The sixth poem of Little Goldfish Qingqing
20 1 1 housekeeping companyNo.19 What did you feel when you saw a group of small goldfish in March?
Its tail is as soft as silk,
Its scales are as red as flames,
Its skin is as smooth as a scarf,
Its eyes are as black as ink.
Cute little goldfish.
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Little Goldfish One morning a week ago, I saw an uncle selling cute little fish in Aunt Xie's stall. I quickly took my mother's hand to see it. Wow! What a lot of small fish! I am very excited. I found tropical fish and goldfish ... I really wanted to buy them, so I begged my mother to say, "Mom, buy me some small fish!" " Please. "Mom looked at it and bought a small fish in the middle fish tank, a black one, a red one and a golden one. In addition, I bought a fish tank, a fake flower and a pack of fish food. There are colorful stones in the fish tank. They are colorful and beautiful. I like these lovely little goldfish very much
In the evening, I try to take them home. I can't put them in the fish tank. When I brake and jump, not only the fish will fall, but also the fish tank will be broken, the fake flowers will fall, and the fish food will be useless. Isn't this money spent? In the blink of an eye, I had a brilliant idea. I hurried to my uncle's house and asked for a bag, poured small fish (including fake flowers) into it, and then asked my mother to take away the fish tank and fish food, so that fish, fake flowers, fish tanks and fish food would not be wasted. When I get home, I watch my fish. My black eyes are so big, my little tail swings from side to side like a butterfly, and my red head is so red! Red is like sparks. My favorite is the golden goldfish. Its belly is bigger than swallowing a pearl. It's time to name it. I think they all have their own characteristics. Let's name them according to their characteristics! The black one is called butterfly tail, the red one is called red spark, and the golden one is called pearl.
These little fish bring me a lot of fun. I have to feed them and change the water sooner or later. Every time you bring a fish tank downstairs, you should be careful. I'm afraid I'll kill the fish if I hit it, so I'm afraid. Dad said; "As long as you don't listen, let me drink fish soup all morning." I said, "bad dad, bad dad", but my dad said unhurriedly, "There will be fish soup tomorrow." I said, "Well, if I listen, you won't have a chance to drink fish soup. But you can't drink fish soup when you are obedient. Hey! " Every time I don't listen, he will say so, but he won't. Hehe, O(∩_∩)O, action is better than action. How is he? Action is not as good as heartbeat! I think my little fish will never die, but unfortunately, alas, alas, alas, alas, want to know, please see the next section of nature!
I came home the other day and suddenly found my little Pearl dead. I suddenly froze. I immediately ran to little Pearl to see if she was really dead. I found the little pearl upside down. I rubbed my eyes. Ah! Pearl is really dead, and I can't cry. I thought, "Why did Pearl die?" The other two fish are safe and sound? "My mother and I threw pearls into the sea.
I feel that what I lost is not a small fish, but a darling, because I like it best! I'm sad. I've been crying. Every time I see a small fish, I think of a small pearl. I really have a pain that can't be expressed in words. Although I am sad, I want to keep the other two small fish well. I won't let them die. I'll try my best, hmm! Come on, come on, come on
From the pearl's arrival to its departure, it has given me great inspiration. Let's talk about the arrival of pearls first! Let me know that it is not easy to do anything, but if you like to do it, you will forget the fatigue and pain and finally get happiness. Let's talk about its departure first! Let me know that people and animals only have one life. God will only give you one life when he likes you, and I won't give you a second life. I will use this time to study hard and fulfill my parents' unfinished dreams.
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The lovely little goldfish grandpa has a cylindrical goldfish bowl on the windowsill, and there are four lovely little goldfish in it.
Look: The goldfish with a red hydrangea on its head seems to be the bride at the wedding. It's beautiful and elegant, and it's a little arrogant to swim. Maybe it's because of its beauty. Look at the goldfish covered in golden armor. Its big tulle tail is bigger than its body. When it swings gently, it is like a fairy coming down to earth. The black one is called lion head. Its round body makes it difficult to swim, but it looks peaceful and quite gentlemanly. These little goldfish really have a special taste when they are shuttling among the water plants: they are motionless for a while, swimming around for a while, swinging their tails and spitting bubbles in the water, and they look so carefree. Sometimes they surface, open their mouths and breathe fresh air. Sometimes they chase each other as if they were playing games. I put some fish worms into the water, and the goldfish that was quiet just now suddenly got up. They scrambled to eat fish and worms, and looked at me after eating, as if they had not eaten enough with their mouths open. Some people catch too much at a time, spit out a little first, and then eat it up in a few mouthfuls. When you are full, wag your tail and go for a walk. Some hide in the grass, their heads and tails are still, and they sleep with their eyes open.
Ha! The little goldfish is so cute.
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Beautiful little goldfish! My little goldfish is so beautiful!
Little goldfish have all kinds of reds. The orange tail is very beautiful, swimming around in the water like a gorgeous red flower, and the crimson body is set off more beautifully by the beautiful big tail, just like wearing a star costume, which is particularly remarkable in the water. Her big red triangle head has two protruding eyes, and she looks around curiously at all the new things. In the water, she is like a "princess in red".
The little goldfish is not only beautiful, but also interesting to eat! Every time I grab a handful of feed and go near the fish tank, the little guys flock to me, their mouths open wide, as if they knew I was going to give them food! When I put the ingredients in the fish tank, she saw it and swam gracefully to the food, as if not afraid of other fish taking it away. Those fish saw food in the place where the red goldfish swam, so they rushed to swim and swept away the food. "Hey? Why is there no food? " The red goldfish seemed to say, and then stared at me angrily, as if accusing me of not feeding her well. I had to grab some food and put it in front of it. It saw the fish, but didn't see it. Maybe it's because it's too small to eat too much. I grabbed some food, sank to the bottom and enjoyed it slowly.
The little goldfish tastes interesting, and what's more interesting is its temper. When a fish is resting, a red goldfish may swim over. I wonder: How can it swim so fast at this time? Touching another goldfish smaller than himself, the little goldfish seemed very angry and moved to chase the idle red goldfish. I thought: this is a good show! But I watched, huh? How did you become a red goldfish to chase a smaller goldfish?
Look! The goldfish in my family is very attractive and brings infinite joy to my family.
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Little Turtle My family bought a little turtle, the size of five cents, super cute!
My little turtle's name is Xiaowan, and her personality is just like its name. It is very naughty. When summer comes, I put my little stubbornness on a pile of fine sand. My little stubborn is really naughty, tumbling on the beach, hehe! That's cute. When winter comes, Xiaoman is no longer willing to eat as before. I throw some small fish and shrimp, but Xiaoman doesn't eat them. Finally, I gave Xiaoman his favorite food, and he would eat a little. I watched Xiaoman eat with relish, and I was so happy.
Day after day, year after year, after ups and downs, Xiao Jue is as big as a plate now, so I decided to let Xiao Jue go. I came to the place where the tortoise belongs, put it on the ground and let it climb back into the lake. I looked at its shadow, remembered my memories with Xiao Jue, and couldn't help crying.
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Lovely little fish My aunt bought two small fish from the market the day before yesterday. I'm so happy!
These are two tropical fish with eyes as big as black gems. Even in the dark and cold night, it can shine. They also have a chubby body, like a big balloon. Xiaoyu is very sensitive. As soon as my hands touched the water, they hurried away. One kind of fish is called peacock fish, and its tail swings from side to side like a fan. It's like a small fish beside a fan!
Once, I finished my homework and went to the fish tank and just put my hand into the water. Those two lovely little fish suddenly jumped out of the water, as if performing!
I often feed small fish. Every time I spread the crumbs evenly on the water, the small fish will slowly come around, bite a little, and then swallow it slowly. Look, its tail is still dangling in the water, as if to say, "It's delicious!" " "
My little fish is so cute, I like it!
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The little goldfish is covered with golden scales, and its tail is red, like a short skirt. The fin is triangular, and the small and exquisite head is inlaid with a pair of black eyes, as if it were two sparkling black gems. who is it? Have you guessed? Yes, it's a lively and lovely little goldfish.
Speaking of small goldfish, the most interesting thing is eating. When I came home today, I saw the little goldfish swimming listlessly, with his mouth open and closed, as if to say, "Little master, I'm almost hungry. Feed me quickly! " I quickly brought bread crumbs and rice grains, and they immediately cheered and went to eat. They opened their mouths to swallow food. That pink goldfish is picky about food! Once, I threw the leftover yolk into the fish tank, and the goldfish swam together to eat it. The pink goldfish looked around for the yolk to eat. When it got the yolk, it wriggled proudly. However, when other goldfish come to eat the yolk, it will chase them angrily. Sometimes it will hide behind the aquatic plants, and when it sees the fish eating the egg yolk coming, it will swim at a fast speed and take away its food. I think it is really overbearing!
After the goldfish are full, they swim leisurely in the fields of Xiaotian, spitting blisters. I like cute little goldfish!
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Happy little goldfish My family has three happy little goldfish. They are cute, smart and cute!
In order to distinguish them better, I gave them three nice names. There is a little goldfish, reddish all over. When I feed it, it will be the first to rush to the front. It is very smart, so I call it "smart". There is also a small goldfish with a red back, a Bai Rushuang belly and black and white fins. All colors are very lively, so I call them "lively"; The last little goldfish is the most special. It has a black spot the size of a black bean on its cheek, so I call it "black spot".
When I fed them food, some eyes kept staring at the food, some rushed to swallow it desperately, some swallowed it and spit it out, as if they were playing instead of eating at all. When they are full, they swim around happily in their respective fields in Xiaotian, and their round mouths spit out a bunch of bubbles from time to time. They are so happy! When they are full and have enough fun, they float in the fish tank and fall asleep. Unlike us, they sleep with their eyes open because fish have no eyelids.
These are my three happy little goldfish!
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Cute little goldfish My family has two little goldfish, both of which are bright in color and have different postures.
One of them is red all over, like wearing a red shirt, and his big bulging eyes are like two soft meatballs. The other is dark as black charcoal, and his big eyes turn like a yo-yo.
Every morning, the first thing I do when I get up is feed my beloved little goldfish. Feeding is very particular. If you feed too much, you will die like a goldfish. As soon as my food was spilled, the little goldfish scrambled to eat. I didn't eat breakfast until they were full.
Little goldfish is very playful. They push each other for a while, bite each other for a while, and sometimes encounter layers of waves on the water, just like knocking down the bad guys. Sometimes they are more beautiful with their tails up! Unfortunately, the good times did not last long. Because of my poor breeding skills, a little goldfish chose to go to another world, and I was sad for a long time. Fortunately, the other one brought me a lot of joy. I like this lovely little goldfish.
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Lovely little fish There are a group of lively and lovely little fish in my fish tank. They are different in shape, colorful, beautiful and very pleasing to the eye.
There are several arowana swimming around in the big fish tank. They ruled the territory like kings. As soon as the light shone, they were dressed in golden armor and shining with golden light. How beautiful! In the small fish tank, there are pairs of parent fish playing with each other! Map fish is like a flowing small map; Seven-star knife with a few small stars; Luo Hanyu is like a birthday girl with a big bag on her head. He is too selfish to live alone and has no friends. There are also many unknown colorful small fish.
My favorite thing is feeding them. When I come home from school every day, the first thing I do is watch them. "Be good today! It's time to eat! " I like blue angels and red little red riding hood, so every time I spill food on them, before they open their mouths to eat, big stupid melons and small stupid melons will bully them aside and eat by themselves. If they dare to move, the big fool will bite them. When they are full, the blue angel can eat a little. When I am angry, I will. My heart melted. Under my careful care, my little fish have grown up, "Big Stupid Melon" is more stupid, and "Blue Angel" is more beautiful. As long as I stand in front of the fish tank, they are like soldiers who hear the call, immediately approaching me, wagging their tails, and spreading their jiao like dogs seeing their owners, waiting for me to feed!
Small fish swim beautifully. Their gills keep tilting like fans, their fins keep paddling like paddles, and their tails keep swinging in the water like a beautiful ribbon. They frolic and play in the water, and some swim around in the water, with their white bellies up, as if drinking tea leisurely; Some jump in the water, making the water slightly rippling, looking carefree and free.
Look at my lovely little fish. They swam towards me and winked at me playfully, and Nunu shut up. I love my lovely little fish. After reading my introduction, do you like them too? It doesn't matter if you don't like them yet. I believe you will never dislike them as long as you see them, because they are so lively and naive.
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