The article never tires of making changes. A good article is not done in one go, but is revised repeatedly. After primary school students' compositions are written, teachers should guide students to revise them repeatedly. Only through repeated revisions can we write concrete, vivid and vivid articles and really improve our writing ability. Therefore, I attach great importance to students' own revision of articles in teaching, and cultivate students' habit and ability to revise articles. In order to effectively guide students to revise their compositions, I mainly train from the following four aspects:
1. Stimulate the interest in revision, generate strong motivation, and form a good habit of consciously revising.
interest is the best internal motivation. In composition teaching, I list and analyze the advantages of my own revision of the composition, and arouse students' strong desire to consciously revise the composition. I told the students: "Mr. Lu Xun once regarded' reading it at least twice after writing and trying to delete unnecessary words, sentences and paragraphs without regret' as an important writing experience." Introduce the allusions of Jia Dao, a poet in Tang Dynasty, to students. Through vivid examples, the students in our class have been aroused to modify their own compositions and formed the habit of consciously modifying their compositions.
second, put forward revision requirements, guide revision methods, and cultivate students' ability to revise their compositions
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1. Teach students the common symbols of revision, so that students can use appropriate symbols in revision.
2. Define the modification requirements and guide the modification methods. For the composition of senior primary school students, first of all, it is required that their writing be specific and substantial, with fluent and clear language, plain and simple. On this basis, it is required to write vividly, that is, to seek "similarity" first and then "good".
① The sentences should be fluent, the content should be specific, there should be no broken sentences, and the key objects should be described in detail. For the ill sentences and broken sentences in the article, students should be instructed to use a variety of senses to participate in the description of things that are not specific, repeatedly observe from multiple angles and levels, grasp the characteristics, * * * and change the details, so that the revised article sentences are smooth, without typos or wrong punctuation, and the key objects of description and narration are concrete and true.
② To revise the composition, students should be guided to consider the deepening of the theme, the choice of materials, the adjustment of structure, and the scrutiny of words.
First of all, the idea should be healthy, and the theme should be clear, in-depth and novel. The theme of the article is the soul of the article. Students should be instructed to carefully revise articles with unhealthy thoughts, unclear center, poor excavation, unclear expression and lack of new ideas.
secondly, the choice of materials should be reasonable. The viewpoint of the article and the selected materials must be unified. The viewpoint dominates the material, and the material expresses the viewpoint. If the article only has the viewpoint without the material, or has the material, but it can't properly reflect the viewpoint, it should be revised.
once again, adjust the structure properly. The structure of the article is the organizational form of the article, and the level, paragraph, transition, reference, beginning and end are all structural problems. If the hierarchical paragraphs are not clear, the transition care is not good, the beginning and end are not ideal, and the details are not appropriate, they should be carefully revised.
finally, we have to scrutinize the text repeatedly. Language is the expression of ideological content. In order to write well and change well, we must make the language express ideological content accurately and vividly, which must guide students to scrutinize their compositions repeatedly and carefully, and delete, change, adjust, change and add inaccurate and redundant words and phrases.
3. Combine reading with reform, and promote reform through reading. Reading aloud is the vocalization of written language. Reading the composition aloud is helpful for senior primary school students to find out the shortcomings of their compositions. Silent reading can be repeated in time, which is conducive to students' thinking while reading and can make students think about modifying the content. Therefore, when revising, I ask students to combine reading aloud with silent reading to find and master the best opportunity for revision. Generally, students are required to read aloud twice with emotion first, and make a mark in time during reading, indicating the place to be modified, and then modify it; Then read silently, thinking and changing while reading. After several revisions, read it aloud to other students, and ask other students to make revisions, and make new revisions according to others' revisions and their own ideas.
4. It is required to expose the modification process and understand its thinking change process. In order to cultivate students' ability to modify their own behavior, I ask students to write their compositions directly in the composition book without making a draft, and write a line blank. Generally, they should be carefully revised after writing, but students are also allowed to make changes as they write. Therefore, students are required to write clearly and neatly, so that they can be seen clearly, and they must not scribble and change. In this way, the compositions handed to me are not copied, from which I can see how the students thought originally and how they revised later, which is convenient for analyzing the changing process of students' thinking when writing. 2. Do you need to write a topic for the fourth-grade composition to continue the story?
I have lived in a beautiful coastal city-Xiamen since I was a child.
my family lives by the sea. People say that the sea is unpredictable, but in my mind, the sea is like a great man with great momentum. He has a broad mind and a kind side. Is Wu Shen fun? .
the sea is the most beautiful in the morning. The blue sea is endless and connected with the blue sky.
At sunrise, when Grandfather Sun just showed his kind face, he dyed the sea light red. It's very quiet all around, only the sea water gently washes the reef, just like an old man stroking his baby gently.
Gulangyu Island opposite is a living picture, not to mention how attractive it is to people who used to do morning exercises! At noon, the sun hung up the whole sky, and the dazzling light broke the peace of the sea. The sunny sea is sparkling, like a layer of gold.
little waves, little waves are chasing little waves, just like happy children chasing them carefree, not to mention how happy they are. Grandpa Hai took out beautiful shells and sent them to the beach to tease the lovely children.
Shanghai gulls on the sea also join in the fun. They are like white flowers? Touch the sea. Hovering over the sea, singing softly.
Occasionally, a seagull dives into the sea, just touching the sea and flying again, with a silvery fish in its mouth! In the evening, people went home, the birds returned to their nests, the sun went home and the stars came out. After a hard day's work, Grandfather Sun sank to the bottom of the sea and slept quietly.
The microwave on the sea surface is slow, and sometimes there are waves of cool sea breeze, which is so comfortable and cozy! Everything is asleep, and the sea is quiet again. Only the neon lights and advertising lights on the shore are set in the sea. The sea level at night. Ah! This is just the sea in my hometown.
I love you, sea! The first volume of the fourth grade Unit 2 Composition "Observation Diary * Rules" (What interesting things happened in the process of observation? The topic can be "Observation Diary * Rules". Pay attention to the format of the diary. )
theme: requirements of "I" observation: write down the course and findings of observation, and decide the topic by yourself; You can also write an observation diary and pay attention to the format of the diary. Tip: 1. What have you observed recently? How to observe it? What's new? What interesting things happened during the observation? Write down what you want to tell others most.
2. Communicate the written content with everyone, and * * * review and revise the exercise. 3. If you write an observation diary during continuous observation, you can choose a few to be carefully revised and processed to become an exercise.
It's sunny on Thursday, November 18th. Today, I finally, finally got the certificate of merit. I have indescribable happiness and indescribable excitement in my heart. Like winning the 8 million prize, that joy can break through the clouds and fly high into the sky.
Everything is beautiful, and everything is beautiful. I suddenly feel that the aunt on the street is particularly young, the eldest brother on the street is particularly handsome, and the sister of the clerk passing by the store is particularly beautiful. I also feel very happy! Today, in the teacher's words, is the harvest season.
in the afternoon, when the teacher presented the certificate, he thought that the certificate had nothing to do with me, and it was definitely none of my business. But then came the sweet voice of the teacher: Xiao Fuming won the third prize of "Listening and Written Test".
My mood suddenly brightened up. After receiving the award that I didn't even dare to think about, I felt as if I was gold and my whole body was shining. After school, I rushed out of the school gate, dragging the award written by the teacher with a bright red seal in my hand, and went straight to the house.
when I got home, I proudly showed off my certificate in front of my mother. Holding the certificate high, he said excitedly, "Mommy, I finally have a certificate!" " "Really? My son has made a fortune and won a certificate! " Mommy said to me.
at this time, my heart is sweeter than eating honey. Today, I am extremely happy, crazy and extremely proud.
Come on, be sure to come on. In order to win the first prize in the future, I will definitely work harder. Note: (I don't need mommy to rush me to write a diary today, because I have something to write) Mom said it was an observation diary, and the diary on it didn't belong to an observation diary, so she asked me to write it again! I have written two compositions this week! I cry, cry ... I cry loudly.
Don't write until you're finished crying ~ Brazilian tortoise My family has a Brazilian tortoise named "Wangcai", which was given by my grandmother. When I heard this name, I only knew that my grandmother was a money addict. I kept it in a fish tank, and put a big stone in it for him to climb up in the sun.
Everyone knows that the Brazilian tortoise is also an amphibian. It's only the size of an adult's palm.
There are hexagonal gray-green patterns on the back. There are very hard turtle shells up and down, and even if you fall from a height, you won't die.
The turtle's neck is very short, with wavy lines on it. Two eyes are round, as big as small mung beans, and shiny eyes are embedded in the middle.
it won't turn. When it blinks, it will make a slight "ba da ba da" noise, which can't be heard without paying attention. The little turtle likes to eat raw meat, but it only eats lean meat. Every time I throw food into the fish tank, it always sticks out its neck and looks around and opens its mouth to eat.
Tortoise eats food very much like snake, swallowing it bit by bit. The book says that the turtle's eyesight is amazing. In order to prove whether it is as stated in the book, I hung the meat on the water with a thread. The water is only 1 centimeters deep, but it can't see.
Although it has poor vision, it can feel and hear very sensitively. I put the tortoise on the ground and clap my hands 1 meters away, and he will retract his head with lightning, but I have searched all over it, but I can't see its ears.
When the tortoise crawls, as soon as I touch its tail with my hand, it suddenly shrinks all its organs and limbs into the hard shell, which is enough to show how sensitive it feels. When the Brazilian tortoise is full of energy, it will crawl back and forth, sometimes it will climb on the stone prepared for it, and then it will climb to the bottom of the tank.
when bored, Doby put it on the ground, but it plunged its head into the ground, paddling its feet in one direction. Suddenly, it plunged into the ground, and its claws propped up and turned over! That's interesting. The Brazilian tortoise is so silly and cute! It brings a lot of fun to my life.
when you are in a bad mood, look at it and the unhappy things will disappear. 3. How to imitate a composition < P > Imitation is the method of imitating a model essay. Imitation writing is an important means to combine reading with composition, and it is also an effective way to master writing quickly. Imitation is to take the model essay as a composition, read, digest and absorb it, and then imitate the helpful content in the model essay according to the specific requirements of your own exercise.
When practicing imitation writing, we can start from the following aspects: First, imitate writing composition topics. The topic is the eye of the article, and a good composition topic itself is very attractive. Second, imitate the genre of the article. The articles we have read include fairy tales, fables, narratives, expositions, thoughts after reading, poems, letters, diaries and various practical articles, etc. Different genres have different writing methods, and we can quickly master these writing methods through imitation. Third, imitate the narrative way. The common narrative methods are chronological order, development order, orientation order, etc., as well as sequence, flashback and interpolation, which can be imitated according to the needs of one's own exercises. Fourth, the imitation structure method. Some articles are the total score structure, and some articles are the total score structure, including the details of the article, the methods of beginning and ending, etc., which can be imitated appropriately. Fifth, imitation expression. The expression of composition is ever-changing, such as metaphor, personification, symbolism, dynamic and static combination, scene description, etc., which can be imitated. Of course, there are still many aspects that can be imitated. As long as we do a lot of reading at ordinary times, we can do it easily according to our own work needs. But parody is not the ultimate goal, the purpose is to be able to use it flexibly and freely through parody practice.