? -Teaching Notes on "You are April Day on Earth"
Qishan No.3 Middle School? Hou fanghui
? Text demonstration
? You are an April day on earth.
-Compliments of love
(Lin) according to
? I said you are the April day of this world.
? Laughter lit up the surrounding wind; Lightweight and flexible
? Dancing and changing in the splendor of spring.
? You are the cloud on the first day of April.
? The evening breeze is soft, and the planetesimals are there.
? Unintentionally flashing, drizzle sprinkled in front of the flowers.
? That's lightness, that's elegance, and you are, Xianyan.
? You are wearing a crown of flowers, and you are
? Naive and solemn, you are the full moon every night.
When the snow melts, you look like a yellow gosling
The first green bud, you are; Gentle and happy
Water floats with white lotus in your dreams.
? You are a flower and a swallow in the tree.
? Whispering between the beams, you are love, warmth,
? It's hope, you are April day on earth!
? Playback in class?
? Activity exploration-poetry? Poetic eyes
There is no unexpected sound of reading in the classroom. The children read the text carefully for fear that they might accidentally break something. There was a girl in the front row with her head down, and she didn't even dare to look at me at the blackboard. Her voice is small and thin, and her eyes are hidden, lest I see her. Okay, just her! I bent down and asked her to write the topic on the blackboard with a smile. She asked softly, "Teacher, is it a compliment of love?" "What do you think?" "'You are April on earth' is the headline, and' Ode to Love' is the subtitle." The other children were whispering, but the girl heard them. She blushed and wrote the title "You are April Day" on the blackboard. When she finished writing, I then asked, "Why do you think' praise of love' is the title?" "Because I think the whole poem is a compliment to love." Oh, it turns out that the subtitle of this poem is used to point out the main idea. "Since poetry expresses love and praises love, isn't it more direct and enthusiastic to use' I love you like a mouse loves rice'? Why use the title' You are April Day on Earth'? " Then I threw out such a question. The children's eyes changed and someone was lost in thought. The classroom is very quiet. I looked into the children's eyes and waited quietly. When we found someone eager to try, our conversation began.
Health 1: "I love you like a mouse and rice" is too direct and has no charm.
Health 2: I feel that "I love you, just like a mouse loves rice" is too material and lacks aesthetic feeling.
Health 3: "You are April Day" makes people full of imagination about "love".
Health 4: I think "You are April Day on Earth" is better.
Teacher: It's true. "I love you like a mouse loves rice" is full of material sense, just like a woman staggering out of the painting in pajamas and slippers, while "You are April on earth" shines on the small window of the attic like the afterglow of the sunset. A beautiful silhouette leans against the window, holding a book in her hand. The breeze blows and her long hair flutters with the wind. ...
Health 5: I know, teacher. This is poetry! The title "You are April Day on Earth" is full of poetry.
Teacher: Poetic, a wonderful word. Although our life may be a chicken feather, who has no poetry and distance in his heart? Do you think the focus of the poet's writing is "you" or "April Day"?
Health 6: It is "you", because the whole poem expresses the love of "I" for "you".
Health 7: I think it's April Day, because all the contents in the poem are about April Day, such as four winds, clouds, stars, flowers, Bai Lianhua and so on.
Teacher: Please read the topic again and think about what sentence pattern it is.
Health 8: the judgment sentence. Teacher, I know. The poet compares "you" to "April Day", and writing "April Day" means writing "you". How beautiful the poet's "April Day" is, how beautiful you are.
Teacher: Yes, this is a poem, expressing feelings with images. How many times does this sentence appear in the poem? What's the difference? What's the role?
Health 9: the beginning and the end. Start with a topic, tell the reader the main content to write, and take care of the beginning at the end, so that the whole poem echoes from beginning to end.
Teacher: Has it just begun to end? Has the poet's emotion not changed?
Health 10 (talking while meditating): The poet's mood will change, and his feelings will become stronger and stronger, which is sublimation ... Yes! Sublimation theme
Teacher: What's the problem?
Sheng 1 1: This sentence summarizes the main content of the whole poem. The poet not only uses this sentence to string together the whole poem, but also uses this sentence as a topic. Um ... this sentence should be-poetic eyes.
Poetic, poetic eyes, this is "you are an April day on earth"!
Activity exploration 2? Comparative reading? Distinguish and appreciate
In order to let children know the strangeness and ethereality of Lin's poems, I rewrote the original poem, and wanted to compare it repeatedly in reading activities, explore this poem with students and feel the unique beauty of this poem. Rewrite poetry:
I said you are the April day of this world.
? Laughter ignited the wind in all directions;
The bright soul changes in the splendor of spring.
? You are the cloud on the first day of April.
? At dusk, the breeze blows,
? The planetesimals flicker unintentionally,
? It's going to rain in Mao Mao, before the flowers.
? That's light, that's elegant, and you are,
? You wear a crown of bright flowers,
? In your naive and serious way
? You are the full moon every night.
When the snow melts, you look like a yellow gosling
Bright green, you are;
? Gentle and happy
Water floats with white lotus in your dreams.
? You are a flower,
? Swallows chirping on the beam.
? You are love, warmth and hope.
You are the April day on earth!
After reading the poem on the big screen, the children soon found that it was different from the poem in the textbook and found it out. .
Sheng 1 1: Teacher, there are many differences between the poem on the big screen and the original poem, such as "laugh", "light", "change" and "vivid". ...
Health 12: there are also broken lines, such as lightness, freshness, gentleness and joy. The stars are here, swallows and hopes.
Health 13: The teacher also added words to change "softness" into "softness" and "flash" into "flash".
Health 14: Some words were deleted. In the last section, "one tree at a time" was deleted.
Teacher: I rewrote this poem on the big screen. What do you think of the teacher's change? Do you stop reading fluently? The artistic conception is also beautiful?
Health 15: The teacher rewrote it really well, but it was not as good as the original poem. For example, "smile" and "smile", "smile" should be a "loud" smile, "smile" is too solid and lacks vitality. Another example is "social dance" and "exchange". "Social dance" has dynamic beauty and humanistic flavor, while "exchange" does not.
Student 16: Teacher, I want to talk about "softness" and "softness", "flash" and "flash". First of all, "soft" and "flash" rhyme, and the rhythm is out of order after revision. Secondly, "softness" and "flash" leave a space full of imagination, while "softness" and "flash" are real, too real and too thorough, which destroys the implicit beauty of poetry.
Teacher: Your speech is very hierarchical, insightful and powerful! Does anyone else want to talk?
Student 17: Teacher, I want to take Tender Joy as an example to talk about broken lines. When "gentle joy" is followed by "you are there", I feel that the poet's emotion is full and warm, just as I am afraid that the expression of this emotion will not be completely interrupted. If I change to the next line, there will be no urgency to express my joy. There is also the phrase "light green with buds". You deleted the word "bud", so you can't reflect how fresh this "green" is, let alone the freshness of the newly sprouted "new green".
Teacher: How convincing! I don't know how to refute you. However, I would like to add that Lin is deeply influenced by English classical poetry. Her poems are often unexpected, strange and ingenious in line breaking and rhythm, which is not the symmetrical beauty we are used to.
Health 18: Teacher, in the last sentence of the second section, you added a comma, which I don't think is appropriate. It should be read as "before the rain/flowers in Mao Mao", so reading "rain in Mao Mao" becomes a verb, as if it is raining gently here and there, and the modality and artistic conception are more beautiful.
Health 19: some people say that when the teacher changed the last paragraph, he changed "hope" from the previous line to the next line, just the opposite. I found that the teacher changed the word "yes" in the next line to the previous line here. I read this sentence over and over again, and I think it is better to put the original poem and "You are the April day on earth" in the next line, which not only expresses the poet's yearning for "you" and "love", but also helps to promote and sublimate feelings.
Health 20: I want to supplement this classmate's speech. I think besides my desire for you, there is also the meaning that you bring me hope.
Teacher: I really admire these two students. They interpret "hope" from the poet's own point of view, that is, "I" is full of hope for "you", "you" is love and warmth, and "you" brings me "hope".
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Activities and inquiry ripple through dialogue, from here to there, from here to there, filling the whole classroom. Although the children are still a little shy, although reading in class is not enough, I see the light in their eyes. Slow down, slow down, all the waiting is worth it, not to mention just three or five minutes. At this moment, I want to say, children, you are the April day on earth.
? Teaching reflection
"You are April Day on Earth" is the fourth poem in Unit 1 of Grade 9. The main task of this unit is "activities? Explore. " It's mid-October, and I guess the children have learned this lesson. Sure enough, the children are very skilled in reciting questions in class. I remember teacher Huang Houjiang said, "Chinese teaching should shift from' teaching' to' learning'." So I deleted the original reading contest. Teacher Wang Rongsheng once said: "Determine the teaching content according to the style of the text." So I focused on two activities in class-"Poetry? Poetry eye ""than reading? Appreciation "to explore the charm of poetry. Through the comparative reading activities of stress, line breaking, pause, rhythm and keywords in reading aloud, we can explore the emotional tone of the poem with students, experience the concise and implicit language of the poem and grasp the uniqueness of the poem. Although I spent a lot of time on it, I was not worried, nor did I impose my interpretation on the students. Let's walk slowly together. Near, near ... "You" in "April Day" gradually entered the hearts of students like a breeze and warm sunshine, and the scene seemed to be "a drizzle before flowers".
Needless to say, everything is so natural in the classroom, from text language to students' thinking, from students' thinking to aesthetic ability, from aesthetic ability to cultural implication. However, poetry teaching focuses on reading, so it is best to set the reading level requirements and appreciate and understand poetry through various forms of reading. Obviously, the "reading" in this class is still not enough. It will be more interesting if we can read the instructions, feelings and rhythms in time during the comparison process.