The feeling of writing a poem for the first time

I still remember when I was at school, I liked Xi Murong's A Flowering Tree for a while.

How to let you meet me

In my most beautiful moment

for this reason

I prayed in front of the Buddha for 500 years.

Begging him to let us have a dusty relationship.

Then the Buddha turned me into a tree.

Follow the path you may take.

In the blooming flowers, I wait in the sun.

Every flower carries my previous hopes.

A poem made me read and read again, which made me feel the charm of poetry for the first time. Later, after reading the poems of Ai Qing, Shu Ting and Gu Cheng, I was moved by Yu Guangzhong's homesickness. Mr. Wang's spring reminds me many times.

Occasionally watch Cangyang Jiacuo's Living in Potala Palace.

Living in Potala Palace,

I am the biggest king in the snowy area.

Strolling through the streets of Lhasa,

I am the most beautiful lover in the world.

Mysterious life experience and unprecedented poetry make me full of yearning for the snowy area, which has appeared in my dreams countless times. I am full of envy for those who can write poems.

Some time ago, I saw teacher Shan's Cherry Blossom, which touched my heart at that moment. The cherry blossoms in the poem are so beautiful and exquisite that the scenes blend with each other. I also want to try to write one. Recently, there are too many things, which are delayed day by day. Another day passed, and Teacher Shan asked me again, so I had to bite the bullet and try to write. What should I write? I should be familiar with the morning, so I started writing in the morning and wrote my first poem.

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Summer morning

Top of branch

The touch of green came into view.

The bird's voice is euphemistic and crisp.

Imagine the beauty of summer.

Dewdrops hung on the grass,

Clear and transparent

If you left people with sad tears last night,

It hasn't been erased yet

morning glow

Paint the sky bright red.

The eastern sky

A red sun is breaking out.

Summer morning

Everything is full of vitality.

When leaving

But I heard frogs at the water's edge

Send it to the teacher, the first part is ok, two or three are thinner, and it seems nothing. The teacher told me that in the first half of the poem, you should write down the scenery you see, and then use rhetorical devices such as metaphor and personification to make your poem more agile. Everyone is looking for a more appropriate metaphor, the second half is lyrical, and the last ending is the finishing touch, or lyrical or reasonable. He sent me a few more poems of his own. He seemed to understand a little and began to revise my poems.

? ? Second revision

Summer morning

Top of branch

The touch of green came into view.

The bird's voice is euphemistic and crisp.

Imagine the beauty of summer.

Dewdrops hung on the grass,

Clear and transparent

If you left people with sad tears last night,

It hasn't been erased yet

The morning sun

Through the gap between the willow tips

on the ground

Leave a colorful shadow.

? ? This time it's a little better. I made a suggestion to change the last two parts, put the landscape writers together, and finally express my feelings.

Third revision

Top of branch

The touch of green came into view.

The bird's voice is euphemistic and crisp.

Imagine the beauty of summer.

The morning sun

Through the gap between the willow tips

on the ground

Leave a colorful shadow.

Dewdrops hung on the grass,

Clear and transparent

If you left people with sad tears last night,

It hasn't been erased yet

? ? From being at a loss to writing the first poem, I am very grateful to Mr. Flash for his generous advice. Whether writing poems or articles, there must be a lot of accumulation. Read famous books and classic articles, and then put your own experiences and feelings into them to show your true feelings. Only in this way can you impress people and gradually form your own style of writing.

Read, feel, grow, look at yourself in the mirror, and slowly live into your dreams, serene as a chrysanthemum, not happy for things, not sad for yourself, simple and plain!