Didn't you start with regular script? ? The strokes are too stiff and inflexible. For example: "after", the first stroke is like a short stick, and the weight has not changed; There is also the last slap of "Li", which is the same; The same is true of the last stroke of "promotion" and "post".
There are too many pens. For example, a horizontal "back"; The last horizontal line of "three"; The last stroke on the cover of the treasure of Xue Ji;
The structure is inaccurate. For example, under the "reason"? Mouth? Appear too big; The second vertical of Fly is too long; "Come" to the lower space; The first horizontal line of "thing" should be long, and the lower horizontal line should be short.
Still have to continue to work hard!