classroom structure rigorous and complete with closed endings, but Mr. Xiao's classroom is in an "open and closed" thinking and action structure, so that children can learn to migrate, use and expand.
Of course, I think it would be better to record and present the results of the discussion between teachers and students (or blackboard writing or courseware), or hammer before conception and reconstruction, or provide a basis for students' subsequent writing.
The public's imagination of Chinese teachers seems to be like this: rich knowledge and elegant temperament, compassionate sympathy and empathy, humanistic vision and poetic feelings, independent thinking and free will, scientific and rational debate spirit ... With this as the first concept, people's expectations for Chinese classes will naturally not be met. Little teacher's Xiaowen is never satisfied with Chinese and Chinese lessons-leisurely eyes, poetic language, elegant movements and natural generation ... always make us feel that time passes too fast.
Eighth grade composition guidance 2 training objectives:
1, learn to select typical materials from life and express the center of the article.
2. Learn to grasp the details to describe the characters and express their thoughts and feelings.
Training focus:
Excavate the charm of details and show the thoughts and feelings of characters.
Training topic:
Write a narrative with notes as the main topic.
Requirements: (1) The topic is self-drawn and closely related to the topic. (2) The narrative is clear, and the true feelings are expressed. (3) About 600 words. Preparation before class:
1. Listen, sing your favorite song about praising your parents, and tell me what impressed you the most.
2. Make multimedia courseware.
Training time:
The second class hour
Guide the writing process:
First, create a situation:
1. Play one of MTV music "Father", "Care" and "Know You" before class.
2, mobilize the students' emotions, ask students to talk about their feelings and their own ideas after listening.
Second, the introduction of warmth:
Friendship and affection are eternal topics for human beings. As long as we live in the world, or we are still alive, we can't live without family ties. It can be said that everyone in the world is immersed in great friendship and affection, and everyone in the world is singing a refreshing song for affection; Everyone in the world cares about friendship and affection, and everyone in the world longs for friendship and affection as high as the sky and as deep as the sea. "Peach Blossom Lake is deep in thousands of feet, not as good as Wang Lun." This is the swan song of friendship; "The thread in the hand of a kind-hearted mother makes clothes for her wayward son." This is the acme of feelings. Throughout the ages, friendship and affection have been eulogized by many poets and missed by many ordinary people. No one can tell how high and thick the affection is. Everyone has different feelings about family in their hearts. Today, we will write a chapter on family, different families, different experiences and different feelings with the theme of "Into the Family". I believe that students can write different monologues about this family.
Third, clear theme calibration:
Write a narrative with the theme of entering the family and taking notes as the main line.
Requirements: (1) The topic is self-drawn and closely related to the topic. (2) The narrative is clear, and the true feelings are expressed. (3) About 600 words.
Fourth, writing navigation:
(A), the interpretation of the family: test questions
Affection, as the name implies, is "the friendship of relatives", which is different from friendship, love, nostalgia, teacher-student relationship, classmate relationship and love of national conditions. Attention should be paid to distinguishing and not confusing when reviewing questions.
(2) Remember family ties: material selection
Students, since we came to this world, we have been bathed in family ties. After reflecting on family life, you will see a day in the casual eyes of the person you love, in a casual action and in the most common reminder.
It is often a trivial matter, and I deeply feel it-Longjia.
1. Tell me what you remember about your parents that moved you most in the past ten years?
2. Tell me something that touched your parents for more than ten years.
(3) Listen to your family:
Children's words:
When I was growing up, I watched my parents' faces change from young to haggard, their hair changed from black to white, and their movements changed from swift to slow. How painful! Parents always leave us the best and most precious things, like candles burning themselves and illuminating children! What about me? Is there room for my parents, or do I just think of them when I need to dock?
In fact, parents really don't want much, just a casual greeting, "Mom and Dad, how are you today?" Just buy a midnight snack, cook an ordinary dinner, cover them with quilts before going to bed, and help them put on clothes and gloves in cold weather? Can make them happy and warm for a long time. Sometimes, I often think: I hope my children can treat me like this in the future. Now, do I treat my parents like this? I believe that people are interlocking; How do you treat your parents now? In the future, your children will treat you well.
My friend, the hardest thing in the world is to repay your parents' kindness. I hope we can all respect our parents with a heart of giving back and filial piety with a heart of gratitude.
Parents' words: an article on the wall of nursing home
Son, when you were very young, I spent a lot of time teaching you to eat with spoons and chopsticks. Teach you to tie your shoes, button, slide, dress, comb your hair and twist your nose. How much I miss these little things with you. So, when I can't remember and can't pick up the words, please give me some time, wait a minute and let me think? It is very likely that you will forget what to say in the end. Kid! We practiced hundreds of times to learn the first doll song, have you forgotten? Do you remember that I always have to rack my brains every day to answer where you come from? So, when I repeat the old story and hum the children's songs of my childhood, please understand me. Let me continue to indulge in these memories!
I hope you can chat with me! Son, now I often forget to buckle my shoelaces and tie them. You will get dirty when you eat, and your hands will keep shaking when you comb your hair. Don't rush me, be more patient and gentle with me. As long as you are with me, there will be a lot of warmth in my heart.
Now, son, I can't walk standing. So, please hold my hand and walk slowly with me. That's it. I'll take you step by step.
If children don't know how to understand them, they can only spend the rest of their lives in pain and die in the dark.
Please forward this article to your friends and let them know that family talent is the most important thing. Love can be repeated, but parents only have one life, so cherish it.
Summary: The students just used gratitude to recall their touching stories of getting along with their parents and relatives for more than ten years, which once again confirmed the preciousness and rarity of family ties. "It is based on emotion, emotion is to words, emotion is to words, and words are the voice of emotions." In the selection of materials, we should pay attention to what we have experienced personally. We can write about our life experiences with parents, brothers, sisters, grandfathers, grandmothers, relatives or relatives, with twists and turns of feelings, touching stories and feelings. When writing, you should fully mobilize your life accumulation and emotional savings, and you can't just tell or invent other people's stories. Some students write a composition, obviously living in a water town in the south of the Yangtze River, but they just want to write about the life of a girl from Shanwazishan in a ravine. I was sitting in a classroom with bright windows, but I insisted on making up the story of working girls in southern cities; Due to the lack of profound literary skills, the ability to control words is not very strong. Although it is about family, the first feeling is melodramatic, false and untrue, and the consequence is that you can't be moved by reading God. As an article expressing true feelings, how can such articles impress readers? In short, the selection of materials should fully mobilize their own life accumulation, choose the most familiar and emotional materials, avoid well-known materials, and choose materials that only I know.
(d) Feeling emotions: concepts
Affection contains rich and profound connotations. Because of the differences of everyone's experience, thought and accomplishment in life,
The expression and understanding of affection are also different. Therefore, in terms of conception, you can write family praise, because you have family; You can write about longing for family, because you lost your family; You can write calling for affection, because affection is forgotten; You can write to face up to family, because family is trampled; Of course, if you have a deep knowledge of writing and strong writing skills, you can also find another way to praise the kind of human affection that is not affection, but better than affection. But in the process of writing, we must always remind ourselves that we can't stay away from or deviate from the topic of "family".
(e) Expression of emotion: conception
"Love" is an abstract concept. Attention should be paid to turning virtual into real, concretization and visualization in writing. So we must pay attention to the vividness of language. Written examples must be described and portrayed in vivid language. In view of this topic, in terms of style, we can try to choose narrative, prose, essays and other styles to write, and the structural forms can be diversified. (Innovation Guidance: Composition innovation means writing a composition in different ways, different materials, different angles, different perspectives and different ways of thinking. When expressing good feelings, you can describe a story or several fragments. Language should be vivid and expressive, showing the spiritual quality, thoughts and feelings of characters in detail, and avoiding flat and monotonous narrative language throughout. In order to make the language vivid, it is very important to learn to use details in the article. Detail description is the soul of this kind of article. Learn to use language description, action description, portrait description, psychological description, environmental description, detail description, etc. to write notes and convey feelings. At the same time, we can also use some commonly used rhetorical devices, such as metaphor, parallelism, personification and quotation, to enhance the appeal of the article.
Taste: concrete, vivid and affectionate.
Summarize the text: The Arc of Love
When I was leaving, my sister, brother-in-law and little nephew all came out to see her off. My mother's legs and feet were inconvenient, so I didn't let her out. But when the bus started, I saw my mother waving to me in the distance, and that arm was the most beautiful arc-the arc of love.
Specific text "Arc of Love"
When I was leaving, my sister, brother-in-law and little nephew all came out to see her off. My mother's legs and feet were inconvenient, so I didn't let her out. We sat in the car and waved to people outside the window. At this moment, I saw my mother coming out on a dirt slope not far away. It was windy, so my mother leaned against the corner to say goodbye to us. She struggled to lift her arm tortured by illness, but did not get up. She tried again, but still didn't get up. The bus has started. When I took a last look at the slope, my mother's arm drew a most beautiful arc in the air-an arc in which love is longer than pain.
B Abstract text: "Reading Father"
When my father left, he took out 20 yuan money from his underwear pocket, said a few words to me and went back.
Vivid text: reading father
"This is 20 yuan money. Aren't you hungry?" When he left, my father lifted a thick cotton-padded coat, carefully took out a thick stack of paper tickets from his underwear pocket and handed them to me. ""In fact, all children who don't drink milk grow up the same? " With that, he quickly picked up the quilt, put it on his shoulder, and turned and walked to the door.
(6) Taste the classic affection:
1, there are three major feelings in the world: affection, friendship and love. There is no absolute eternal friendship and love in the world, but family ties are eternal.
2. "Love" is the most selfless emotion of human beings and the most precious wealth. However, because it is too easy to come, it is often ignored by everyone.
You are a lotus leaf, I am a red lotus, and the raindrops in my heart are coming. Who else is covering my umbrella except you?
4. There is only one kind of kiss in the world, not skin-kissing, but the combination of heart and heart, just like my mother who lives together.
Parents' love is the greatest love between heaven and earth. -Liang Shiqiu
Verb (abbreviation of verb) model essay (omitted)
Sixth, independent composition
1. Collect materials and interact.
2. Select materials and write an outline.
3. conceive the draft and comment on the changes.
Seven, modify the manuscript and copy the teachers' inspection and individual guidance.