Excellent composition comments of senior high school entrance examination: I want to go to Datang.
Flowers, only under the background of green leaves, can show their charm; White clouds can only show their purity against the blue sky; Stars can only show their brilliance in the background of night. A person's appearance is decorated with talent and knowledge, which will certainly highlight the brilliance and light. In the language that seems like Gaidar's joke, there is a profound truth: even if you are ragged and penniless, you can be famous all over the world as long as you have real talent and knowledge and can fill your chest. Therefore, we should not only look at the appearance, but also look at the essence through the phenomenon.
Only a low profile can make a difference. A female pianist attended a grand concert and wore a simple dress. The audience was shocked when she appeared on the stage. However, as the fingers hit the melody of the keys, the audience quickly became intoxicated and began to enjoy the wonderful notes, having long forgotten her dress. After the meeting, she said, "I don't care what I wear today, as long as I play well today, that's enough." She also said: "People should metaphor behind music." It can be seen that just looking at a person's appearance is glamorous or not, you can't see the connotation of a person. Real talent is often hidden in his inner world, so that he can make a difference and go further.
Showing off can only be ruined. If people blindly deceive public opinion and audio-visual with false appearances, they will expose flaws and bring embarrassment to themselves. Qi Xuanwang likes listening to music and playing in groups, which is very imposing. So they recruited a group of musicians who were good at playing. Mr. Nan Guo seized this opportunity to make money, and then mixed in with the crowd to make up the numbers, imitating others to swing from side to side, playing well. Later, Qi Xuanwang died and his son Wang Qimin succeeded him to the throne. Although he likes listening to music, he prefers to listen to solo. In this way, the superficial Mr. Nan Guo has nowhere to hide, so he can only take the opportunity to escape and fly away. From this point of view, if people want to do things for a long time, they must be kind, one is one, the other is two, and pretend that they are very talented, but they are actually a straw bag. Such fraud and cover my ears will only lead to ruin in the end.
Only by laying a good foundation can we treat both the symptoms and the root causes. Life is like Gai Lou. Only by laying a solid foundation can a tall building be built. Human learning is like the foundation of life. If you lay a good foundation at the beginning of your study, you will be able to stand the test of wind and waves in the future. Rain or shine, the earth shakes. Excessive pursuit of appearance does not necessarily lead to good results. Pushkin, known as the "father of Russian literature", is brilliant, but he is fascinated by the first beauty in Moscow. Although he won a beauty later, his wife's endless flashy life extinguished his creative spark. Later, his wife hooked up with a nobleman, and Pushkin, unwilling to be humiliated, duel with his rival in love, but unfortunately died. From this perspective, the pursuit of beauty will not only ruin his own literary path, which is undoubtedly not a regret, but also an irreparable regret in world literature, all of which is caused by his wife who pursues vanity. Self-cultivation, both internal and external, based on the future.
How can we achieve long-term success without real talent and practical learning? How can Confucius have 3,000 disciples without genuine talent and learning? Without real talent and learning, how can Sima Qian's Historical Records become a "masterpiece of historians"? Without real talent and learning, how could Zhuge Liang divide the world into three parts and revive the Han Dynasty? Therefore, only with real talent and practical learning can we go further in the future and take root in the future. Real talent and practical learning make the flower of dreams more delicate and lasting. Who will get it and destroy it?
test paper
The world, human feelings and everything are different. When the morning sun generously sprinkled on the earth, everything laughed. I stood on this gorgeous chapter of Tang and Song Dynasties and looked through the papers submitted by the ancients through historical changes. ...
"Endure floating fame, change to shallow singing", but Song Renzong, with a stroke of his pen, "why floating fame? And fill in the words! " Since then, with a broken heart, you have been tossing and turning on the road of life and floating around. Sometimes you indulge in the bustling downtown, sometimes you are in the ancient wilderness, sometimes you hang out with prostitutes, and you are in close contact with the lower class citizens ... "Where there is well water to drink, you can sing willow words", and you finally handed in an answer sheet that will last forever.
"West wind roller blinds, people are thinner than yellow flowers." In the face of much ado about nothing, in the face of residual fragrance and wine, in the face of being fat, red and thin, without fellow villagers and acquaintances, there is only a glass of turbid wine to clear up the sorrow. How deep is that sadness? There's nothing a grasshopper can do. Since I can't bear it, I will turn it into salty tears with loneliness, dripping into Zhao Mingcheng's memory, dripping into the lingering thoughts of hating the enemy of the motherland ... "I'm afraid I can't bear a lot of worries", and you finally handed in a melancholy answer sheet.
"A leopard cannot change his spots, but his spots are covered with grass and trees." Here is no longer the bustling capital of the past, but now there is smoke. Du Fu, your heart is suffering, suffering is the collapse of the country, suffering is the separation of his wife and children, and suffering is the displacement of the people. When will the Anshi Rebellion end, you expect, you wait, and the endless war makes you feel at a loss ... "I smoothed my white hair. It has grown too thin, and it can no longer hold hairpins. "You finally handed in an answer sheet that cares about the country and the people.
Looking at this historical answer sheet, I can't help but admire their sincerity and their feelings.
Putting a full stop on the answer means the end, even if it is "written in order", so what? As long as you have sincerity, you are not afraid of the bumps ahead; Even if things are different, so what? As long as you persist, you are not afraid of all difficulties; Even if "I can't catch the hairpin anymore", so what? As long as you have feelings, you are not afraid of the changes in the world. Even if it is an answer sheet, we must strengthen our writing beliefs.
Wonderful comments
The first sentence of the general introduction points out the argument that "in the world, things in the world are different". Then, the viewpoint of reading the answers of the ancients is introduced in concise language to stimulate readers' interest in reading.
Sub-argument 1 (written in about 150 words) can quote or use Liu Yong's words in P 175 "Wonderful Materials", and can also quote Liu Yong's poems to prove the argument by combining his life experience and poetry creation achievements. This not only makes the argument more convincing, but also arouses readers' interest in reading.
Sub-argument 2 (about 150 words) can write Li Qingzhao's thoughts on her husband, family and country in her later years, and skillfully combine her poems to show her melancholy answer. P 175 "Wonderful Material" Li Qingzhao's life can be cited.
Sub-argument 3 (writing about 150 words) can quote or use the words of Du Fu, a patriotic poet in P 175, and organically combine the poet's life experience with his poems to show the poet's patriotic feelings.
After the demonstration, you can summarize the above and express your views appropriately.
Rhetorical devices such as parallelism and questioning can be used at the end to enhance the momentum and language charm of the article. (For more endings, see P 175 "Wonderful Ending". )
My teacher
I have met many teachers since I went to school. Below, I will tell a few stories about my teacher.
First, Tang poetry
Tang Poetry is my Chinese teacher in grade seven. In fact, his name is not Tang poetry, but Tang. We call him "Tang poetry" because he likes to quote Tang poetry in his lectures, which sometimes makes us suspect that he crossed from the Tang Dynasty more than 1000 years ago to modern times. "Tang poetry" is characterized by a strong sense of responsibility. On one occasion, several students didn't finish their homework. After class, Tang Poetry made them stand for a class. Criticize and educate them after class and urge them to make up their homework. Anyway, you have to completely correct your mistakes, otherwise it won't be good for you. Therefore, we are all very afraid of the situation in the "Tang Poetry" class, and we would rather endure it than violate the classroom discipline, for fear that "Tang Poetry" will be caught by accident.
Second, the mother text.
"Mother Wen" is my English teacher and head teacher in 8th grade. Because she treats all our classmates like her own children, we generally don't call her "Miss Wen" but "Mother Wen". "Mother Wen" cares about us all the time and loves us in every way. As long as we encounter difficulties, "Mother Wen" will appear around us in time and make us happy. Once, a classmate's parents divorced, and that classmate was heartbroken and his academic performance plummeted. "Mother Wen" quietly went to her classmate's house and acted as a psychologist. Finally, she successfully saved a family and her classmates recovered their vitality. Parents didn't find the change of children, but "Wen Mama" found the change of students. From Mother Wen, I read about love.
Third, the wisdom of many stars.
"Zhi Duo Xing" is my current physics teacher. He is called a "wise man" because his wisdom flashes before our eyes all the time. He is tall and handsome, with inner wisdom and handsome appearance. In a sense, he is the hero of our class, and he is really awesome. On New Year's Day last year, the school held a tug-of-war competition. Our class competes with Class Two, which has a strong lineup. As a result, we lost the first game. Later, under the command of "Zhi Duo Xing", the result can be imagined. In the last two games, our class swept the board. Zhi Duo Xing taught me how to use the knowledge in books flexibly.
Of course, I have many teachers, each with its own characteristics, and they are all examples for me to learn.
Wonderful comments
I have been in school for almost ten years. Along the way, I met many talented teachers. Their words and deeds have deeply influenced me, guiding me how to be a man and leading me forward, which is an eternal example in my life.
Although the opening paragraph of the upgrade manual is concise and lively, it does not set a clear tone for the article. After the upgrade, come straight to the point and go straight to the subject, which laid an emotional tone for the full text to affirm and praise the teachers' words and deeds.
If anyone dares not finish his homework on time and is found by Tang poetry, he will always invite you to his office at the first time, and then take the trouble to talk with you until your conscience finds out and make up your homework in time. "Tang Poetry" often says: "Black hair doesn't know how to study hard early, but it's too late to study." In his rambling, I studied diligently, for fear of failing to live up to time, and unconsciously felt the heaviness of life.
Criticizing and educating the Tang poetry in the upgraded original by means of penalty station will not help to shape its characters or reveal the theme of this article. After the upgrade, there is no such thing as "corporal punishment of students" in "Tang poetry", which is inconsistent with the status of "good teacher" At the same time, the clever quotation of famous aphorisms makes this paragraph strongly support the theme of the full text and enhance the language charm of the article.
3 "Wen Mama" loves us everywhere: when it is cold, she will show you her clothes; When she is thirsty, she will pass the cup directly; Whoever forgets to bring a pen, she can take one out of her pocket at once. Like a magical archangel, she will always conjure up what you need in time, which will make your eyes shine and make you happy.
The original sentence of "Upgrade Guidance" is intended to always write "Marvin's concern for students", but the text is general and lacks specific examples. The upgraded language is more beautiful. First, the teacher Wen loves us as much as her mother, and gives three examples to show the meticulous care of Wen's mother. It is more meaningful to compare "mother Wen" to a magical archangel.
On New Year's Day last year, the school held a tug-of-war competition. Our class competes with Class Two, which has a strong lineup. As a result, we lost the first game. We are discouraged. If we lose the second game, our class will be eliminated directly. At this time, "Zhi Duo Xing" came running. He quickly called us together and told us to keep our center of gravity down as far as possible and not to be easily pinned down by each other. He carefully sprinkled some water on the ground, which increased the friction between our soles and the ground ... With such a staff member present, we all seemed relieved. As a result, of course, we can imagine that our class won a total victory.
The upgrade of the original sentence is only a simple description of "knowing many stars" to make suggestions for our competition, but the specific process has been brushed aside, which is not conducive to highlighting the character characteristics of the characters. After the upgrade, the help given by the writing teacher shows the wisdom of the physics teacher more vividly and makes the characters fuller.