My father and I are separated by a mountain.
A diary, thinking of each other across the dusk.
Or, a sudden rain?
My young father is sitting on a lonely green leather train.
He does business, and business ignores him.
He drank too much and once broke two ribs.
I'm afraid of my father. in the north
In the heavy snow, my father's back is clearly visible.
The old bad temper hasn't disappeared yet.
Now, he is used to following the crowd.
Accustomed to his wife getting angry with him; The pills are getting more and more intimate.
The lonely green leather train has only memories left.
"My father and I are separated by a mountain", which sets the tone at the beginning of the poem. This tone can be said to be the suspense set by the author, and it can also be said to be the emotional band set by the author for the emotional trend of this poem. As far as poetry creation is concerned, there are both creative forms and contents, and this poem undoubtedly points to the content.
First of all, this poem has three levels of separation. One is the generation gap: "I am afraid of my father. In the north/in the heavy snow, my father's back is clear/his old bad temper has not had time to melt away "; Second, frustration: "He is in business, but his/her business didn't care about his/her drinking, and once he broke two ribs"; The third one is different: "now, he is used to following the crowd/getting used to his wife being angry with him;" Pills are getting more and more intimate/lonely, and only memories are left on the green leather train. " These three compartments give a complete account of the events and feelings of the first sentence "My father and I are separated by a mountain". Because of the above-mentioned self-created suspense and emotional band theory, all the facts in this poem have laid the groundwork for the separation of family ties. Read it again: "In the heavy snow, my father's back is clear", and write directly the awe of my father; "Pills are getting more and more cordial", which indirectly wrote pity for his father; "Only memories are left in the lonely green train", which directly depicts the memory of my father. All this is an inseparable landscape.
Although my father and I are separated by a mountain, our affection and thoughts are inseparable. It is this emotional interweaving that makes the suspense in the poem and the band full of twists and turns.
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Brief introduction of poet
Aya, a famous mountain, used to be Aya by the water, originally from Liaoning, now lives in Chongqing, a member of Chongqing Writers Association, and loves authenticity, tranquility and poetry. His works are scattered in major newspapers and periodicals, and his poetry collection Watercolor is published.
Expert introduction
Lu Hui, a poetry critic and media person, is an adjunct professor at Sanming University. His main works include Selected Poems of Lu Hui, Red Fragments, Seven Layers of Yarn, Moon on Paper, Visible Width and Witness and Defense of Poetry. He has won the Hundred Flowers Award for Literature and Art of Fujian Provincial Government, the Award for Excellent Literary Works of Fujian Province, the Third Poetry Exploration Award for China's Poetry Discovery, the Fifth China Contemporary Poetry Award for Criticism, the Third China Tianjin Poetry Award, the China (Haining) Xu Zhimo Micro-poetry Award, and the China Radio, Film and Television Award.
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