In the morning, fresh air and cool breeze will refresh you. Look! Birds are twittering in the morning songs, streams are flowing slowly, the sun shines warm sunshine on the countryside, willows are full of vitality, and birds are singing with relish.
At dusk, a wisp of smoke comes from the top of the mountain in the distance, and there is still a trace of residual heat when the hand touches the ground, and there is a trace of warmth in the cool breeze. Looking at the sky, I saw that the crimson sunset glow had dyed half the sky red. The blue sky turned into a crimson skirt. Beautiful sunsets have different shapes. Two horses ran in the air and disappeared. Which magician dressed the dusk so beautifully and charmingly?
At night, the sun reluctantly left the sky, and the beautiful moon sprinkled a piece of Yin Hui on the quiet earth. The gentle moonlight shines on the stream, which is more beautiful. The sky is like a blue Persian carpet, inlaid with yellow "little gems" and "twinkling stars are full of little stars" Little stars sang a beautiful song.
Quiet and charming night, chicken. Dogs. Cats. Ducks. Everyone fell asleep, flowers and grass fell asleep, and people entered a sweet dream.
Pastoral picturesque, poetic and song-like, pastoral beauty makes people want to stay!
Teacher's comment: This is an article about scenery, which once described the beautiful pastoral scenery of "morning, dusk and night" in beautiful language. The teacher feels from your article that you care about life and love nature. The beautiful countryside is like a painting, a poem and a song, which is colorful in your writing.
2. Write a composition about the teacher, with notes and comments, and describe it vividly. Not only dear Miss Wang, but also a Chinese teacher in our class. She is considerate, rich in teaching experience and lively in lectures. At the same time, teachers will also teach us some excellent moral qualities and guide us on the way forward. She always trains the whole class carefully and helps naughty students. She is our beloved teacher Wang. There is a boy in our class who has a bad temper. He is always absent-minded in his studies and has a bad temper. However, Mr. Wang did not give up on him because of this. On the contrary, teachers often help him with his study and life and teach him various learning methods. At the same time, he tried to change his personality. In the fourth grade, the teacher always accompanied him to study at night. Teach him how to recite the text effectively and quickly, and how to grasp the key points of the text. Gradually, his grades began to rise slowly, and by the final exam, he had a qualitative leap. More importantly, he became kinder, calmer and less likely to lose control. This is the result of students' unremitting efforts, but behind this achievement, it has cost Mr. Wang a lot of inculcation. Not only the boy, but also I benefited a lot from his teaching. None of my previous compositions are outstanding, and I don't love it so much now. However, Mr. Wang will carefully write a comment at the end of my composition. I sometimes point out the shortcomings in the text and sometimes affirm some sentences. That is bright red handwriting. Let me have enthusiasm and persistence in composing music. The fragrance of flowers is inseparable from the moisture of sunshine and rain, the height of trees is inseparable from the tempering of wind and rain, and our vigorous growth is inseparable from the hard education of teachers. I want to thank my dear teacher Wang, who not only brought us rich knowledge and wisdom, but also gave us a lot of help, making us take the first step on the road of life smoothly! Comments: With concrete examples, it vividly depicts the image of Mr. Wang who loves students and is conscientious. Through proper description, I explained that Mr. Wang in the center is like a loving mother, diligent in teaching and infinitely caring for students. PS: the article is original, written before, and the comments are temporary ... I hope it can be adopted.
3. Writing landscape comments Spring is coming!
Warm air, ice-breaking running water, green willow branches and budding buds, these messengers of spring disperse the cold wind and bring a warm breath! In the spring surrounded by the wind, the sun is warm, everything is full of vitality, the spring rain is moist, and the fragrance is fragrant. "The branches of red apricots are full of spring", and the elves in nature are naturally unwilling to be lonely, showing the quiet and rich spring as vigorously as sound. March, such a lively annual ring, the month when everything recovers, is also a more wonderful way to interpret spring.
The drizzle in March is like silk and fog, which can only be vaguely felt. It is like a gentle world, shrouded in it, like a dreamlike dream. Walking in the drizzle, you can feel the beauty and romance of "light rain and fine wind" Listening to the splash under your feet and touching the soft rain is really a rare comfort and leisure.
Spring in March is the breeding season, and everything is in the bud. The wicker swayed gently, and the tip of the wicker touched the water slightly, causing general ripples. "Poplar smoke is lighter than that in Han Xiao", willows curl up, and endless light green is everywhere, feeling the refreshing gentle touch. I believe that at the end of spring, accompanied by flying catkins, it is another touching beauty!
Spring has come, and the willows are falling and green as the sea. In spring, the grass grows and the warblers fly, and the silk tapestries blow on the embankment, filled with warm breath everywhere, playing a harmonious melody and interpreting a moving picture! Spring has come, and the things in March are silent and audible. In the singing of orioles, in the budding spring flowers, in the lingering spring rain silk, and in the fluttering wicker, spring is calling everywhere! Wandering in the warm wind of March, strolling in the small garden, enjoying yourself, spring is coming.
The colors of spring are really colorful, the sun is red, the sky is blue, the treetops are light green, and the winter jasmine is delicate yellow ... No wonder poets love to sing praises to spring, and painters love to describe it, because spring is the fusion of all the beautiful things in the world and the meeting of all colors. I wonder why these colorful colors choose spring to come to the earth.
The spring rain is continuous and gentle. It moistens the earth, caresses it and whispers to it. When people are unconscious, they quietly merge into a river and accumulate into a deep pool. Ah, it is the spring rain that brings green life to the pool.
Wind and rain always come together. In early spring, the cold wind awakened everything. The treetops are green, the earth is green, and even the platforms of towering buildings are green. Wang Anshi of the Song Dynasty wrote a poem: "Spring breeze is green in Jiang Nanan." How well you speak! But is it more than "green"?
Under the blowing of the wind, the wild flowers all over the mountains opened their eyes, one, two, one cluster, two clusters ... even joined together and merged into the sea. People face this ocean of blue, red and yellow ... gorgeous colors, and their troubles are gone, and their listlessness is gone. Thank the color of spring for giving us upward strength and confidence.
Look at the sky in spring. Why is the sky colorful and dazzling? Ah, that's a kite flown by children. Under the blue sky and white clouds, kites of various shapes are flying freely. What a refreshing sight! Spring belongs to children, and the sky belongs to children, but aren't they also trying to dress up spring and add the color of spring?
However, if you lean down and look closely, you will find that there are scattered yellow in the pleasing colors, which is the trace left by last winter. You may sigh: "A fly in the ointment!" Yes, who will be in a good mood when looking at those few broken limbs and flagging grasses? However, you might as well cut off the yellow winter clothes, and you will find something more novel. It's green inside! It turns out that yellow grass is also gestating, gestating a better spring.
I finally understand why the colors in spring are so rich: it is the colored pens in the hands of Miss Chun who are waving diligently; It is naive children who dress naive; It is a grass that is silently bred and ignored by people. People who enjoy the color of spring, what have you contributed to the color of spring?
4. How to write your feelings and comments after reading the composition? Evaluating and correcting students' compositions is an important part of Chinese teaching and the crowning touch of this link. It is also the teacher's response to the students' enthusiasm for writing. From the writing psychology of students, what students are most eager to know after each composition is the teacher's feedback on the composition, so as to find their sense of self and academic achievement from the comments on the composition. So every word in teacher composition evaluation is direct. Below I will talk about my understanding on how to write a good composition evaluation for my peers' reference. First, the advantages of students' compositions should be affirmed and praised through reserved criticism of the forms and skills of compositions. Similarly, it is necessary to correct and criticize the shortcomings of students' compositions-avoiding their shortcomings can promote their strengths. Besides, the composition is different from the usual talking and chatting, I want to say. A, b, c, d, the pen is average, and the writing has no focus; Indiscriminate use of dialect slang, coining words, saying irregular words, etc., must be pointed out in the comments, but it should not be killed with a stick, and hope and encouragement should be given. "I believe you can make things clear one by one in your next composition." "If we can make a long story short, the effect will be multiplied." "Your article is beautiful, if the text is also beautiful. Students will not be bored, but will be very comfortable. They accept their opinions from the heart, will write with greater enthusiasm and energy next time, and will try to avoid similar shortcomings. Second, use interesting language. Cheng Yi, an educator in our country, said, "If you don't teach people interest, you won't be happy to learn. "Comments, too, are boring and rigid, and students will not be happy when they read them, which will not play a guiding role. It can not only create a pleasant learning environment-even if it is criticism, students are willing to accept it and become the adhesive between teachers and students-but also achieve the effect of "not making people think after laughing". A student can't use punctuation correctly in his composition. Once he teased to the end, I commented after his composition: "Stop staring at his round eyes, the eyebrows of quotation marks raised, and the exclamation point began to cry; My little master, how did you neglect our proper position in the text? "Third, comments should pay attention to literary talent and make public personality. Writing evaluation is actually a teacher's job. Beautiful and personalized comments, well-written comments and comments on the floor can give students a refreshing feeling, a literary influence and a pleasant aesthetic enjoyment with its unique charm, which will be unforgettable for a long time and for life. For example, writing an article about scenery, writing "to observe", "please observe carefully" and "observe carefully" over and over again, students turn a blind eye when they feel bored. It says: Beauty is everywhere. For our eyes, it is not the lack of beauty, but the lack of discovery. This subtle expression, although of the same meaning, can not only make students appreciate the teacher's literary talent, but also make students remember it easily. Try to improve the form and form of comments. For example, the use of ancient poems, famous sayings, exquisite fables, philosophical stories, wonderful metaphors, punctuation patterns and so on. To evaluate, try to be vivid, novel, fascinating and impressive. Personalized and eclectic comments are not just demonstrations for students. It is a tangible education and an intangible spur. 4. Psychologist Maslow believes that people's needs can be divided into low-level and high-level, among which respect needs and self-realization needs are the highest needs of people. For the problems existing in students' exercises, teachers should stand on the angle of understanding and respecting students, change the image of the preacher in the past, and communicate with students in an equal and patient spirit with a tone of consultation and inquiry. Let students feel the teacher's concern for him in an atmosphere full of humanity, let them have a natural understanding of their own values, stimulate their interest in writing, arouse their thinking about problems and make progress. For example, can this word be changed? This sentence is too long. Can you separate it with punctuation marks? Are you right? Look carefully again and see if you can find anything, can you ... once, a teacher found that a student in the class copied someone else's article, but he didn't find it immediately and scolded him loudly. He just wrote in the comments: Teacher, thank you for recommending this article, and the source should be indicated in future recommendations, but when can I read your excellent works? Such gentle and drizzly words full of humanistic care not only protect students' strong self-esteem, but also enable students to easily understand the implication of the teacher and accept and correct it calmly, which is beyond the reach of rude criticism. In short, the teacher's evaluation of the composition written by the students should not be a simple sermon, but an eloquent conversation. Because a few words of praise from the teacher will communicate the hearts of two people and bring great encouragement and joy to the students.
5. What comments are there to correct the landscape composition? My hometown is in Henan, where the trees are shaded, the air is fresh and the scenery is different in four seasons.
In spring, the tree grows new leaves, which gives birth to new life. The melting river lifted the river and began to flow happily again. The hibernating frog began to play again, singing the cheerful and rhythmic song "Quack ………" … This is the spring when everything recovers.
Summer is a hot season, so my brother and I took swimming rings (actually old tires) to swim on the river bank. The water in the river bank is very clear, and we can see the sand and stones at the bottom. We played until sunset. When I get home, I eat ice cream while watching TV. When the fan is turned on, it keeps pace with the air conditioner.
This is a happy summer.
Autumn is a harvest season, and hardworking people start to work. As for me, I just wanted to find something to do when I heard my grandmother shouting, "Longlong, come on, let's go to the fields to collect vegetables!" " "I happily picked up the basket and grandma came to the vegetable garden. I saw colorful vegetable gardens, sharp peppers, pumpkins in Huang Cancan, beans as long as pigtails ... I happily took the basket and began to collect vegetables.
This is the harvest season.
In winter, it snowed, and the thick snow covered the crops with a white quilt. There was a pile of snow on the ground, and the children began to have snowball fights and make snowmen, having a good time.
This is a snowy winter.
This is my hometown.
6. The beauty of the essence of writing the fourth grade composition evaluation.
Nature is beautiful, and the world is beautiful.
Maybe you will hate rainy and humid weather. But looking at them with your heart is different.
It's raining outside the window and the room is quiet. At this time, you just need to calm down. Sitting on a cane chair, with spiritual food on your legs, drinking steaming scented tea, the fragrance of scented tea and the freshness of the air outside the window blend into one, and slowly and slowly sneak into your heart. Soft violin music holds your hand and takes you into a beautiful dream. When you wake up, you can put on your coat, put on your umbrella and go for a walk outside. You see, the low houses in the small village are smoking, with lights on and hazy in the drizzle. Smoke, lights and drizzle, trees and grass. Did everything in nature make you friends with them? I think this is what Mr. Zhu Ziqing felt when he wrote Spring Rain!
Of course, it can't rain every day. The sky is clear in Wan Li.
Clear sky is the pride of summer, and the sky in all seasons belongs to it. But you must be worried about the scorching sun in summer. However, as long as you make friends with them.
There are no impurities in the blue sky in summer, only lovely white clouds are dotted. Cicada sings the beauty of summer in the shade.
You can sit quietly by the stream, the tall and lush trees stretch out their arms to shield you from the sun, and the green grass weaves a fluffy and soft blanket for you, as early as spring. Lying on the blanket, you look up at the blue sky, and the stream plays Adeline by the water rhythmically for you. When you are completely intoxicated in the beautiful world, a breeze caresses your face, raises your long hair and lets it go. At this moment, does the song of freedom ring in my ear > Do you feel that you are a member of this blue sky, dancing with the cloud babies in a cheerful and beautiful group dance? The sun has set. Let's get on our bikes and go home. In the distance, mother sunset is waving to you with a sweet smile in the colorful, beautiful and elegant sunset!
Appreciate the world with your heart. God created them with his heart, how can he be worthy of his old man's kindness?
7. Composition evaluation 1, grade four. Spring is rich and beautiful: red flowers, green grass, green hills and blue sky ... 2. It captures the characteristics of ""and is very accurate; "",give a person the feeling ".
When describing the scenery, I wrote my own experience and expressed my inner feelings. For example, the surprise of finding the first grass sprouting, the excitement of seeing swallows nesting under their own eaves, the admiration of smelling the fragrance of peach blossoms, and the joy of hearing the teacher announce a spring outing are all inner feelings.
While describing the scenery, properly expressing inner feelings and even associations will make the practice more vivid and real, and will also touch others. 4. Write what you see, hear, smell and feel about the beauty of spring into your exercise, so that your exercise is as vivid and beautiful as spring! Flying kites is children's favorite activity, and the fun is self-evident. Through detailed description, the colorful flying scenes of kites in the sky are displayed.
6. Looking at your homework, let us see a lovely and innocent childlike innocence. 7. Grasping the different characteristics of grass, trees and flowers in spring, according to the order of "",it depicts the vibrant scene of spring, reflecting a person's heartfelt joy.
8, vividly wrote a happy scene, vivid language, specific description, using image metaphor to write a sense of beauty. 9、" "; Coupled with the breeze and willow flowers, the spring in the pen is picturesque and beautiful! 10. The descriptions of ""and ""are very distinctive, quite childlike and refreshing. The quotation of this ancient poem is also very appropriate, which enhances the expression effect of the article.
1 1, spring is really beautiful. Grasp the writing method of ""and write the characteristics of "". Although we have all seen these scenery, we have a brand-new feeling through your careful observation. 12, observe carefully, and write clearly the characteristics of ""according to the method of summarizing first and then dividing.
Accurate language and concrete images make us feel immersive. 13, this passage has a general description, a specific description, a dynamic and static, and writes the loveliness of "".
Take care of the exercises before and after, observe them carefully and write down your favorite feelings. 14, because of rich associations, the pen is bright. Look, compare ""with ""and ""with "". How vividly these figurative metaphors write "".
15, the scenery description captures the characteristics of the scenery, describes the blending of the scenery, from far to near, from surface to point, and handles it in an orderly way. The articles written are more coherent, the scenery has different shapes and colors, and the modeling characteristics are grasped.
8. Evaluation of primary school students' writing [Evaluation of primary school students' writing] 1, and the effort will eventually pay off; 2. Persistence is victory; 3, you are a smart boy, as long as you refuel, you can succeed; That metaphor is very subtle, even better than the idea of a clever fox; A layer of dry skin, peeled off, no blood and no meat. Why don't others feel bad when they see it? 6 young people who don't work hard are sad; 7. The topic is marked with ellipsis, vivid and fresh, like a green leaf. Evaluation of primary school students' writing.
Your article is like a withered flower, with no fragrance at all. Think about how to make flowers smell sweet again; 9. The content is specific, but unfortunately there are too few natural paragraphs. Are you afraid of spending money and reluctant to divide more paragraphs? 10, there is a sentence in the composition that I don't understand, just like you told me to breathe with my ears, which makes me feel puzzled.
1 1, some things seem to be made up by you, which is not true, so when I read them, I couldn't help but put a question mark in my heart. 12, your exercise is no longer like boiled water, but now it has a little sweetness. Keep working hard and I will cheer for you! 13, the sentence is not smooth, like my cousin's face is covered with small pimples, reading makes me uncomfortable.
14, the focus is not very prominent, just like a water fight, the water splashed everywhere, but the target of the attack could not be found. 15, when the dragon and phoenix dance, the handwriting flies. Maybe you want to be a cursive calligrapher? 16, there are too many typos, like sesame seeds on sesame cakes. Can we try to photograph the sesame seeds on the sesame cake? 17, the handwriting is very crowded, aren't you afraid of burning? 18, the phenomenon of losing words is serious. I wonder if you often break your umbrella in rainy days? 19, the content is as dry as dead leaves in autumn, how can people be willing to watch it? Read more extracurricular books to ensure that the dead leaves turn green again next spring.
20. There are so many typos as a hornet's nest ... I'm a fourth-grade student. How to use pinyin instead of words that can't be written? Is your dictionary sleeping? 2 1, the content of this article is vivid, and it feels like just eating a piece of fresh milk cake, with endless aftertaste. Pupils wrote "Pupils Write Essays to Comment on Scenery". 22. Actions are rarely written, like branches in autumn, with no leaves.
23. Your sentence is a dead goldfish in a jar, not alive at all. Punctuation is well-behaved, like a smooth floor tile.
25. The handwriting is scrawled like grass on the ground, wobbly and unable to stand straight. Although the article is short, it is very vivid.
Delicate description, strong flavor of life, accurate wording and sentences. At the end of the article, it is revealed that the central sentence is really a clear stroke, and the summary is short and powerful.
The music is beautiful, so is the language of this article. Poetic language and fantastic imagination, how beautiful! The reading of the article is closely related to feelings. Examples describe actions, which touch people's hearts at the beginning and have real feelings.
The structure of the article is concise and reasonable, and the author's understanding of the original text is also very profound and thorough. The full-text language is forceful, hit the floor, exciting and exciting.
Although the language of this article is not gorgeous, it is extremely accurate and vivid, with rich and true emotions, and it is interesting to read. A large number of spoken English in life is used to make the article more natural and close to the people.
The ending is clear and meaningful. This composition has novel materials, wonderful ideas and lively language.
There is a fresh breath of life and children's interest between the lines. Blessing online articles describe things in the order of development, with fluent language and clear levels, which makes them feel very happy from beginning to end.
The article is full of respect and gratitude from beginning to end, affectionate and touching, which is the shocking force of this article. The tone of the whole article is relaxed and humorous, full of fun, which makes people fondle it.
The author is ingenious in conception, good at choosing points to expand, and his writing is ups and downs, which is intriguing. The language is lively and interesting.
Although the story is ordinary, it is sincere, rich and touching. The end of the article is unconventional, giving people the feeling of wanting to rest.
The examples are vivid and concrete, and the words and deeds of the characters conform to their respective identity characteristics. It can be seen that you are a conscientious person in life.
The article comes from life, so the language is not so beautiful, but it is really interesting and well written. The full text is fluent in language and free and easy in writing, which can be called a relatively successful work.
Composition evaluation: What is failure? Nothing, just a step closer to success; What is success? That is, after all the roads leading to failure, there is only one road left, and that is the road to success. .