Willow in my hometown is like an elf. Those who have seen it will undoubtedly increase their confidence; It will undoubtedly make people feel relaxed and happy; This will undoubtedly heal the wounds in my memory ... and in my hometown: Huguan, there are many elves.
In spring, a hundred flowers blossom, birds contend, snow and ice merge into streams, and the willow, the "spirit": (delete the colon), also begins to wake up. He (it) stretched for a long time, shaking green braids, each with more than a dozen hair clips, so that the elf is more beautiful!
In summer, the hot sun is in the sky, and the sun is like a big fireball, roasting the earth. At this time, the lovely elf will appear again. He (it) opens his burly body to let people enjoy the cool in her (it) arms, so that people are no longer tired.
In autumn, geese fly south, melons and fruits are fragrant, and the elves are going to attend the dinner party. He took out a golden evening dress from the bedside table and put it on him. Wow, it's beautiful! The charming elf went to the dinner party. Look! He (it) twisted his attractive figure and danced with cheerful notes, attracting the attention of the elves under the stage.
In winter, snowflakes are flying, the wind is biting, and the wind is biting. (Delete one, semantic repetition) The elf put on his thick chiffon coat instead of grace and temperature. With the children's happy laughter, the new year came and the elf closed his eyes, but next spring, the elf will meet us again.
I love the beautiful elves in my hometown, the selfless elves, and the pure hearts of the people in my hometown like willows!
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This paper focuses on the selection of willow materials from the different beauty of the four seasons, and describes its beautiful appearance, beautiful colors and beautiful functions. Self-examination reveals love for willow, but it is also love for hometown. The ending theme deepens. But the universal collar in the first paragraph is not good.
The willow tree in front of my door,
There is a willow tree,
It seems that I am wearing a green coat.
On the green branch,
You don't have your own flowers,
But you are still beautiful, beautiful.
Like a green river flowing in the air.
In the silence,
This willow tree stands upright,
In the golden sunset,
Shining with crystal dew.
Willow trees are flowing around.
Warm sunshine,
It's on the green branch.
And covered with a faint golden luster.
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A modern poem. As a junior three student, it is a challenge to my existing knowledge to dare to write a poem. The first seven lines of the poem are the best, and the use of the second person name, in addition to directly expressing love and praise for the willow, seems to feel that the willow represents an intention in the poem. After changing the name, this feeling is gone.
The rhyme of Chinese rose in Liulin is an ordinary girl, one of countless struggling figures; Is an ordinary middle school student in the vast sea of people; He is also a good boy in the hearts of teachers, parents and elders. Because of her excellent grades, she won a lot of encouragement and appreciation. Rhyme is a little carried away. After coming home from school for more than a month, she stopped doing her homework and reviewing her lessons first, but most of her friends were touched by the remote control and mouse. Her parents reminded her that it was time to study, but Yun didn't listen at all and still stared at the computer screen. Since then, the quality of Yunyun's homework has become worse and worse, and I am upset when I see it. She put down the mouse and walked out resolutely, even though she had not finished her homework. As usual, she came to a forest outside the village, walked to a curved tree as usual and sat on the back of the tree as usual. This is her secret base and the place where she comes when she is in a bad mood. She likes it here very much. She likes the wind here, mixed with the special taste of willow leaves. She likes the trees here, because every tree here has good air and few weeds. She knew that the owner of this forest must be hardworking, although she had never seen anyone tidy it up. She also likes the quietness and freshness here, and prefers her precious riding-bending down to climb trees.
Yun is enjoying the happiness brought to her by the willow forest here. Time flies, and the sunset shines on this forest. It tells the cloud that it's time to go home. When the cloud walked out of the forest, he caught a glimpse of a Chinese rose. Although the flower is not big, there is only a small bone flower, but in this green area, this small pink is particularly bright. Lyme thought: Maybe the owner of the forest planted it on purpose, or accidentally left a seed here. Why didn't I see it just now? Time doesn't allow clouds here, stop for a minute. He must go home and face the boring homework. When Yun came home, he silently walked back to his room and began to struggle. Yunyun's monthly exam is over, and my mood is at its lowest point. She failed the exam. Yun's parents didn't blame her, but comforted him and let her return to her previous state. Juan didn't speak, and went to her secret base. She wanted to see the Chinese rose, but what she didn't expect was that pink was buried in that land. Rhyme thought: This should be me. Although I am excellent and attractive, I am also fragile. This flower's life should stop here. She didn't care, and there was still an inconspicuous bud on the remaining flower branch. As usual, she sat on her baby for a while, watching the wheat fluttering in the wind like green waves. Before leaving, she also took a special look at the rose that she thought had passed away, as if she sympathized with it. Yunyun's parents, teachers and elders constantly enlighten her and help her find her previous rhyme. Yun didn't want to go back to the past, but she tried, but it got worse and worse. A few days later, a rain changed the rhyme, washed away the dust in the rhyme heart and made the rhyme heart brighter. The smell of cloud's favorite rain makes her mind clearer. When the road was no longer muddy, a special force urged her to go to Liulin. The first thing that caught my eye was a healthy and beautiful rose. She walked over in confusion and found Xiaohua has now become a cheerful and lively "big girl". After the storm, the pink petals look so bright and gorgeous in the air. Yunyun didn't read it carefully, but ran home quickly, picked up a pen and did the homework of each subject seriously, and picked up the long-lost extracurricular books. At this moment, it's like, it's like rhyme is alive again She left the mouse and remote control. She began to work hard again, fight hard again, and be the truest and best self again. After the final exam, the butterfly-like rhyme in the willow forest runs happily in its colorful world. At this time, the rhyme is so beautiful, so cheerful, so lively, so moving, as strong as her rose.
She buried a piece of paper beside the Chinese rose, which read: Frustration and difficulties are your good helpers to success, while flattery and vanity are your greatest enemies to success. Trees have different shapes; She likes the environment here,
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This novel tells the story of a girl rhyme who is inspired to study hard through the opening of a Chinese rose flower after rain. Chinese rose flowers, although blown by wind and rain, bloom more brightly, and setbacks are not terrible, as long as you have the confidence to struggle. The shortcoming of this article is that the language is too plain and concise, which needs to be honed more.
Xiao Liu and Xiao Zao live in Xiaogang's yard.
In spring, willows sprout and turn green. But jujube trees are bare.
The little willow tree said to the little jujube tree, "hey, you are so ugly that people want to vomit." I don't know why my master planted you here If it were me, I might as well die. "
Jujube said, "We all have strengths. Right! "
Xiaoliu said, "Well, do you have any advantages?" ? Forget it, please don't bother me. "
In summer, small willows grow slender leaves. The adults are enjoying the cool below. The children are playing games below. Everyone praised Xiao Liu when they saw him.
After listening to her praise, Xiaoliu got carried away and showed off in front of Xiaozhao Tree.
Jujube said, "You are great."
Xiaoliu is even more proud. Show off everywhere. "
The harvest season has arrived-autumn. Not many people walk under the willow tree. But many people go to jujube trees. Teacher Liu said to people, "What's the matter, why don't you come to play?" At the same time, the leaves of the little willow are wilting. Jujube trees bear beautiful fruit-jujube.
Xiaoliu said jealously, "I knew I shouldn't laugh at you." I got what I deserved now. "Jujube said," nothing! As I said, everyone has his own strengths. You grow up early and thank you late. Let people enjoy the cool. I can make people eat fruit. "
Xiaoliu bowed her head. Said to the stove, "Are we still good friends?" The jujube tree said, "Yes!"
People said happily, "Yes, that's good. We can live in harmony. "
Isn't it? This is how people live in harmony.
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In this paper, the author sees the big from the small, and reveals the truth that human beings should live in harmony with the story between dates and willows, with profound thoughts. However, jujube trees will sprout in spring and will not be bare. Should the young writer carefully observe his life after he has settled down?
I love you, willow. Since I met you, dear, I have fallen in love with you deeply. I can't say why, but I have a feeling that it came from far away. I look at you with my eyes open, the breeze is blowing slowly, and the wicker beside the pond is swinging gracefully. Yes, I fell in love with you at first sight, and I can't get rid of it anymore.
My heart is filled with your green leaves. I want to weave you into a leaf ring, but I can't bear to part with it, because I want to give you more room for free development. So you showed your amorous feelings to the world.
I was in a bad mood that day, and I came to your side unconsciously along the path. You didn't ask me why when you saw that I was depressed. In this way, you opened your gentle hand to me with the breeze, like a lotus flower in bud. Let me snuggle up to you and make me feel warm and happy. At that time, I became a carefree tree, beside you. The soft moonlight shines on us.
At night, crickets chirp in the Woods. Tears that have flowed, broken hearts ... have already turned into light smoke in front of you and disappeared in the whole sky with the wind.
It's another spring, but I'm stuck in the sadness of the past, with a melancholy expression all day, poor family environment, poor academic performance and exams, and my life seems to be at a low point.
Standing on the balcony of the roof, I saw you standing by the pond, just spitting out buds, full of vitality and touching. The fish in the pond keep dancing because of your beautiful reflection. You are so optimistic and beautiful despite the stormy winter. Thank you for giving me back my confidence. No matter how difficult the road ahead is, I will stick to it because of your encouragement. Because you are the sun of my sunflower.
I brought my friend to see you today. My friends all praised you when they saw you. Because I told them that because of you, I could stand up again. On this day, I am really happy. My friend took our first group photo. After dinner, my friends and I came to see you talking and laughing all the way, but you disappeared like a fairy. At this time, I am looking for you like crazy, but I can't find it, I can't find it. Later, an old man passing by told me that you went to another place, which was much better than here. Although I am comforted to hear this answer, I know there is no me in that place, but you must believe that my heart will always be by your side. Just like you and me in the picture, we will be together forever.
I love you, willow. You and my heart will be together forever, until eternity.
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The biggest highlight of this article is the beautiful and concise language, such as "the wicker beside the pond is swinging gracefully" and "my mind is full of your green leaves", and the idea is also very clever and the content is very substantial.
There is a row of willows on the willow playground. Seen from a distance, it looks like a big piece of jasper. Close up, willow branches are like green belts, and willow leaves are like eyebrows. Some people enjoy the cool under the willows, some people are reading newspapers, and some children are playing happily.
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The language is plain and the center is not prominent.
Xiaoliu There are several small willows in the yard downstairs of my house. Spring has come and young trees have sprouted. The tall and straight willows really stood there like little soldiers. The bent branches of willow are like its braids, and its long green hair seems to tell us that spring is coming, spring is coming. ...
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The language is plain and indescribable.
I like willow trees. Willow is a selfless warrior with tenacious vitality. I like it.
Mother Liu's hair is flying in the wind. I help mother Liu comb her hair. Mother Liu smiled and stroked my head.
Pick a small willow leaf, blow it, and blow it to mother Liu. ...
In spring, willows grow new branches and green leaves. Green willows and brown wooden poles are dancing on the stage like a dancer shining with golden light.
In summer, the willow branches grow thick and the light green leaves turn dark green. It is a tool for us to enjoy the cool, it has no resentment and hatred for us, and it is selfless to us.
In autumn, willow leaves fall one by one. I don't know when the willow leaves are old. One by one was swept into the trash can, and the branches were yellow.
Winter is a cold season and I like willow best. It is tall and strong in the biting cold wind, its naked body, without a warm dress, like a soldier standing guard and not giving in, and the cold wind and rain do not bow to them, looking forward to serving us again.
I love willow, I love its selfless dedication and tenacious vitality.
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