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Try to change it:

How did we meet by chance?

The beautiful figures parted in a hurry

Looking back at the gentleman intoxicated

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Love deeply

I am obsessed with the bright moon on the branches

I am filled with longing and longing

If you know your wish for spring mud

Brief explanation:

If you know your wish for spring mud: If you understand my sincerity, I would like to turn into spring mud.

The word "spring mud" comes from the first poem of "Miscellaneous Poems of Ji Hai" written by Qing Dynasty poet Gong Zizhen: Falling red is not a heartless thing, it turns into spring mud to protect flowers. Here it refers to your love and care for your lover (similar to your "shelter bay"). At the same time, "mud" rhymes with your entire poem—respecting your original poem and only slightly changing the numbers to try to make it smoother and more meaningful. Don't be offended.

Absolutely original, I hope you will appreciate it.