Innovation Chengxin composition Xiao Yu zhong cha

Second, the art of "metaphor" in the composition language of the college entrance examination. First, direct metaphor: metaphor is like folding bamboo. Metaphor is a common method for students to write, but some people don't understand the special expressive effect of compound sentence. It can produce overwhelming artistic effect, give people a feeling of being overwhelmed, make people deeply understand the meaning of the theme in metaphor, and feel the literary talent and momentum of the author's language. Sometimes every metaphor needs further explanation, which can enrich the language. Example 1. Honesty, like the first sunshine in spring, is desirable and humbly accepted; Such as a piece of watermelon in summer, contained in the mouth, sweet to the heart; For example, a fiery red maple leaf floating in the distance in autumn evokes infinite concern; Like snowflakes flying all over the sky in winter, it is always so pure. (Honesty-Forever Green Card) In the process of writing, the construction of metaphor can form a momentum of breaking bamboo, so that readers can savor it carefully in the sentence patterns of metaphor. The author of this passage is well aware of this method: comparing "sincerity" to "the first ray of sunshine in spring", "a watermelon in summer", "a flaming maple leaf floating in the distance in autumn" and "snowflakes flying all over the sky in winter", and taking the most representative things in the four seasons as metaphors, the perspective is unique. However, the author did not just stay at the level of a simple metaphor, but added a sentence after each metaphor that seemed easy for ordinary students, but difficult to do, and the expression effect was particularly good. For example, "Accepting with an Open Mind" writes out the author's love for the sunshine in spring. In the eyes of children who are just beginning to understand, zero is a golden sun, a boiling egg, a blooming sunflower, a round chocolate, a doughnut fried by mom, or maybe it's just a circle ... (Imagination of zero) The author compares zero to the sun, eggs, sunflowers and sunflowers. This is also with the help of metaphor. Imagine that without these unique metaphors, its artistic effect can be imagined. Second, metaphor+sentiment: metaphor is profound. Many of our classmates will use metaphors, but more often they will leave it alone after writing. In fact, being able to write one or several metaphors is only half of the real use of metaphors, and the other half is "understanding" after each metaphor, or digging out the specific connotation of this metaphor, or understanding a deeper philosophy of life through this metaphor. Sincerity is the twinkling star overhead. Maybe you can't deny her existence because of this. Life without sincerity is as boring as a night without stars. (Be sincere) This is the first form: only metaphor, and then you will feel it. It is novel enough to compare "sincerity" to "twinkling stars" first. The author's brilliance is precisely because of his profound understanding behind him: the stars overhead are far away from us, but we can't deny its existence because of it, that is to say, we can't live without sincerity, otherwise "life without sincerity is as boring as a night without stars". Going back to this metaphor, we can give attention to the language, have a sense of beauty and enjoy reading it. Example 4: Honesty is a stone, knocking out the fire of a star; Honesty is fire, illuminating the road of nocturnal travel; Honesty is the road to dawn. (Honesty-the key to success) This is the second expression: metaphor, plus sentiment. Comparing "sincerity" to "stone", "fire" and "road" has shown the author's ability to control language. What is even more admirable is that the author uses a clause after each metaphor for further understanding, showing the profound meanings of "stone", "fire" and "road" respectively, thus implicitly explaining the importance of "sincerity" and calling for not abandoning "sincerity" because it is the key to success. Third, question+metaphor: first ask questions with questions, and then answer them with a metaphor or a set of metaphors. This is a common metaphor. Especially when a set of metaphors is used to form parallelism or a metaphor, and each metaphor sentence is divided into paragraphs independently, its momentum, form and effect are very satisfactory in question and answer. Example 5. What is honesty? Lively children say that honesty is two tiny fingers, and you will never go back on your word if you pull the hook; Young people in the prime of life say that honesty is a delicate credit card and a promise not to overdraw; The 80-year-old man said that honesty is a thick diary and a life contract that cannot be betrayed. (What is honesty? The author first puts forward the question of "what is honesty", and then lets readers understand what is honesty by themselves from the answers of children, young people and old people with different age characteristics and different life experiences. Children compare "honesty" to "two slender fingers" and think that "honesty" means "never going back on our word after pulling the hook"; The young man compares "honesty" to "a beautiful credit card" and thinks that "honesty" is "a promise that cannot be overdrawn"; Old people compare "honesty" to "a thick diary" and think that "honesty" is "a life contract that cannot be betrayed" At this point, the problem of "what is honesty" has been solved, which is convincing and moving. Example 6. What is honesty? Honesty is a clear spring flowing on the wasteland; Honesty is wintersweet blooming proudly in winter and winter; Honesty is an eternal lamp, like a bean when you walk at night; Honesty is a beacon for navigation in the vast sea of people ... (What is honesty? The author of this article (not the same composition as the above picture) first raised the question of "what is honesty". Then I answered with a parallelism sentence, and each clause is a metaphor sentence. The author compares "honesty" to "clear spring", "wintersweet", "magic lamp" and "lighthouse", which is novel, unique and creative, but the author is not limited to this, and adds a series of distinctive attributes in front of each car, which adds a lot of color to this metaphor. By asking and answering questions, people inadvertently realize the essence of "sincerity" and produce a torrent of momentum, which is a kind of enjoyment to read, thus making the literary talent brilliant and poetic. The artistic composition language of "parallelism" should emphasize parallelism, which can give people a magnificent feeling. Let's talk about this problem from five aspects. First, deeds are better than laws-a rose ashamed of Dada quietly gives an example 1. If I were Venus of Milos, I would never give up "beauty"; If I were Plato in ancient Greece, I would never give up "intellectuality"; If I were Shylock in Venice, I would never give up "money" ... If I were just myself, then I would never give up "honesty". ("Choice") The first sentence in Peacock Flying Southeast is a typical example of rise. Suppose I am Milos, Plato and Shylock, I will never give up "beauty", "talent" and "money" and let readers reason and understand their intentions: "I" is not the above three people, but "myself"; Being yourself will never give up being honest. It is with this juxtaposition that the author's meaning is finally expressed, just like the silent rose "shamefully". Example 2: If you lose money, you only lose part; If you lose your health, you only lose half; If you lose your integrity, you are almost bankrupt. Who is praising the emperor's new clothes? The author first writes two hypothetical complex sentences, which are excited by "losing money", "losing only a part" and "losing health" and "losing only half", so as to draw the conclusion that "losing honesty" is "poverty". Let people taste alone in a series of hypothetical situations and create momentum, so that people have to be alert from negative assumptions: in life, we must hold the "wheat field" of "integrity". Organize a parallelism sentence into three relatively complete paragraphs (cleverly) to show emphasis. Seize the eye of the marking teacher at the first time and imitate. Second, comparative induction-azaleas are everywhere. 3. It is precisely because of the lofty sentiments of a promise of a thousand dollars that the song of Num's farewell was played. Honesty-the eternal melody of China chivalrous people: It is because of the persistence of vows of eternal love that the * * * dance music of butterflies is sung. Honesty-China's lingering swan song; It is precisely because of the commitment to seek happiness for the people that the song of incorruptibility pops up. Honesty —— Honesty Law in China. The author of this example is well versed in the essentials of mathematical induction. Firstly, taking Jing Yishui's farewell as an allusion, it is concluded that "sincerity" is the eternal melody of China chivalrous people; Secondly, taking become a butterfly as an allusion, it is concluded that "sincerity" is China's lingering swan song; Finally, taking Jiao Luluhe as an example, it is concluded that "honesty" is the law that China's honest officials obey in modern society. It can be inferred that "honesty" is an indispensable ideology and morality for people in both ancient and modern society. This is the application of induction in parallelism. Example 4: What? Don't tell me you don't know how to find happiness! Alas, happiness is ... happiness is a carnation on the roadside. Because I bought it from the flower girl and gave it to my mother. Happiness is sneaking into the bookstore to see the darkness, but not buying it because of lack of money, and finally being blasted out by the shopkeeper with a wry smile. Happiness is a whim, holding a person, talking at night that both sides can't help but feel sleepy and accept the call of Duke Zhou. Happiness lies in a string of footprints on a country road, a string of flowers, a string of birds singing, and a string of small caterpillars that scare you half. There are countless definitions of happiness. There are countless ways to find happiness, depending on whether you can understand the mystery. You see, the more abstract topic of "happiness" is expressed in this way. It is a touching story written with "heart" and a beautiful song drawn with "emotion". "Selling flowers to mom" makes me happy. People often say that "giving someone a rose is more fragrant" is the truth; I want to read a book but I can't sell it. Finally, I was kicked out by the boss. I am happy, but I am happy for the harvest. There are also "a string of footprints, flowers, birds singing, little caterpillars that scare you half" in the countryside, which can bring you endless happiness. Through these descriptions of happiness, we can draw the conclusion that when you are full of troubles, don't forget to take the initiative to find happiness. People who know how to find happiness will make life better. Third, the nine-song cycle method-into the blue room, lingering fragrance for three days, for example, 5, because he, like my former and future teachers, said encouraging words to me when I felt inferior, carefully pointed out and helped me correct my mistakes; When I am lonely, I have a long talk with you to help me get out of my confused friends; A helpful friend extended a warm helping hand to me when I was helpless, which refreshed me; Strict father's loving mother patiently comforted me when I failed and shared the joy of success with me when I succeeded ... This paragraph describes the education and influence of a Chinese teacher in a mountain village. It is not surprising that the author compares teachers to "good teachers", "intimate friends", "beneficial friends" and "loving mothers" as the basis for comparison. The genius of the author in this paragraph lies in adding small parallelism with roughly the same sentence pattern in front of "mentor", "close friend", "beneficial friend" and "loving mother" respectively, rather than simple parallelism. This is like a nine-song cycle, which is rich in content, interesting, changeable in form and profound in artistic conception. If you enter the orchid's room, its fragrance will last for three days. This is a stunt. Fourth, the three-tone sigh method-the phoenix with endless charm nodded six times. Honesty is like the sea, which can hold hundreds of rivers. If you get a name, you can be famous all over the world and be immortal; If you benefit, you can learn from it and benefit from it. Only with talent can we uphold justice and embark on the right path. ("Honesty-the Foundation of Life") "Feng San nods" is an elegant gesture of elegant people serving tea in Ming Garden. A cup of tea can be filled as long as the teapot mouth clicks three times, which is an elegance. Used in parallelism, it shows that to express an emotion, we should start with a summary sentence, and then form a parallelism sentence with neat sentences and harmonious phonology, so as to achieve the effect of chanting. This example compares "sincerity" to "the sea" and "can accommodate a hundred rivers", which can be described as "singing", which is manifested in "getting a name", "benefiting" and "gaining talent" for the sake of "three sighs", and then juxtaposes two four-word phrases to create an irresistible momentum: sincerity is the foundation of our handling affairs. You can study. Example 7: Reciting Chinese from the ancient population: Chinese was called out by Zhang Fei at Dangyang Bridge; Chinese flowed from Fan Zhongyan's works, who was concerned about the country and the people. The strings of Jiangtou pipa girl in Xunyang echoed with Chinese. (Leng Xiang Fei Yu) This example first talks about the source of language, which was "expressed" from the mouth of the ancients, and then counts the story of Zhang Fei roaring in the sun in Romance of the Three Kingdoms, Fan Zhongyan's ideal of "worrying about the world first, and enjoying the world later", and Bai Juyi's hope of an empty boat in Pipa Trip. Example 8, the teacher's heart is so beautiful: I would like to be a cloud and let the sun shine; Sweet as a green leaf, setting off the flowers on the branches; Would like to be a quiet and lonely blue sky, set off a seven-color rainbow; Be a hard gardener and cultivate the autumn harvest. The teacher's personality is so noble: he is a farmer, but he scatters seeds in his heart and irrigates it with blood; It is fertile soil, but it doesn't grow a weed, so the roots of flowers grow on the body; It is a candle, but it burns itself in front of the podium and illuminates others with the flame of its own blood ... These two paragraphs express the teacher's beautiful heart and noble personality. It is refreshing to clarify the point of view of this paragraph at the beginning of the paragraph, and then elaborate it in detail with a parallelism, which not only makes the reader's heart close at the first time, but also gives people a feeling of sweeping the floor, singing and sighing. Innovation is the driving force of social progress. The wheel of human society is advancing in innovation. The ape-man came down from the tree, gradually began to walk upright, and finally began to manufacture and use labor tools. This is an innovation. Watt improved the steam engine and brought mankind into age of steam, which is an innovation; Maxwell's establishment of electromagnetic field theory is an innovation; Einstein's special and general relativity is an innovation. Comrade Deng Xiaoping put forward that building socialism with China characteristics is also an innovation ... ) This passage first puts forward a central idea that "innovation is the driving force of social progress", and then juxtaposes the tools made by apes standing upright underground, Watt's improved steam engine, Einstein's theory of relativity and Deng Xiaoping's characteristic theory to form a powerful driving force, which explains the truth that "the wheel of human society is advancing in innovation". The method of other mountains-listening to the rain with banana 10, which (in Chinese) makes us deeply feel the feelings of "the deceased is like a husband", the sadness of "frowning only, but going to the heart", the helplessness of "the geometry of drinking songs", the bleak "autumn leaves fly late, leaving residual lotus to listen to the rain" ... Example 1 1. Xia Wen was born in summer. She is neither afraid of cold nor hot. She fell in love with the enthusiasm and filariasis of summer. She likes the elegance of "the lotus leaf is infinitely colorful, and the lotus flower reflects the sun in a different color"; She likes the leisure and ambition of "flying with a little water"; I have also personally experienced the comfort of "rice flowers say harvest and listen to frogs". (Spring, Summer, Autumn and Winter) This passage says that "Xia Wen" likes the enthusiasm and filariasis in summer, which is reflected in three poems that the author feels most deeply in summer: "The lotus leaves in the sky are infinitely blue, and the colors of lotus flowers are different", "Dragonflies fly slowly with water" and "Say a good year in the fragrance of rice flowers, and listen to the sound of frogs". The author's writing techniques are changeable, and it is appropriate and innovative to summarize his feelings with "elegance", "leisure" and "coziness". These places are enough to show that the author's ability to master the language and skills of expressing ideas are all places we should learn.