————How I started writing old-style poetry
When talking about writing old-style poetry, we have to start with the Wangjiang Forum in 2017. At that time, Teacher Zheng Yanlu, who was in the same office, was already writing poems on the Wangjiang Forum. He talked about some situations, and I also signed up to join the forum. The poetry moderators Xuan Hu and Cao Gen in the forum are very enthusiastic. Whenever a novice publishes an exercise, they point out the problems in the meter and provide encouragement. Judging from the earliest exercise preserved in the forum, it is "Reflections on the Reconstruction of Leiyang Academy (New Rhythm)" on June 11, 2017. This can also be regarded as the starting point of my old-style poetry writing.
Later, I had some exercises and wanted to find an expert to look at them. So there were seven poems published in "Lei Chi Yin". I asked my colleague Liu Xinxu to ask his father-in-law, Mr. Tan Zhong, to correct me. Later, he posted it directly on "Lei Chi Yin". Perhaps Mr. Tan wanted to encourage the younger generation. I also noticed that he also did some things for me. Minor modifications. It is recorded as follows:
The column of the times includes:
"Looking at the New Rhythm"?
The water of Kowloon Pond is thousands of miles away, and the fish jumps over the kite and flies into the sun. Daily new. The shadows of clouds and the light of the sky are withdrawn from the eyes, and the dragons and phoenixes rise up to follow you.
The Times Trends column also has a song by Mr. Shen Tianhong, which is temporarily recorded here, which shows that not all "Lei Chi Yin" is "Laogan Ti", and people with a discerning eye will recognize it:
"The Foundation Laying of the Wangdong Yangtze River Bridge"
The clouds are full of thunder, the pond is full of water, and the river is full of clouds and flying water. Tao Qian couldn't sleep and worried about the wind and waves. Bao Zhao came up and sighed at the vastness. The sea air is full of vitality, and the fish and dragons are already dreaming of the neon light. The clear smoke came to my chest from far away trees, and I suddenly felt the sound of waves carrying fragrance.
The Land Rover column includes:
"Travel to Xidi"
The green mountains are winding to Xidi, and the She ink stone carvings are amazing. The archway of the governor's office is a rare place for officials and officials in the Ming and Qing dynasties.
Rural Collection Column includes:
"Herding Cows in the Rain"
On a smoky rainy day, farmers have no time to plant rice. The little elf helps with housework and loves to watch bullfights and climb trees.
Four poems about things and feelings:
"New Willow"
Suddenly I saw yellow willows and geese on the roadside, bathing in the spring light and wearing brocade clothes. Dance gracefully to remember your youth, rekindle your dreams and pursue spring.
"Cinnamomum Camphor"
A gust of wind blows the fragrant leaves, secretly working hard to metabolize. The cherry blossoms only smile in the spring breeze, and the greenery is the most beautiful in all seasons.
"Ode to Smiling Flowers"
A tree of silver flowers illuminates the eyes, and the cold fragrance condenses wherever the cold wind passes. Don’t talk about decay and don’t give up. The sound of spring is coming and hundreds of birds are chirping.
"Ode to Purple Leaf Plum (New Rhyme)"
A crescent moon contains a yellow halo, and a few lone stars shine brightly. The purple-leafed plum tree stays in the lonely wilderness and stays in Danbo Township for the rest of its life. Just because my heart is warm and the flowers bloom, I can't complain to God because my body is cold. From summer to cold, I work hard at my job, and it is normal to be with you.
The reason why I keep this set of poems is because they contain bits and pieces of my life’s feelings. The first is the feeling of being a teacher. Ba Jin said that our souls need to develop and blossom, otherwise they will dry up. In life, everyone who engages in any profession will have their own feelings over time. We have been teaching all our lives, and we know ourselves whether we are good or bad. Although "agriculture", "medicine" and "teacher" were unpopular majors at the beginning, especially The teaching profession emphasizes simplicity and indifference, just like Yan Hui, who "eats and drinks in a back alley, even though he cannot bear the hardships, he will not change his ambition after returning home." However, teaching and educating people for a long time has naturally given him a unique experience and his own. Feelings, have their own fun, these self-aware bitterness, joy and warmth are exactly what the poem "Ode to Purple Leaves and Plums" is intended to express, which is the so-called "I only want the heart to be warm and the flowers to bloom, but I can't blame God for being cold". "Four Poems about Things and Expressions of Love" mostly express such feelings.
Childhood is worth remembering, because even poverty is happy and interesting. This is what I feel like in "Herding Cows in the Rain". There seems to be a special fate between Wang Zhong and Wang Zhong. As a person, he naturally has a feeling for Wang Zhong. "Every day new"), the third sentence is a transfer sentence, which not only continues the above, describes the beautiful picture brought about by development, but also places more hope on future talents, because development is forever...
< p> To do anything, you must first be interested, and secondly, you must have the courage. The same is true for writing poetry. I remember that the Chinese language group went to Xidi, and teacher Zheng Yanlu and I wrote two old-style poems. I quoted it in my work "The Mighty Spring Wind Travels to the West" - I feel that his writing is good. Speaking of courage, I also mentioned participating in the poetry competition. I had just started to learn to write, and I actually submitted it to the modern poetry competition. The senior judge Lu Xiangxian actually selected my poem "House Price" from four to five thousand submissions as one of the three hundred works that passed the preliminary evaluation. I think it may be that the content of my poem is just right. The issue of housing prices that everyone is most concerned about has some practical significance. Attached is the poem "House Prices" below:As soon as housing prices started to rise, people all over the world were filled with resentment after a lifetime of hard work.
Let me introduce two other poems:
"Selling Vegetables"
There are mixed vegetables lined up along the road, and the hands are busy and the words are quick. Respond to inquiries.
The weight weighs the weight of the years and weighs the weight of the people.
"Visiting Meiling Palace"
She is always famous for her relief efforts, and Qianying calmly treats important officials.
It doesn’t matter that the pavilion is still there when people are gone, and I can read solitary chapters one after another.
The first two sentences of "Selling Vegetables" describe the traditional scene of selling vegetables, which is the basis for the emotional development later. This scene is common, but what is touching is that it is not only the vegetables in their hands that are being weighed down, but also the lives of these vegetable sellers. Perhaps in the eyes of some people, their lives are as insignificant as side dishes, but even great people, who can live without vegetables for their three meals a day? Therefore, it is said that "Three meals of weight are used to control all the people." The word "press" shows its importance! Every ordinary job we have is like this, so we can also use "Selling Vegetables" to express our grassroots feelings!
In addition to the grassroots, I have also set my sights on big figures who have played a decisive role in history. Whether visiting the beautiful house in Mount Lu or the Meiling Palace in Nanjing, I have one emotion: when the Nationalist Party was defeated and retreated to Taiwan, why was the mansion of the first lady of the Kuomintang still preserved? In addition to the broadmindedness of the Communist Party, it also shows that these historical relics have unique value of preservation. Both buildings are named after "Meiling", which also reflects Soong Meiling's personality charm! ——It is said that Roosevelt was her good friend. The reason why beauties in history are famous in history is not only because of their appearance, but also because they played an important role in history and played a unique political role. Most of the four beauties, Xi Shi, Diao Chan, Wang Zhaojun, and Yang Yuhuan, were like this. ! That’s why I said that “it is always because of disaster relief that her reputation is passed down”, and Soong Meiling’s struggle with He Yingqin and others during the “Xi’an Incident” should be a highlight in her life. It makes people think of the scene when “a beautiful woman calmly dealt with important officials”. The man has gone, but the pavilion will remain forever! Tourists come one after another every day, savoring the "lone chapter" of Soong Meiling's life and her endless charm!
Joining various poetry WeChat groups and submitting articles to micro-magazines is a kind of communication and also a kind of improvement. The poetry groups I joined mainly include the Poetry Voice Group of Deng Shiguang’s disciple Liang Hanxi, Wangjiang Poetry Friends Group, Poetry Selection Group, Poetry Selection Group, etc. Teacher Jiang Sheng played a certain role in this. The members of the Voice of Poetry group come from all over the country, mainly from the northwest region. The members of the Wangjiang Poetry Friends Group are mainly poetry lovers in the county, including county leaders and bureau leaders who have retired to the second line, as well as retired teachers and working personnel from various industries, including leaders of the Cultural Bureau. The poetry anthology is organized by a teacher who teaches poetry at a university in Beijing, and the key staff there have a certain level of proficiency. The selection of poems is almost picky. What are the ten precepts for using rhyme such as squeeze rhyme, clashing rhyme, and connected rhyme? What are the rules of poetry that avoid folding the palms and flattening the head? Although there is a certain truth, after all, it is too restrictive and inconvenient to express feelings, and even for the sake of form. In order to harm the content, I found poems by some famous writers and even the deputy editors in this group (some of whom were employed in universities), and pointed out that they would inevitably violate taboos sometimes, which forced the deputy editor Wu Beizi (Secretary of the Party Committee of a certain university) to come out explain. The following is a poem "Ode to Sima Xiangru" that I published in this micro-magazine:
There are many poems published in "Selected Poems" and "Zi Yue Shi Yun", such as those about classics recited by our school A long poem in the form of "Chanting Lines", as well as "Spring Day", "Night of Repeating Reading Class", "Opening of Junhuang Mountain Civil Defense Park", "Crowing of Frogs", "Sentiment at the End of the Year", etc... Later, because of fear, It affects teaching, so I have withdrawn from these groups one after another, leaving it for later.
The reason why I write old-style poems is because high school Chinese language teaching includes the appreciation of classical poetry, which is a key and difficult point in the college entrance examination. The ancients said that if you know that there are tigers in the mountains, you will go to the mountains. Wang Anshi also said that the wonders and wonders of the world often lie in dangerous and remote places that are rarely visited by people. I wrote old-style poetry with a desire to appreciate things, and to overcome the common problem of having a good eye but a weak hand. This is also why I led students to write old-style poetry, and I wanted to use this to solve the problem of appreciation of ancient poetry. Because "Poet's Language" has special grammar, such as word misplacement, inflection of parts of speech, intertextual meanings, etc., especially word misplacement, sometimes it does not make sense from the perspective of modern Chinese grammar. But classical poetry pursues this kind of well-proportioned rhythmic beauty.
Instructing students to write old-style poems was largely promoted by Teacher Jiang Sheng, who is a Chinese teaching researcher. Because he wanted to organize students' works to participate in the competition, he followed me and asked students to practice poetry. In fact, students' writing of old-style poems depends largely on the teacher's revision. Students determine a theme based on their own lives or interests and write a draft. , and then the teacher will consider the rhythm and language to make modifications, consider how to upgrade it, and write some artistic conception! This aspect is very tiring work for me, but it is also an exercise. The knowledge of classical poetry appreciation is consolidated and applied here, such as choosing words to form sentences, refining words, and various expression techniques, allowing us to appreciate the hard work of creation as well as the fun. The two classes I taught in 2018 produced eighty-nine poems, which later won awards in various competitions or were published in some publications. The exercises of these students are recorded as follows:
"Ode to Plum Blossoms" - Shen Xuan
Black clouds are like covering the sky, and the wind and snow are full of surprises in the future. On the 9th, the cold winter is full of vitality, and I wish to stay with the dark fragrance for a long night.
"Returning at Dusk"? --——Jing Yang
The breeze at dusk wraps around your fingers, and the molten gold is returning at the moment. The hibiscus trees on the roadside are rouge-colored, whispering silver bells far and near.
"Sunset" ?——Xu Jiahui
Leaning on the railing and looking at the twilight, the old trees and dead vine bridges are in danger. A few strands of love are carried into the dream, and the autumn wind sends the old friend home again.
"Gathering"?————Fang Jingjing
It is a beautiful June day near the window, and classmates from 1989 and 1989 gather together. The bitterness, joy, sourness and sweetness have lasted for three years, and the friendship is comparable to that of Sanjiang.
"Holiday"————Sun Jingjing
Everyone is happy when the bell rings, and cars and horses rush through the school gate. The green mountains outside the window are picturesque, and the birds are dancing gracefully out of their cages.
"Looking for Poems"?————Guo Ruoxu
Sitting quietly in the bookstore, thousands of lights are bright. I went out to look for poems and gazed at the stars in the sky.
Ode to the Mad Monk of Lingling——Wang Chennuo
In the Bajiao Temple, there are thousands of glasses of wine, and the wall shakes with three loud sounds.
I have endless thoughts in my heart, and it is hard to sell the hatred that runs like snakes and aphids.
Ode to Zhang Changshi of Wu County——Wang Chennuo
Everyone in the world has heard of the three masterpieces, but few people are in trouble.
The long history of the book is like a claw, and the colorful color is torn apart in anger.
"Red Cliff" ————Yu Chengxing
Shi Mi Dajiang chained down, Liu Wu joined forces to attack the room with fire. He helped Yuliang with his help, and returned the favor to Qionghuan in Yinyu.
"Looking at the Tide of the Sea? Looking at the River" (published in the name of classmate Yu Chengxing, it is actually a clumsy work for practicing penmanship, mainly for familiarity with the rhythm of poetry)
? The ancient name was Lei Shu, now it is passed down as Three Filial Piety, The reputation of Leichi spreads far and wide. The mountains are beautiful and the rivers are wide, the folk customs are honest and simple, and the etiquette is cultivated, read and passed down from generation to generation. High quality cotton. Wuchang produces large crabs, as well as rays and shrimps. Gifts are attentive, and the number of silver fish in the lake is the best. ?
? The thunder and water of Mingshan Mountain are pure and beautiful, and they are legendary and have been praised for generations. Qu Xin Hao Gong is famous for his virtuous spirit and the stars are shining with brilliance. Drive today to catch up and overtake. The bridge connects the north and south, where merchants settle down. Expanding the industry in the park will bring bright prospects.
Note: ① Wangjiang, a large thunder garrison was built during the Jin Dynasty ② Quqū Xinling, around the time when Dezong of the Tang Dynasty was alive during the Zhenyuan period. In the first year of Zhenyuan (AD 785), he became a Jinshi. He served as the magistrate of Wangjiang County in Shuzhou and had favorable government policies. ③Hao Gong refers to Shen Hao, a Jinshi during the Kangxi period. ? Ren Lun, a native of Wangjiang, was a Jinshi in the 19th year of Yongle in the Ming Dynasty. ? Wang Rui, courtesy name Liangbi, was born in Wangjiang, Anhui Province. He was a Jinshi in the fifth year of Chenghua reign of Emperor Xianzong of the Ming Dynasty. ……④ Bridge, the East Yangtze River Bridge, the first bridge on the upper reaches of the 800-mile Wanjiang River, will be opened to traffic at the end of 2016.
"Red Cliff" written by classmate Yu Chengxing is an embedded poem. It was his idea to embed my name into the poem.
(By the way: I also guided Xu Yu to write three new poems "Thunder Pond". In the 2018 College Entrance Examination, Xu Yu ranked first in liberal arts and Chinese in the school with more than 610 points. The score is also above 115.)
The most unexpected thing is that two short poems by Yang Jing and Guo Ruoxu won the global competition organized by the Luzhou Municipal Government and the Chinese Writers Association's "Poetry Magazine" respectively. Bronze medals in the Poetry Competition, each with a bonus of 5,000 yuan, two bottles of Luzhou Laojiao, a trophy and a certificate. (See "China Poetry Network 2019-09-05" for details)
There is also a short poem that guided Xie Wanyu, who was a freshman in high school at the time, and won a third prize in the county in the first half of 2019:
Like Meng Ling
The mouth is full of smoke, and over time, the yellow teeth are visible. I would like to ask those who love smoking, do you want to stop until your lungs are black? On the way back, on the way back, you should remember the suffering of those around you. (? Class 103 Xie Wanyu? )
The works I participated in in the Second Modern Poetry Competition in 2018 were included in the "Collection of Outstanding Works in the Modern Poetry Competition", and were accompanied by comments from the judges.
Celebrate the New Year (feeling like an empty nester)
The sound of firecrackers is full of New Year flavor, and it will be lively in a few days. A widowed mother in her seventies is busy with meals, cooking a pot of joy and sorrow in the evening.
Luo Yunfeng’s comment: The excitement of a few days contrasts with the loneliness of a year, and a pot of bitterness and joy makes people sigh. The "lively door" is a little sketchy.
I also participated in the 3rd Modern Poetry Competition in 2019. One of my freehand lyrics, "Partridge Sky? Qingming", has been scored by the judges and entered the final evaluation, and there are comments from the judges - - The judges selected 300 poems from the anonymous 2,000 poems and divided them into seven levels, giving them scores of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, and 7. The judges wrote comments on works with scores of 6 and 7. (See Figure 26 below for comments)
Although I feel that my writing level of old-style poetry has improved during exchanges and competitions, I see more of my own shortcomings and see that there are mountains beyond the mountains. , Climbing the "mountain" requires endurance and tests our foot strength. Let me excerpt two other people's poems that are worth learning:
Bodhisattvaman·Hometown
Everyone says that hometown is good, but no one wants to die in hometown. Ninety percent of the ten rooms are empty, counting from west to east.
The water in the pond in front of the door once reflected the beauty of that time. When I return today, the roses will bloom on their own.
Qingpingle·Old House
Green moss and black tiles, silent under the slanting light. The copper-green stars have now sealed up the past events again on the shelves.
That cage once held fish and shrimps, and that basket was once decorated with haze. There is a dragonfly in the corner, flying leisurely across the branches.
? By the way, the prose "The Crowing of Frogs in the Quiet Night" published in "Anqing Writers" uses an old-style poem "The Crowing of Frogs". In fact, the prose "The Crocking of Frogs in the Quiet Night" is in some In a sense, it is an expanded version of the poem "Frog Croaking". This is also the reason why I write poetry when I don’t have time to write prose. After all, a prose generally requires more than a thousand words, while a poem only requires four or eight sentences.
Qu Zi once said: “Everyone has his own happiness in life.
"? Life and work also need to be adjusted. For me, this is also a temporary interest! Not to mention it is related to Chinese teaching! It can even be said that this is also a part of Chinese teaching!
2020.1.9 The fifteenth day of the twelfth lunar month in 2019
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