How to treat Chen Jianbin's untitled love poems to angels?

Chen Jianbin's untitled love poems to angels can't even rhyme.

Stars also know poetry? Stars also write poems? Beauty Angel exposed some of her husband's poems, including modern poems and ancient poems. But the beautiful woman wrote a lot of her husband's love poems, and there were too many typos.

It is really a new thing for stars to write poems to show their love. Chen Jianbin seems to have written some poems. Look at this untitled song by Angel:

Untitled/Chen Jianbin

The new home is covered with dark clouds, and the desert Zhuozhou is deserted.

I missed my heart for a month, and I went to Yuzhou several times in my dream.

Poetry is obviously the prime minister's love poem. According to Angel, Chen Jianbin wrote many similar poems. He got to know each other from filming "Qiao Family Courtyard" and then pursued angels. Chen Jianbin's talent conquered the great beauty. At that time, Chen was a little actor and Angel was a big star. At that time, I could only sigh at beautiful women and eat poetry. Chen Jianbin made a profit.

Looking back at this poem now, as far as poetry is concerned, is Chen Jianbin's ability to write poems really enough to make "professional poets unemployed" as some comments on the Internet said?

The title of the poem Untitled is also a way to save trouble. Unlike ordinary people, it is called "quatrains" or "quatrains in seven words". Very abrupt. Because you not only write four sentences with seven words each, but also are quatrains. Chen Jianbin's poems are not quatrains.

First of all, there is no rhyme. Four sentences are written down, none of which is based on the law of leveling. Chen Jianbin should not understand this. And there is not even a basic rhyme in the poem. "Cloud", "willow" and "state" are not particular at all. No matter how free the ancient style is, the rhyme is still pressing.

Secondly, the poem is not fluent, and the "new home" is too awkward. There is also a lack of connection between poetry and poetry. At that time, "home", "desolate city" and "Yuzhou" jumped out. What does it matter? Classical poetry has its own logic and language composition, and it is not piled up by random images. Modern people often can't find the poetic feeling of the ancients when writing poems.

After reading the whole poem, I felt patchy and stuttered when reading it. How can we "make professional poets unemployed"? Moreover, how many contemporary poets can write poems to support themselves! Professional poets have long been unemployed.

Li Bai's "Emei Mountain Moon Song" is elegant and imaginative. Chen Jianbin tried to use it, but it was always rough and neither fish nor fowl, don't you think?