Appearance description
When writing a composition, we often describe the appearance of the characters in order to express the needs of
Appearance description
When writing a composition, we often describe the appearance of the characters in order to express the needs of the article center. Appearance description refers to the description of a person's appearance, figure, clothes and expression. Good appearance description can show the character's style and personality characteristics, and make the character image vividly displayed in front of us.
So, how to describe the appearance of the characters?
First of all, we should grasp the characteristics of characters.
When reading children's compositions, we often find that some compositions describe the appearance of characters, or they are "one thousand people" and have no personality; Or a long description, the appearance has nothing to do with the content of the article. The main reason for this problem is that some children don't know how to write about appearance, so why describe appearance?
We say that we should grasp the characteristics of the characters when describing the appearance. In other words, it is necessary to write the differences between this person and that person, observe, analyze and compare them frequently, and grasp the characteristics of the characters, so as to truly reflect the characteristics of the characters.
Please look at the following fragment:
Lovely "Little Ice Ocean"
There is a little boy named Zhou next door to grandma's house. Everyone calls him "Xiao Yang Bing". He is five years old. His face is like a red apple, with big eyes, a high nose and slightly upturned lips. He looks cute. I like him very much. He is clever, but sometimes he is naughty and does things that make you angry and funny.
Once, when I was doing my homework, Xiao Yangbing sat next to me and stared at me unblinkingly. After a while, I went to the big house to get something. When I came back, I saw Xiao Yangbing draw a circle in my exercise book. I rushed over, grabbed Xiao Yangbing and shouted, "Who told you to scribble on my notebook? This is my homework! " After that, I also made a small ice ocean. Xiao Yangbing lowered her head, "whoops ..." She began to cry. He said aggrieved, "Sister Wang Li, I didn't mean to. I want to see if this pen of yours is the magic pen in the story "The Magic Pen is a Good Horse" that my father told me. If it is a magic pen, the circle I draw will become an apple, a pear, a peach ... and I will give you a lot of fruit. " I listened, angry and funny. Hurriedly grabbed Xiao Yangbing's hand, wiped her tears and said, "Let's go, Sister Wang Li will take you to buy lollipops!" "
I think Xiao Yang Bing is really a lovely child, don't you?
After reading this composition, the little cute image will be vividly displayed before our eyes. His nose is "high", his lips are "a little upturned" and his eyes stare at "I" without blinking. "It looks a little irritating and funny." This is the image of Xiao Yang Bing, how naive, lovely and lively he is. It is because of his naivety and cuteness that the story of Xiao Yang Bing doodling on "my" notebook came into being. He drew apples, pears and peaches for me to eat. Do you find it ridiculous? After reading this, it is not surprising that we look at the description of the characters at the beginning.
From this example, we should learn to "draw eyes" when describing the appearance of characters, and grasp the unique characteristics of characters to write. If you write "round face" and "big eyes" without analysis and comparison, it is a failure and redundant description. When writing a composition, you should delete the redundant content.
Second, serve the content of the article.
In a composition, whether to write about the characters, whether to write in one place or scattered in a story, should be determined according to the center to serve the content of the article. Only in this way can the characters have a "three-dimensional sense", be moved and be educated.
Please look at the following fragment:
In the first class, when the class teacher Pan came into the classroom, she was followed by a little girl carrying a schoolbag. I saw her wearing clothes that fit her, with pigtails and heavy eyebrows, and she looked nothing unusual. It's just that she keeps digging her lower lip with her fingers. Red face, don't talk. Teacher Pan pointed to her and said, "This is the classmate who just transferred. She has just arrived. I hope everyone can help each other in all aspects. " After that, she pointed to the seat next to me and asked the little girl to sit down. I froze. What? A strange female classmate sat next to me, which one, which one ... I was really unhappy.
After class, the students went out for activities. Only Jian Jiang sat uneasily in her seat, turning over a book. Several enthusiastic female classmates invited her to play. Jian Jiang blushed and naturally refused. A few days later, she became familiar with us. Whenever we have a break, she plays games with us on the playground, and always has a happy smile on her face.
After reading this composition, we will feel that new students are full of anxiety because they are unfamiliar with the new environment. The description of the appearance also began. When I first came here, I "wore clothes that fit me, wore pigtails and had heavy eyebrows", but I just "always dug my lips with my fingers" and "blushed and didn't speak". There is not much pen and ink, but I wrote a little girl who just arrived in the class. As time went on, she became familiar with her classmates. In the game, there is always a "happy smile" on the face. From the unfamiliar to the familiar, there will always be some changes in the expressions of the characters. The author observed it and wrote it. How wonderful!
From this example, we will know that the description of the appearance of the characters does not have to be concentrated in one place. According to the needs of the development of the story, the changes of the characters' demeanor can be outlined at the "key", which can better reflect the center of the article.
We should also pay attention to the following three points in the description of characters' appearance:
1. Describe the appearance of the characters in concise language.
Appearance description should grasp the main characteristics of the characters and outline the main characteristics of the characters in a few words. Talking endlessly is gilding the lily and deviating from the content of the article. Therefore, the language should be concise and accurate, and the unique characteristics of the characters should be described in concise language, leaving a deep impression on people.
2. Observe carefully when describing the appearance of characters.
If you want to write a good character's appearance, you have to observe it carefully and observe it in a comparative way to see what is the difference between that character and this one, and what is the difference between this character and that one. Through careful observation and careful comparison, you can describe this character.
3. Describe the appearance of the characters in order.
When describing a character's appearance, we can summarize the main features first, and then make a specific description. You can write from the top half of the face to the bottom half, and you can also write from the main features to the secondary features. You should arrange the materials reasonably in a certain order, so as to leave a clear and unforgettable impression.
My good friend-Sun.
My good friend Sun is a lively and lovely girl. She is tall and has short hair. Fat face is red, two curved black eyebrows, inlaid with a pair of watery big eyes, shining with innocent and pure light. She smiled and showed her white teeth. She is cheerful and likes to laugh, and she also likes to make others laugh. If you spend your spare time with her, she will make you happy. She listened carefully in class and actively raised her hand to speak. But sometimes it is inevitable to make some "small mistakes". If you are criticized, if you secretly look back at her, you will find that her red face is redder; If she finds you, too, she will secretly stick out her tongue at you.
[Comment] When writing a character's appearance, we should not only pay attention to writing a good appearance, but also pay attention to writing habits and actions. The description of this character's appearance is like this. The author caught Sun's habit of liking to laugh as well as others' and highlighted Sun's appearance. Has been criticized. She "will stick out her tongue at you secretly". An innocent and lively little girl appears in your mind.
New teacher
Today is the first class. The door of the classroom opened and a male teacher came in. I quickly put on my glasses and looked at him carefully from top to bottom. He is the new history teacher.
He, in his forties, is about 1.7 meters tall. Wearing a navy tunic suit, he looks smart and healthy.
He has a Chinese face and a bronze face. The broad forehead does not have too many wrinkles, and the hair mixed with some silver silk is not messy, rigorous and calm.
Teacher Shi began to give a lecture. His brow wrinkled tightly from time to time, forming a question mark between the two; Sometimes I stretch happily, like an exclamation point. Although his eyes are small, they are full of emotion and brilliance. Whenever he talks about important points, he keeps his body straight, raises his eyebrows high and stares at everyone. He increased his tone, slowed down, and waved hard in the air for half a circle with his chalk hand. Then, he turned and wrote down the key points on the blackboard. ...
[Comment] When writing a character's appearance, we should pay attention to the impression of meeting people for the first time. When you meet a person for the first time, you often pay special attention to it. After careful observation, you can easily grasp the characteristics of this person. The first impression of the author's description of the new teacher, Mr. Shi, is: age, figure, clothes, face shape, especially the description of Mr. Shi's demeanor and movements during the lecture, which is vivid and impressive.
My classmate-Fan Hongshuang
Fan Hongshuang is the funniest female classmate in our class. Therefore, the students call her "Little Monkey", and whenever something funny happens in the class, she is always indispensable. She has shiny black hair, a long braid and a short braid, and a beautiful bow. A pair of watery eyes are shining with magic light. When you look around her eyes, you can know what she must be thinking again. Her cheeks are as red as apples, and her broad forehead looks smart. There is a clever little mouth under the nose, which often purses up, and one mouth reveals yellowish teeth. Whenever there is a problem, she frowns, holds her cheek in her left hand, holds a pen in her mouth in her right hand, and keeps blinking. Suddenly, her eyes lit up, ah! I figured it out. When she meets happy things, she always smiles, her eyes narrow into a crack, her head keeps shaking, and her braids are shaking, as if sharing her happiness!
[Comment] When writing the appearance of a character, it is very important to grasp the appearance characteristics of the character. This composition captures the characteristics of "eyes are round", "forehead is wide", "mouth is always pouting", "yellow teeth are exposed", "I frown when I encounter problems, my left hand holds my chin, my right hand holds a pen and bites my mouth and blinks", and I draw a picture for my classmate Fan Hongshuang. This picture is for people to see.
Yang Li-my good friend
No one in our class knows that Yang Li and I are good friends.
Yang Li, a tall man with slender eyes and a sharp chin, walked all day. Anyone who sees him will forget what troubles he has.
Yang Li's personality is humorous, she likes to talk and laugh, and often likes to do something funny to make people laugh. When the teacher asked him to do the problem on the blackboard, he stood up, shrugged his shoulders, stretched out his tongue and took a Chaplin-style eight-character step, which made everyone laugh, even the teacher couldn't help laughing. He also likes to play jokes on his classmates. On one occasion, Guo Yufeng asked him who wrote the ancient poem "Two Huangpengming Liu Cui". Yang Li deliberately played a trick on him, saying it was Zhuge Liang. Guo Yufeng didn't believe it. Yang Li pretended to be serious and said, "The last sentence of this poem is' Boating in Dongwu Wan Li'. You see, Zhuge Liang berthed all the ships in front of Dongwu. Why didn't he write? " Guo Yufeng believed it. In class, the teacher happened to ask the author of Guo Yufeng's poem. He stood up and answered loudly: "Zhuge Liang!" The whole class burst into laughter, and Yang Li laughed her head off, knowing that she had been cheated.
[Comment] After reading this essay, a real and vivid character-Yang Li will appear in front of us immediately. He is smart, optimistic, naughty and likable. It is precisely because the author firmly grasps the characteristics of the characters, is lively and humorous, loves to talk and laugh, and makes the characters lifelike.
cleaner
In the morning, I went shopping. Wow-wow-wow voice came, I looked at the voice and saw a vague figure. Tall and thin, with a broom, walk slowly forward. It's him, an old cleaner I see every day. He is still so early, still the same, sweeping the road step by step.
I deliberately walked past him with kind eyes and an old, wrinkled and weather-beaten face. At this time, he is concentrating on sweeping snow, so thoughtful and so serious. He first swept the snow into piles, then picked it up in piles, and then staggered into the garbage dump.
Suddenly, he noticed that the sewer not far away was blocked. He walked quickly over and dug up the snow bit by bit with his dry hands like gray bark until it became clear, and then a comfortable smile appeared on his face. However, his hands were red with cold. He doesn't care, as if he is used to it. Then he swept forward, and the tall figure quickly disappeared, leaving a clean and spacious road behind him.
[opinion] the little author observes carefully and looks from a distance: tall and thin; Close look: kind, old, wrinkled and weather-beaten; Digging sewers: dry hands like gray bark. This kind of image description shows readers the image of a simple ordinary worker. As can be seen from the article, the little author is usually good at observation and diligent in thinking.
My grandfather
My grandfather is 74 years old, short and chubby, with a bronzed face and eyebrows like two exclamation points without dots. A pair of small eyes are always smiling. When talking, they always close their left eyes and only open their right eyes. Grandpa lost all his teeth and installed false teeth, but he took them off as soon as he ate and put them in a mouthwash cup. I asked my grandfather, "You paid for false teeth, why don't you wear them when you eat?" Grandpa said, "Eating with dentures is tasteless. Fake is better than real, or teeth are better! " "Grandpa doesn't leave hair. He always likes to go to the barber shop to shave his hair and beard. His scalp and mouth are blue. Grandpa said, "It's better to scrape, scrape and stop itching, without lice and sores." "On weekdays, Grandpa always wears a double-breasted coat and leggings. Although grandpa is so old, he always likes to wear a pair of liberation shoes. Grandpa said, "This heel is very comfortable to wear. "The toe of the shoe is broken, and grandpa is reluctant to throw it. Dig out the steel file, scissors, glue and waste bicycle tires from the box, then file the toe flat, then cut off a piece of rubber, file it flat, apply glue, air it for a while, and then stick the rubber on the toe. Grandpa wears these liberation shoes and goes up and down the fifth floor two or three times a day! I advised grandpa: "You are so old, don't go upstairs and downstairs by yourself, wait for me to help you go upstairs and downstairs!" " Grandpa said, "I have worked all my life. I feel uncomfortable and bored at home. I'd better walk around! " "
[Comment] This character description fragment, in turn, wrote grandpa's age, figure, embarrassment, eyebrows, eyes, teeth, hair, and grandpa's shoes. This description is unpretentious and authentic. Truthfully describes what the author usually observes. We read and read as if we saw an old man standing in front of us.
I observed Lai Qun's classmates.
At noon, the classroom door suddenly opened. Who came in? Ah, it was Lai Qun. I looked her up and down: she pushed the door in with her right hand and closed the door gently with her left hand. She is tall, with two braids and a beautiful bow on her head. Big eyes, small mouth, red face with a smile. She wore a red scarf around her neck, a yellow schoolbag on her shoulders, a light blue coat, plaid trousers, red socks and green plaid shoes on her feet. She smiled and went to her seat, put her schoolbag in the drawer under the desk, took out her book and read it aloud.
[Comment] This article begins with a rhetorical question, and then points out the object of description. The sentence "I looked her up and down" shows that the author observed very carefully and seriously. Then describe Lai Qun's looks, movements and demeanor in turn. Write the appearance from head to foot; Write actions, including pushing and closing doors, taking out books and reading books; Write the expression and the way she "smiles". After reading the full text, Lai Qun seems to be standing in front of us.
Cousin of the same age (or cousin)
My cousin is in his twenties, with a small bald head and dark brown hair hanging over his head like a hat. My cousin's forehead is very wide, and my father joked that he is smart because of his wide forehead and large brain capacity. I think my cousin's eyes are very interesting. His eyes, like an extra-large purple grape, are round, shiny and have long eyelashes, like makeup stickers. When people laugh, their eyes will narrow into a crack, but when they laugh, their eyes are still so big. My cousin is pale, black and yellow. He is not tall. Once I asked him why he was short. He speaks Mandarin full of Hubei flavor and says in a high voice, "I don't like being tall." Said, and lit a cigarette, took two breaths, spit out a smoke turn, a straight suit pants, dig out a black turtle neck. Then, sit on the sofa and cross your legs, and your legs are still jumping!
[Opinion] This is a description of a character's appearance. The age and head (forehead, eyes and face) are written in turn, and the characteristics are very prominent: "hair is buckled on the head like a hat", "forehead is particularly wide" and eyes are "like an extra-large purple grape". Then I wrote my cousin's shrill voice, Hubei dialect, clothes, habitual movements and so on. , left a very vivid impression on people.
My uncle
My uncle is a tall man. About one meter eight, burly, broad shoulders. Standing in front of you, it is simply an iron tower! Whenever I see my uncle, I always jump up and compare with him, but no matter how I jump, I can't compare with my uncle. Call someone else's uncle "Lao Zhang" I am surprised that my uncle's name is clearly Wang! Later, I learned that my uncle's nickname was "Zhang Fei". I have never seen what Zhang Fei looks like, but my uncle's face is really dark, and his one-inch long hair is upright, which really makes him angry. The most magnificent is my uncle's sideburns, like steel needles. Once, I also learned to call my uncle "Lao Zhang" like an adult. My uncle opened his eyes wide, shouted "Ah" and shook the window. He held out his big hand like a rake, hugged me and said, "OK, you can also call me Lao Zhang to let you know how powerful Lao Zhang is!" " He kept stabbing me in the face with his beard, which made me ache and itch. If my aunt hadn't come, maybe my face would have been bleeding by my uncle! Actually, my uncle is joking with me. He likes me so much that I often step on his nose and face!
[opinion] what are the characteristics of uncle's appearance? The author described it very concretely and vividly: tall and burly figure, dark face, inch head, upright hair and temples like steel needles. The uncle described by the author looks really like the brave Zhang Fei in The Romance of the Three Kingdoms!
One of my classmates.
One of my classmates is ordinary-looking, but very lovable. She has short, dark and thick hair, neatly trimmed, a big mouth and well-defined features. Her nose is very long, which may affect her appearance a little. But I think the most striking thing is her big black eyes under two heavy eyebrows. Her eyes are so smart, lively and devoted, which often reflects her mood and attitude towards others. When she is happy, these big eyes are bright and seem to glow. Once I can't remember why I wronged her. Without saying a word, she looked at me with wide eyes, as if to say, "You are wrong, you know?" I met her a few days later. I dare not admit my mistake. I just looked into her eyes. It seems to say to me, "I know everything." Emit an unusually pleasant light.
[Opinion] The appearance of this role is very vivid. The author uses the word "love" to summarize the main idea of the whole paragraph. Then the characteristics of her hair, mouth, nose and eyes are described in turn. Uneven writing force. The author wrote her talking eyes in detail with heavy pen and thick ink, which left a very deep impression on people.
Grandpa's appearance
On the mountain road, there is a Xiao Lv car squeaking and getting closer and closer. The driver is a strong old man. His head was wrapped in a lamb belly towel, his dark face was covered with wrinkles, and his eyebrows and beard were all white. But the eyes are amazing. He smoked "click click" with a pipe in his mouth, and sparks splashed in the ashtray. He is wearing a pair of China trousers and a homespun jacket. Wearing a pair of sturdy cloth shoes on his feet, he walked in high spirits. This is my grandfather.
[Comment] This essay first summarizes Grandpa's appearance with "strong body", and then describes his face, beard, eyes, mouth and body in turn. Seeing this description, it seems that Grandpa really came to see us.