This poem can also be used as your mood diary.
Writing more will improve your level.
Try other genres.
Don't always express your mind directly, it's ok in the early stage of writing poetry, and it's not necessary to
write poetry with a certain purpose. What you want to express is not necessarily clear, but it should run through the whole text. Deliberately cultivate yourself
Read more, and learn from those who write modern poems well. By the way, I recommend a few: Haizi, Liushahe, Xia Qing and Yu Guangzhong.
There are also poems that don't have too many words. If you want to express your content and artistic conception clearly, there is no need to gild the lily for a parallelism.
Finally, I believe you can do well. ..