once
Did you pass?
Filament and thread
Gather scattered charm
at present
Are you sure you want to keep this moment?
inch by inch
The inevitable result of solidification history
future
Can you satisfy my wish?
Every minute
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Changes, supplements and explanations:
1. Title: hourglass
1) Poetry takes time as the main body to express sentence meaning, and the hourglass is the most meaningful.
2) There are four paragraphs in the poem (one paragraph is hidden)
The first paragraph: the second half of the hourglass (memories)
Stage 2- Now: the middle part of the hourglass (happening)
The third stage-the future: the first half of the hourglass (about to happen)
Four paragraphs-title: the whole part of the hourglass (time)
Don't think that the hourglass (memory) of the "second half" has passed, this is the advantage of the hourglass. Turn it over and time will circulate smoothly. This is your choice!
2. Implied meaning: I am kept in captivity.
1) In the second sentence of the first paragraph, the word "already" was added.
2) In the second sentence of the second paragraph, the word "reservation" was added.
3) In the second sentence of the third paragraph, the word "I" is added.
3. Poetic generalization of interrogative sentences
1) "whether" in the second sentence of the first paragraph
2) "whether" in the second sentence of the second paragraph
3) "whether" in the second sentence of the third paragraph
4. The style is reasonable
1) Silk thread, gathering and scattering charm-the beauty of falling flowers.
2) Every bit is a foregone conclusion in the history of freezing-the water droplets collected after freezing are crystal clear.
3) Every minute, it is also a wonderful washing tool-using time to interpret happiness and happy comedy.
This poem of yours is really good. You must be a master at this point.
The above changes are personal opinions, and I hope the landlord will not take it amiss.