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Many parents are trying to find tutors to teach their children special skills such as music, dancing, calligraphy, painting, chess and so on , hoping they'll become more successful in the future.
Learning special skills can help children develop both different skills and many interests, which can enrich their lives. Meanwhile, they can broaden their horizons and improve themselves . Besides, they will be more likely to get good jobs in the future.
However, life is hard for these children, who have to spend much time practicing the skills. They hardly have their own time to do what they want. Also, they have to suffer more pressure.? What's worse , their families have to pay more money for their learning.
Different children have different interests and they do need time to relax. So I think parents should let children do what they're interested in. Only in this way can they enjoy a happy life.
Test question analysis: This article is a question type that explains the pros and cons. Question types often require you to first explain the current situation, and then compare the pros and cons of the thing itself. Sometimes it will only start from one perspective (pros or cons). Finally, it often requires the examinee to express his or her attitude (or make predictions about the future of the thing). As far as this article is concerned, you are required to write down the benefits, disadvantages and your own personal opinions based on the prompts regarding parents’ excessive demands on their children from an early age and fear of their children losing at the starting line. Therefore, three paragraphs can be used in the layout of the article. Describe these three aspects; in addition, the benefits and disadvantages of essay prompts involve a lot of content. In order to avoid content confusion, words indicating order should be appropriately used when discussing, such as first; second; at last; one the one hand, one the other hand; for one thing; for another thing, etc. In terms of tense, since this is an article discussing a social phenomenon, you can use the present tense. Finally, in terms of language, we should also pay attention to the variety of advanced vocabulary and sentence patterns to improve the quality of the article.
Highlights: At the beginning of the sample article, the author brings up the social phenomenon of parents placing excessive demands on their children and their expectations. Then in the second paragraph, he talks about the benefits of children learning more skills from three aspects. This paragraph uses two adverbs, meanwhile and besides, which express close relationships, making the content level of this paragraph very clear. At the beginning of the third paragraph, the author first uses the word “however” to introduce the shortcomings behind this phenomenon, effectively achieving a transition in content, and also uses words such as “also” and “what’s worse” to give the article a sense of hierarchy. Finally, the author uses Different children have different interests and they do need time to relax. as a transition to put forward his own point of view. This arrangement of paragraphs and levels not only makes the article compact in structure and naturally connected from top to bottom, but also shows the author's clear thinking and accurate grasp of vocabulary. In terms of sentence structure, the author uses the inversion sentence Only in this way can they enjoy a happy life., the object clause I think parents should let children do what they're interested in. and the attributive clause life is hard for these children, who have to spend much time practicing the skills. etc. enrich the sentence structure of the article and become the highlights of the article.